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Post by Viperstrike on Mar 7, 2024 13:45:46 GMT -5
I had a dream that Hollyleaf didn’t exist, and instead only Jayfeather and Lionblaze were born. Leafpool told Crowfeather right away. He asked Leafpool to take Breezekit and raise him as his own, realizing him and Nightcloud had made a mistake and weren’t fit to be mates or parents. So Leafpool took Breezekit, and had Squirrelflight raise all three as her own. Breezepelt grows up in ThunderClan none the wiser. When Breezepelt finds out the truth, that he isn’t from ThunderClan, that he’s not in the prophecy, and that Squirrelflight and Brambleclaw aren’t his parents, his brothers are only his half brothers, he snaps. He starts training in the Dark Forest so he can get revenge on everyone.
I thought this was a really interesting idea.
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Post by silverstarpenguin on Mar 7, 2024 14:45:33 GMT -5
It is an interesting idea...It would bring up the "born evil" question Darktail had faced. Without Crowfeather ignoring him and Nightcloud teaching him to stand up for himself (in an excesive way, I might add), there would've been no bad influence on him and he would've been 100% responsible for his actions, unlike the situation in the books.
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Post by Viperstrike on Mar 7, 2024 14:55:38 GMT -5
It is an interesting idea...It would bring up the "born evil" question Darktail had faced. Without Crowfeather ignoring him and Nightcloud teaching him to stand up for himself (in an excesive way, I might add), there would've been no bad influence on him and he would've been 100% responsible for his actions, unlike the situation in the books. I feel like in this situation, he would become evil out of a sense of abandonment. Why did Crowfeather and Nightcloud abandon me? Why did Leafpool and Squirrelflight lie, and pretend to be something they weren’t? Why do my half-brothers get to be in a prophecy, but I don’t? Am I not good enough? I also think the Ashfur situation wouldn’t help, because he’d take it as another case of betrayal by someone he thought was a Clan mate. The Dark Forest would prey upon all of this manipulating him.
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Post by -:*“*};windwisp;{*”*:- on Mar 9, 2024 12:13:32 GMT -5
I like your AU Viperstrike,but what if we introduced Hollyleaf back into the mix and make her not only a Windclan cat,but also the third cat in the prophecy. So first Leafpool would get a Prophecy saying her kits would hold the power of the Stars in their paws,but the black one would follow a trail to her end if she stayed in Thunderclan. Meanwhile, Nightcloud’s kit are born weak and all of them are born weak, but Barkface is given a prophecy saying that a exchange with kits must happen in secret,or the Crow’s kits will both fall on bad path’s.Barkface tell’s Crowfeather and Crowfeather regretfully tell’s Barkface about Leafpool and her kit’s.Barkface is shocked, but tell Crowfeather that Starclan must want this. So they make a plan to fake the only living kit (Breezekit)death,and then while helping the Barkface,Crowfeather will “find” a kit (Hollykit) and will biring her back to the clan where she will be raised by Nightcloud and Crowfeather.Breezepelt will keep the same back story you have for him Viperstrike,but Hollyleaf will grow into a respectable warrior, and will have a girlfriend in Heathertail. She will be shocked by what Ashfur will reveal in this AU, but since she doesn’t know that it is Crowfeather the dad of her,Jay,Lion,and Breezepelt because Ashfur doesn’t know that. What she will be angry about is Breezepelt killing Ashfur right in front of all the clans which he is exiled for right then and there for(though he dose come back when he calms down and when Jayfeather,Lionblaze,and Squirrelfilght explain why he did it.). Hollyleaf is mad that Breezepelt broke the code and is even more mad when he is at the gathering 2 moons after the one he murder someone.
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