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Post by ✲ριкαƒυєу✲ on Jun 10, 2017 13:50:40 GMT -5
Everyone has that first one we're rather embarrassed about. You know, the one you swore out never dig back up?
Well. I found my first ever Warriors fanfic and it killed my soul. Lol. I'll share some of my "favorite" snippets with you all as well. But first, do you all have fics you're ashamed of? If so, why were they like?
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 10, 2017 14:31:34 GMT -5
My first fan fiction was what, today, is known as Mortality. Ages ago, it was called A New Life. I'm not ashamed of it, but it did have more flaws than actually plot. I did enjoy the characters and a lot of them made it into Mortality. It is about time I shared some of that. Hum, I think I'll go get it now and post it in another topic. You all can enjoy what my spelling looked like back then. xD wcrpforums.com/thread/36639/new-life-mortality-warning-spelling |
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Post by Brownie on Jun 10, 2017 14:55:09 GMT -5
actually not really? My first was my favorite idea and favorite world, even to this day. It's a bit cliche and the writing is middle school level but I wouldn't be embarrassed about it. tbh it's probably one of my best peices I just got worse over time lol
and also you might want to check your title xDD
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Post by [~Ghost Writer~] on Jun 10, 2017 17:58:35 GMT -5
Mine was called The Fall of the Clans and it was an apocalypse fic. It's rather cringy
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Post by tiger beetle on Jun 10, 2017 18:08:53 GMT -5
I'll find SP and you guys can laugh at it
I'll post the important plot points for the rest of the "series" too
I still think the concept is salvageable but it was Not Good
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Jun 10, 2017 19:48:34 GMT -5
My first attempted fic was called "Through Ruby's Eyes". It was supposed to be about a she-cat named Ruby who was raised in a tribe where she felt that she didn't belong. She learns that her father was an outsider and decides to leave the tribe and go on a journey to find him and thus discover herself. I never made it past her birth scene, lol. It was a decent idea but my writing back then was lacking.
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Post by Katanaheart on Jun 10, 2017 19:50:25 GMT -5
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Do Spoofs count?
If so than ED was rather enjoyable and hilarious to write.
While You Claim to Know Me, my first fic, (I think.) was terrible and I'm happy it's deleted.
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Post by kinkajou on Jun 10, 2017 19:50:51 GMT -5
I don't remember much. I know the entire Clan was OCs except Bramblestar for some reason?? And the love interest had no personality
I think I deleted it though
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Post by nem on Jun 10, 2017 21:28:46 GMT -5
Mine was about four kits who were separated across the Clans and all became leader for some reason.
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Post by Mosspool on Jun 10, 2017 22:24:00 GMT -5
Mine was called Safe and Sound and some people actually might remember it (Mint maybe) and it was about three cats who saved the clans and became immortal as a reward so that they would always be around to protect them but they became so bitter about living for so long that they decided to destroy the clans so they wouldn't have to protect them anymore.
The writing was horrible and there was six points of view so it was all over the place. I had a whole five book series where each book took place during different time periods in the clan's history but they were all connected planned out though that I'd love to revisit one day.
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Post by Brownie on Jun 11, 2017 0:04:12 GMT -5
Mine was called Safe and Sound and some people actually might remember it (Mint maybe) and it was about three cats who saved the clans and became immortal as a reward so that they would always be around to protect them but they became so bitter about living for so long that they decided to destroy the clans so they wouldn't have to protect them anymore. The writing was horrible and there was six points of view so it was all over the place. I had a whole five book series where each book took place during different time periods in the clan's history but they were all connected planned out though that I'd love to revisit one day. omg I remember that !! |
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 11, 2017 0:16:03 GMT -5
Mine was called Safe and Sound and some people actually might remember it (Mint maybe) and it was about three cats who saved the clans and became immortal as a reward so that they would always be around to protect them but they became so bitter about living for so long that they decided to destroy the clans so they wouldn't have to protect them anymore. The writing was horrible and there was six points of view so it was all over the place. I had a whole five book series where each book took place during different time periods in the clan's history but they were all connected planned out though that I'd love to revisit one day. I remember it! And still love the idea! |
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Post by ᴇᴍʙᴇʀ ✴ on Jun 11, 2017 2:26:36 GMT -5
wow hey everyone i'm here for a hot second
anyway my first fan-fiction was technically this story called The Only Savior: The Forgotten Myth or smth like that it was really bad and I only wrote three chapters before I stopped so I don't necessarily count it? i remember almost nothing about it except that the main character was named Dreampaw and she had a brother named Stormpaw and a sister named...Starpaw (i can explain it was set in a clan that believed in CloudClan, not StarClan, so leaders took on the suffix -cloud not -star and i did this solely so i could have a character named Starpaw).
