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Raintalonhisss
I'm always up to RP, but it's easier on Discord, so dm me here & we can get in touch there.
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Post by Raintalonhisss on Sept 9, 2016 21:15:50 GMT -5
I still don't have a name for her.
The girl walked along the road, trying not to bump into anyone. Tapping the ground cautiously with a staff, she shuffled along the cobbled street. She tried to use her ears as well, but there was too much noise, too much confusion... too many people...
Someone bumped her shoulder and she stumbled sideways, falling to one knee. "Agh!" She grunted, as she skinned her palm against the stone ground.
"Oh, I'm sorry!" said a female voice to her left. She felt hands on her elbow and back, lifting her up. She jerked away.
"Leave me alone," she muttered.
"No, no, let me-" said the voice. There were the hands again.
"I DON'T NEED HELP!" Snarled the girl, jerking away again. She felt the old rage building up... Trying to stand, she slipped on a wet cobblestone and lost her balance again, both hands hit the pavement. She felt the slickness of blood on the hand she had skinned. She picked herself up, and heard gasps of horror from people nearby, including the woman who had tried to help her. She reached up a shaking hand to her face, touching a smooth eyelid. She slid her hand further, and encountered the disfiguring scars that marred her face... that had stolen her sight.
She snatched her blindfold off the ground and tied it back around her eyes, which she knew were cloudy, white-blue, scarred... hideous.
She continued along the street, leaving the people who had gasped and the woman who had tried to help behind.
She didn't need any help. She didn't need to be liked.
She was still a warrior.
Whadd'ya think?
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 9, 2016 21:19:18 GMT -5
I liked it. For such a short piece, particularly with the character left unnamed, it definitely managed to paint a clear picture of her personality. Makes me want to know more of her backstory.
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 9, 2016 21:29:27 GMT -5
 you should keep writing! As I said, I'd like to know more about this character :3 |
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Non-binary
Raintalonhisss
I'm always up to RP, but it's easier on Discord, so dm me here & we can get in touch there.
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Post by Raintalonhisss on Sept 9, 2016 21:57:10 GMT -5
The sun blazed in the cloudless sky, and ravens circled with the crows and vultures overhead. That was an omen, if ever she saw one. But of what?
The girl stood on the green field, grass up to her knees. Her light leather armor made her sweat, but at least it didn't restrict her movement.
The girl stood staring into the wind, poised as if she was about to take flight. Her long brown hair streamed behind her, her brown eyes shone with a fierce rage. She appeared as a goddess of battle, ready to visit justice and wrath upon the army across the field. She smiled, and called to her battalion. "Those who threaten us are fools. Let us crush them to dust, and teach them the meaning of pain!" Such speeches like this made all the troops yell with excitement, but had no real meaning. She waited, tense.
Hold.
Hold...
There was the signal. "CHARGE!!!" She roared, racing towards the foe, drawing her sword and holding it at shoulder height. "BLOOD AND VINEGAR, AND DEATH TO THE ENEMY!" Then she was among the enemy soldiers, hacking, slashing, blood spraying. A fierce joy rose up in her, and her vision misted over with red.
She was the bloodwrathing warrior, the bringer of death, the princess of war.
She stabbed and dove, rolled and slashed, cut and killed, and killed and killed and killed.
She turned, laughing at the world, not a wound on her. An arrow hit her shoulder.
The girl woke with a gasp, and felt for her sword. She stared up at where the sky should be... Why weren't there stars?
Then she remembered. She reached up to touch her blindfold. A tear rolled down the scarred cheek.
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 9, 2016 22:13:33 GMT -5
Interesting. I like it, nice contrast between the guarded way she acts in the first piece and the happy way she rushes into conflict in this one.
Do you just have the character and her backstory or do you have a plot/story for her future?
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 10, 2016 14:26:43 GMT -5
Take your time, if/when you post more I'll read it :3 I know the feeling, no one reads my writing except my sister xD
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Raintalonhisss
I'm always up to RP, but it's easier on Discord, so dm me here & we can get in touch there.
