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Post by kingfoot on Aug 26, 2023 17:37:24 GMT -5
Prologue:
Tigerclaw stood on top of sunningrocks, with Oakheart, a riverclan tom, struggling beneath him.
"Tigerclaw stop!" Redtail said as he raced up behind Tigerclaw.
Why? He was trespassing on Thunderclan territory, so he needs to die!" Tigerclaw growled.
"The battle is over, let him go!" Redtail responded.
"No!" "Do I have to force you to?"
"Fine!" Tigerclaw got off of Oakheart and stalked away. "Thank you Redtail, I am forever in your debt," Oakheart said.
"Well, he doesn't have much life left!" Tigerclaw appeared from the bushes and shoved Redtail into Oakheart, and they both went toppling down sunningrocks and fell into the river. Both cats were swept away and Tigerclaw stood triumphantly on top of sunningrocks. Suddenly, something moved in the grass but it was too dark to see what it was. "That cat must have heard everything! No matter, I will find that cat and then nothing will stop me from becoming the leader of Thunderclan!
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 26, 2023 19:28:31 GMT -5
Chapter 1: Rusty sat on his housefolks fence with his friend Smudge, and said "Isn't it beautifal Smudge?"
"What?" "The forest, obviously!" Rusty mewed. "No, the forest is scary! I heard that there was an evil cat named Scourge out there, and he kills cats for fun! "I don't think any cat would be that evil." "But he is!" "Well if you say he's so evil, I'll go find out for myself." "Rusty no!" But it was too late. Rusty had already hopped off the fence and walked into the forest. He immediately felt at home. He kept walking but after a while, he heard the undergrowth rustling. "Who's there?" Rusty growled, trying to sound as fierce as he could. A huge brown tabby tom suddenly burst out of the bracken and landed on top of Rusty.
"Oh, look it's a little bitty kittypet! Run back to your twoleg, if you survive!" The tom hissed.
"Tigerclaw! Get off of the kittypet"! The voice came from a golden tabby tom who walked out of the bracken. A gray-furred she-cat and a young gray tom followed.
"No, Lionheart, he was tresspassing on clan land!"
"Let him go! He's just a kittypet, and remember Tiny?" The gray she-cat asked.
"Yes, I remember Tiny, I remember that I injured him so much that he's probably dead now!" Tigerclaw said.
"Tigerclaw, let the kittypet go now, and that is an order from your clan leader!" The gray she-cat growled. "Fine. Your lucky you survived kittypet." Tigerclaw growled and then stalked away. " I'm sorry about that, My name is Bluestar and this is Lionheart and Graypaw." " The other tom was Tigerclaw, and I don't know what's gotten into him lately." Well, have a safe journey back to your twoleg's! The three cats turned around and started walking away.
"Before you leave, who are you cats? Rusty asked curiously.
"We are Thunderclan, the bravest clan in the forest!" Graypaw answered. Then, the three cats disappeared into the bracken. Rusty's head was spinning too much for him to go back to his housefolks right away, so he decided to go for a walk to clear his head. He finally stopped near a rushing river, and he laid down in a patch of tall grass and closed his eyes. He awoke when he heard the sound of screeching cats. He stood up and saw a lot of cats fighting in front of a pile of rocks. He recognized Bluestar, Tigerclaw, and Graypaw among the battling cats. He wanted to run away but he couldn't because he was to transfixed by the sight of the battle. After a while, a cat who's jaw looked like it was broken screeched and about half the cats streamed away into the night. Then the other group of cats, including Bluestar and Graypaw turned around and headed the other way. Somehow, none of them noticed Rusty hiding in the grass. After that all was quiet except for one thing. Tigerclaw had stayed behind and he noticed a cat peeking it's head out of the rocks who was a cat that Rusty recognized from the cat with the broken jaw's group. Tigerclaw noticed the cat too and flew at it. Tigerclaw pinned the cat down and said, "Hello, Oakheart." Then another cat came from Thunderclan's side and started meowing words at Tigerclaw that Rusty couldn't hear. Tigerclaw finally got off Oakheart and went back towards Thunderclan's side but burst out again seconds later and rammed into the ginger tom that had come from Thunderclan's side. That tom tumbled into Oakheart and they both fell into the river. After that, Rusty could take no more. He stood up and ran, ran for his life.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 27, 2023 6:49:57 GMT -5
I read the Prologue and Chapter 1 in one sitting, it was an interesting read. Firepaw witnessing the murder is something I hadn't expected and I don't think read before. The mention of Tiny was definitely a good choice! Excited to read more!
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 27, 2023 12:15:10 GMT -5
Chapter 2:
Rusty finally stopped running when he reached four trees that were around a large rock. He hopped up onto the rock and laid down.
He awoke in a large field with stars shimmering everywhere. "Where am I?" Rusty asked.
"You are in starclan." A voice came from behind him.
Rusty spun around and stared at the starry ginger tom who had spoken to him, and then asked "Who are you, and what is Starclan?"