the first fan-fiction i actually count was called What Do You Mean I'm Crazy? and it holds a very special place in my heart i never finished it but before it was announced the forums would be closing i was going to make a reboot (i promptly lost all motivation to do so after it shut down) and in the past year i've actually been working on adapting the idea into a fantasy with human characters
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 11, 2017 2:28:36 GMT -5
EMBERSUN!  Good to see you and that you are still alive *cough cough* |
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jun 11, 2017 2:45:33 GMT -5
My first was called Lost, though it wasn't terrible, I'm kind of glad it's gone, as not many people enjoyed it anyways. My new fanfic is a improvement from Lost, which left with the old forums. It was about 3 sisters whom were separated by a flood. It was really about betrayal but did not have a lot of planning XD.
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Post by [~Ghost Writer~] on Jun 11, 2017 3:01:46 GMT -5
I just re posted my old story
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 11, 2017 3:02:25 GMT -5
𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨*pokes* No one enjoyed it?! You do realize that I saw people posting on it three years after it had 'died', right? o.o
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jun 11, 2017 3:06:24 GMT -5
Why do people remember it? XD.
But yes, I was I think 13 when I wrote it. It was under Lynxjump.
AWW It's still in my email XD.
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Post by [~Ghost Writer~] on Jun 11, 2017 3:12:17 GMT -5
Why do people remember it? XD. But yes, I was I think 13 when I wrote it. It was under Lynxjump. AWW It's still in my email XD. I was 8 to 10 when I wrote my first one >~> |
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jun 11, 2017 3:15:29 GMT -5
Want a free preview to the "LynxJump horrible writing"?
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 11, 2017 3:15:32 GMT -5
Why do people remember it? XD. But yes, I was I think 13 when I wrote it. It was under Lynxjump. AWW It's still in my email XD. Not sure? Your new one is much better, but I did like Lost.  |
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jun 11, 2017 3:17:24 GMT -5
Prepare to be amused XD. Remember, this was...horrible.
"As the splash licked the shore, blue a flicker in my sight. I felt powerful water run on me, water, lakes, rivers, some type of water. Rising, rising, rising, and becoming taller. With that splash from a powerful wave from the shivery cold icy blue lake. I reached down, clecnhed the two bundles of fur bellow me, hearing a ear-splintering meow occur from one of the fluffy balls of kitten. My kitten, my daughters. I began to run tonward the taller rocky cliffs. There, I saw him, the father of my kits, my mate, his black fur seems to be drenched, making it look vantablack. His eyes though, they mimicked what mine must look like, fear, terrifying, shock, but hope. I pushed through the water, i ran onto the shore and began to run."
JUST LOOK AT THE SPELLING ERRORS XD.
This was only paragraph on of the Prologue, the lengths were not bad. Just...everything else basically was.
Spelling, missing commas, Lowercase I-s and lastly the use of the word vantablack because it looked cool.
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Post by [~Ghost Writer~] on Jun 11, 2017 3:20:25 GMT -5
It isn't too bad : P
Here's a bit of Chapter one from mine:
Chapter 1
Blood ran down the young ginger and white she-cat. Her tears sparkled as they hran down her mangled face. "Why? Why must you do this to me Cloudtail? We're mates! Remember?" Brightheart cried.
