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Post by Tas on Aug 14, 2017 6:56:20 GMT -5
Absolutely amazing! I just found this now and it looks incredible! All the characters we've met so far are interesting, it's well paced ...
Can't wait for chapter 3!
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 14, 2017 10:34:57 GMT -5
Not too fast, I hope? cx I get bored of exposition pretty quickly.
Thanks Tas! I'm glad you're enjoying it so far
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 14, 2017 21:24:25 GMT -5
Alright, just got home from my friend's going away party, time to crank out the second half of chapter three *cracks knuckles* anyone around to chat?
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Post by Brownie on Aug 14, 2017 21:39:29 GMT -5
yo kinda
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 14, 2017 21:43:50 GMT -5
hey Brownie! how's it hangin?
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Post by Brownie on Aug 14, 2017 21:50:48 GMT -5
okay playing some games so it's on and off good lol
wbu hows it coming along?
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 14, 2017 21:58:31 GMT -5
ooh what kind of games are you into? my steam account is painfully dry atm
& it's coming slowly but surely. I'm having to work extra hard to avoid info dumps but I also need to explain some things, so finding a balance is a bit of a pain.
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Post by Brownie on Aug 14, 2017 22:05:25 GMT -5
dunno right now playing paladins which is like free overwatch with less salt and that's p fun
and I feel that so much. especially in the intro and with all of your new characters/ideas I wish you luck
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 14, 2017 22:19:19 GMT -5
I'll have to give that a try sometime (as an honorary Broke College Studentβ’ free is very encouraging lol)
thanks ^^ I think I need to stop overthinking it and just get it over with - hopefully it'll be easier to take stuff out if it's too much than to try and make it the right amount to begin with
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Post by Brownie on Aug 14, 2017 23:32:03 GMT -5
haha right. And my computer actually runs it unlike overwatch which drops frames and unskins characters so they're invis lol
Always a good plan.
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 14, 2017 23:52:07 GMT -5
I understand how you feel - gaming on a laptop is challenging at best
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 14, 2017 23:53:51 GMT -5
Brownieα΄α΄α΄sα΄
α΄ΚHeadphone ActorAΙͺΚRedfleckHyenafangchapter three is done! it's shorter than I wanted but I decided to move a scene to the next chapter for better flow. may end up putting it back later, idrk. anyway enjoy! critiques welcome & appreciated (as always)
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Post by Redfleck on Aug 15, 2017 1:14:52 GMT -5
I love how their voices are all so different. I can tell who the characters are when they speak. It's amazing! I would draw fan art but it would be a long time before I could draw cats well enough for this.
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do you walk in the valley of kings? do you walk in the shadow of men who sold their lives to dream?
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Post by α΄α΄α΄sα΄
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oh man, dew! this was fantastic. you're doing an awesome job at giving the rogues distinct personalities (harley feels ruthless to her core, while diggy seems like a sleazy salesman, 100%), and i love that everyone seems reluctant to tell dawnpaw what's happening not to generate plot, but because it really looks so horrible that it's hard to explain. not to mention i don't think anyone save for harley, diggy, and jagged know the full extent of what's happening, though i suspect berrytail and pine could guess. basically, fantastic chapter. c:
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 15, 2017 12:01:40 GMT -5
aw, thanks you guys!! I'm especially glad the personalities are coming off well, I put a lot into them (and Tues sleazy salesman is EXACTLY what I was going for!! lolol)
my one big concern is the logic of it. I didn't want to info dump, but I was also worried the vagueness would make the whole traveling thing seem a little strange. does Diggy's explanation make sense?
& Red, don't let perfect be the enemy of good! I'd love to see your art
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i'm back again, fellas.
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Post by AΙͺΚ on Aug 15, 2017 18:33:11 GMT -5
Β» This chapter was so good! Your writing is just amazing, and the emotions I feel while reading seem so real. I'm hyped to discover Pinewhisker's relationship with the rogues, as well as Jaggedflight's.