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Post by Raintalonhisss on Sept 10, 2016 15:16:13 GMT -5
The battle was over. The cries of the wounded and the prisoners echoed from the dusty streets. The girl stood in a clean white marble room, hands behind her back, sword sheathed. Blood dripped from her hair and clothes, her hands, and from the arrow wound in her shoulder. a pool of the stuff stained the stone around her feet. She felt nauseous. Surely she hadn't spilt that much...
Of course she had. That was the point. That was why she, a girl, had such a high position in the army. That and the Queen. The Queen herself was standing with her back to the girl, staring at a map set on the table. Little wooden figures were laid out upon the map to mark the Queen's army, figures of dull grey-blue stone marked the enemy's encampments. The Queen turned, her royal blue skirts rustling, and for a moment the girl saw the woman's eyes widen in horror at the dripping red figure before her. They stared at each other for a few seconds.
The queen shook her head and addressed the girl.
"You are my finest soldier, and I am told you killed half the enemy yourself. I can't be angry. However, why must you neglect to clean yourself before coming to report?"
"I'm sorry, your majesty." Anything to get to the point.
"Somehow I doubt that." The queen gave a slight smile. "When will you be ready for your next battle?"
"When is the next battle?"
"That's my girl."
The girl squirmed inwardly at this expression. I'm not. I'm not anyone's girl, especially not yours. If I'm your girl, why do you make me fight? She knew the answer. She was too useful. And she enjoyed it. The scent of blood, the flash of swords, the screams... No, she told herself. Don't think.
"Thank you, your majesty." said the girl through gritted teeth.
"The next battle is a week hence," Said the queen. "I Expect you to act just as you did at this battle. Now go, clean yourself, and get ready to meet our allies from the North."
"But-"
"Yes you must. A woman of your station and ability must be there. And dear," said the Queen as the girl turned to walk away, "Do not shame me."
The girl sighed. "Yes, mother."
Not sure if I want to do that last bit, just trying it.
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 10, 2016 22:29:20 GMT -5
:-o the plot thickens
lol, she's a warrior princess, literally. It's an interesting plot twist. You could have the Queen be her sister/ cousin if you wanted to try something different.
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 11, 2016 20:13:28 GMT -5
It would be more of a competitive dynamic instead of a rebellious one :3 Especially if the Queen was younger than her.
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 12, 2016 13:47:44 GMT -5
Agh you made it sound so mysterious and unique I wanna read this story <3
Aw, that would be so cool ^^ kind of funny, but cool xD
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 12, 2016 14:42:38 GMT -5
noo no slapping puns are great xD I've never understood why they're considered a 'low' form of humor. I love puns <3 Particularly ones that have a huge elaborate nonsensical setup that you don't understand until someone actually says the pun lol
ooh so you actually cosplayed as the character? That's awesome :3
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Raintalonhisss
I'm always up to RP, but it's easier on Discord, so dm me here & we can get in touch there.
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Post by Raintalonhisss on Sept 12, 2016 16:13:26 GMT -5
Yeah, cosplay in the sense that I took a handkerchief and fake sword over to my friends house and went crazy with them. At one point I got stabbed with my own sword, which was fun. And (a) I meant 'I can't see' puns, and (  No no no puns are great I just make really really bad ones. |
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 12, 2016 21:28:02 GMT -5
It's still fun to act out the character tho
No I got that you weren't making puns about slapping, the 'no slapping' was just me saying I'm not going to slap you for making a pun xD
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Post by *Ɗαɾƙρσσℓ* on Sept 15, 2016 20:13:38 GMT -5
*lurks* will there be more eventually? :3
It's fine if this is all you wanna post/if the next bit won't be for a while, I'm just curious cause I like this character <3
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Post by кєѕтяєℓ on Sept 17, 2016 17:46:26 GMT -5
These are actually really neat! I like the character, she seems interesting, and the story around her makes me want to read more. I'd love to see her story as a book. ;)
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Yay!!!
you should keep writing! As I said, I'd like to know more about this character :3
No no no puns are great I just make really really bad ones.