The white tom smiled wickedly as a black collar's green lights blinked. He lifted up his claws and slashed at her once more. He purred as his claws meet the ripping skin on Brightheart's face.
Brightheart screeched in pain and looked up at the cat she once loved. "I know the collar is controlling you, but I also know you can fight it! Please try!" The she-cat pleaded.
Cloudtail grinned. "There is no hope for us, or the clan!." He took his claws and jammed them into her throat.
"Why?" Brightheart cried for the last time, then close her eye.
Brambleclaw watched the horror happen as he and Squirrelflight hid behind a large, gray bolder.
"Good Starclan! What has happened here?!? All these cats, could some be surviving Bloodclan members? I mean look at their collars!" Brambleclaw yowled to Squirrelflight.
"I don't think so, some of these cats are clan! Why do you think there killing there own kin?" The ginger she-cat mewed.
"I don't know, but we'll get to the bottom of this!" The tabby warrior growled.
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 11, 2017 3:40:59 GMT -5
*cough* I spelled chapter as capter, falling as folling, and switched between correctly using were and using ware Lynx, nothing you say can compare to what I've done myself. XP
Also, apparently, Bramblestar has dark brown straps.
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Post by [~Ghost Writer~] on Jun 11, 2017 3:44:29 GMT -5
"Straps"
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jun 11, 2017 3:46:37 GMT -5
I just love this whole part about this here.
ANOTHER PART BECAUSE WHY NOT?
"I turned to Katnisskit and growled. My growl was deap with humor and anger, mixed emotions, eh?
Katnisskit then gasped and tackled me to the side, dodging the hawk. "Thanks!" I meowed.
Katnisskit smiled "No Problem sis!" she meowed gently. We looked at some warriors as the hawk screeched. It battled with plenty of warrior, outnumbered the hawk squeaked and flew into the sky, it's wings a bit flimsy from scratches.
I smiled,mamd began to play with my sister when a paw snapped between us, the fur on the paw was white and shimmered sunlight, it was a adult cats paws, and a sheathed paw. I backed up and haven fd a wimpy adorable hiss which I heard the white cat laugh at.
A second later, Freezefur's face appeared infront of mine "You have big paws," I meowed bitterly.
Freezefur looked astonished, her light blue eyes sparkling with hurt. "
This whole scene is just XD...Especially the bold parts!)
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 11, 2017 3:48:51 GMT -5
Chapter 5. Oh. Sorry. 'Capter' 5. And I quote:
It was a tom with dark colered straps. "Who is this(insert lack of comma here)" he said looking at Whitefire. "Bramblestar, this is Hollykit. She has come to gown ThunderClan(insert lack of comma here)" Whitefire said.
I think I properly used a comma a total of twice in the first 5 chapters. This based on a fic that was mostly conversation supported.
Also, we shall not mention the 'gown', now shall we.
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jun 11, 2017 3:59:21 GMT -5
Just the whole 'eh?' thing in that fic was hilarious XD.
Oh don't worry, in mine plenty of warrior attacked a hawk, and apparently Freezefur has 'shimmered sunlight'.
Also, 'big paws' is now officially an insult according to Lost.
Oh, yes he has very dark brown straps over his tan far. He also has dark eers, and a long tall.
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jun 11, 2017 4:00:34 GMT -5
*cough* I spelled chapter as capter, falling as folling, and switched between correctly using were and using ware Lynx, nothing you say can compare to what I've done myself. XP Also, apparently, Bramblestar has dark brown straps. Oh don't worry. Were was where and where was were in Lost. Yay alternate universe not! |
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jun 11, 2017 4:07:12 GMT -5
join = gown
stripes = straps
falling = folling
so = sow (for some reason, because StarClan! Even back then, I pray I knew how to spell 'so')
very = vare
then = thin
Question marks didn't exist!
Also, !? was sometimes a thing
And those are just the amusing ones. xD
In what universe!
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