Also, I think I see a hint of romance plot? ovo I won't say who, but am I right? Maybe, no? Β«
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 15, 2017 22:33:28 GMT -5
ahhhh yes I'm hyped to explain all of that! lol. it's hard not to just come right out and say it but I'm sure the story will be much more interesting if I keep you guessing a while
I was wondering if anyone would pick up on that .o. I will just say one thing: it's probably not what you're thinking
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 16, 2017 12:51:44 GMT -5
oh yes, I'm very excited to get to the things you (hopefully) won't be expecting
I am curious: does anyone have any theories about Pinewhisker and/or Jaggedflight? I know there haven't been enough hints for a clear picture yet, but I'd love to know what you guys are thinking
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Post by Brownie on Aug 16, 2017 13:12:03 GMT -5
I think Pinewhisker is some sort of blood relation that defected.
and Jaggedflight is evil just for the kicks. Or for true love, who knows. As long as it's gay it's good. xp or maybe he's a creepo who has a crush on Dawn here and bragged about her and that's why all these rogues are here in the first place. Good reasons for him to shut his mouth and be uncomfortable when she's around. either way he's shady.
but if I know writers he's going to be the good guy/have good reason ;-; can I punch him now while he's still bad?
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i'm back again, fellas.
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Post by AΙͺΚ on Aug 16, 2017 13:19:22 GMT -5
I think Pinewhisker is some sort of blood relation that defected. and Jaggedflight is evil just for the kicks. Or for true love, who knows. As long as it's gay it's good. xp or maybe he's a creepo who has a crush on Dawn here and bragged about her and that's why all these rogues are here in the first place. Good reasons for him to shut his mouth and be uncomfortable when she's around. either way he's shady. but if I know writers he's going to be the good guy/have good reason ;-; can I punch him now while he's still bad? Β» That's what I was thinking! I think there may be Dawn x Jaggedflight. Or maybe it'll just be one-sided. Β«
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 16, 2017 13:39:45 GMT -5
innnnnnteresting. I'm not gonna give anything away, but it helps to know what your expectations are at this point so that I can better evaluate my hint-dropping lol. I will say one thing though: I promise you'll have plenty of opportunities to want to punch Jaggedflight
next chapter you'll learn why Dawnpaw hates Jaggedflight so much, so it'll be interesting to see whether that changes your theoires ouo
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Post by Redfleck on Aug 16, 2017 13:46:46 GMT -5
To be honest, I was expecting Jaggedflight to be a rogue sympathizerβthe foreshadowing was there.
Drawing cats is difficult for me, but maybe doing fan art for this fic is just what I need to motivate myself to learn! I'm too busy to draw though, but maybe I'll forum-commission somebody; then you'll have yourself another fan!
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 17, 2017 15:07:49 GMT -5
yeah, that part was meant to be pretty obvious, if only because Dawnpaw is so consistently suspicious of him
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Post by Brownie on Aug 17, 2017 15:13:39 GMT -5
which means he's not right bc anything an author writes that's obvious is obviously fake
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Post by dΞ±ΞΉΡy on Aug 17, 2017 22:50:46 GMT -5
wow this is so good and I'm so sad there isn't another chapter D;
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Post by Dewstripe on Aug 25, 2017 9:24:39 GMT -5
thanks c: I'm glad you like it!
sorry for my brief disappearance, I was on vacation then had to help my bf with shopping & packing for college. I have move-in next week, so idk how active I'll be for a while, but I'm still going to do my best to get the next chapter up soon
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Post by Brownie on Aug 25, 2017 9:59:19 GMT -5
goood morning!
and that's exciting
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Post by Dewstripe on Sept 9, 2017 16:08:28 GMT -5
sorry (again) for dropping off the face of the earth. I've hardly had time to breathe much less come online or write. thanks for your patience, although you're all probably busy as well. I'm not giving up on this, just going to have very slow updates.
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