"I am Thunderstar, the first leader of Thunderclan." The cat said.
"So is Bluestar Thunderclans leader now?" Rusty asked.
"Yes, but I must go now. I will teach you more if you join Thunderclan!" Thunderstars last words to Rusty echoed like a boom of thunder and Rusty awoke on top of the large rock. He jumped off the rock and was about to go look for Thunderclan, when a mouse came out of the brambles. Rusty had never tasted mouse before, and he wanted to, so he decided to hunt. He got low to the ground and walked quietly towards the mouse, but as he was about to pounce, a gray cat burst out of the brambles and grabbed the mouse.
"Back off loner, the cat hissed, this prey is mine!" Rusty backed away, but then he realized the cat was Graypaw. "You're that kittypet that Tigerclaw attacked yesterday!" Graypaw mewed, recognition flashing in his eyes.
"Kittypet? Where?" Lionheart said as he came through the brambles.
"It's me. The kittypet Tigerclaw attacked." Rusty mewed quietly.
"Why are you here kittypet? This is sacred clan land!" Graypaw growled, hostility in his mew.
"Because I followed you cats last night and I saw cats battling by the river." A small gasp came from Graypaw. Rusty continued and said, "Then I saw a cat named Oakheart fall into a river with another cat I didn't know, then after that I ran here and had a dream about a cat named Thunderstar, and he told me to join Thunderclan.
This time, Lionheart was the one to gasp. "Thunderstar? Well then you should come with us!"
"But Lionheart, he's a kittypet!" Graystripe complained.
"I know that Graypaw, but he had a dream about Starclan, and I saw his near perfect hunting crouch. Now come on, it's time to go back to camp." Lionheart walked back through the brambles, and Graypaw shot him a nasty look and then followed. Rusty followed after them and on their walk back, he took in all of the sights and scents of the forest. When they reached what Lionheart had called the "camp" Rusty saw a lot of cats and when they saw him, they started whispering angrily. Rusty noticed Tigerclaw and Tigerclaw showed him an evil glare. He followed Lionheart to a den for a cat. "Wait, here." Lionheart mewed and went inside the den.
Bluestar came out of her den with Lionheart a few minutes later and said, "All cats old enough to catch their own prey gather benath the Highrock for a clan meeting!" All the cats moved towards the large rock that Bluestar had just hopped onto. "It has come to my attetion that there is a kittypet that wants to join the clan." Gasps came from the cats below. Lionheart leaned up to Bluestar and whispered somethinng in her ear. Bluestar let out a shrill shriek and said, "No! Oakheart can't be dead!" The cats on the ground exchanged weird looks. Bluestar seemed to recollect herself and said, "Redtai has fallen into the river, and the new deputy will be Lionheart."
"Lionheart, Lionheart!" Cheered most of the cats below but Rusty noticed that Tigerclaw, a dark gray tabby tom and a pale brownn tabby tom weren't cheering.
Bluestar flicked her tail to signal them to stop cheering, and then mewed loud enough that all the cats could hear, "Lionheart has said that the kittypet has had a dream of Thunderstar telling him to join Thunderclan. I belive him, but to prove he can be in a clan, he will do a series of trails that start tommorow. If he finishes that well enough, then he can become a true apprentice of Thunderclan."
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 27, 2023 18:07:40 GMT -5
Chapter 3:
When Rusty awoke at sunrise the next morning, it took him a while to remember where he was. He finally realized where he was when he looked over at Graypaw. The gray apprentice's attitude had changed towards Rusty, he had treated him more like a friend now. His other denmates, Dustpaw, Sandpaw, and Ravenpaw all acted a bit differently toward him. Sandpaw seemed fine with him, Ravenpaw, the medicine cat Spottedleaf's apprentice, was very anxious but very friendly. Dustpaw on the other hand seemed to absolutely loath him. He had hissed at Rusty several times when he came in the night before. Cherrypaw and Chestnut paw paid him basically no attention. Rusty got up and went out of the den to find Bluestar and Lionheart. Thunderstar had not spoken to him the night before, Rusty assumed it was because he wasn't a real apprentice. He found Bluestar sharing a vole with Spottedleaf, and the two she-cats looked very deep in conversation. Spottedleaf noticed Rusty, and said one last word to Bluestar, then got up and walked away. "Rusty, you will do three trials. One for hunting, one for battle techniques, and one for actual battle. You will come with me to do your hunting trial." Bluestar mewed as she padded out of camp and into the wild.
"Bluestar look! Squirrel!" Firestar dropped his mouse and dropped into a crouch and stalked toward the squirrel. He had caught two mice and a thrush already. He pounced on the unsuspecting squirrel and gave it a swift bite to the neck.
"Good catch. Now it's time to see you're battle techniques. You'll be practicing against Dustpaw." Bluestar mewed as Dustpaw came out of the ferns.
"I'm going to destroy you, kittypet!" Dustpaw growled as he lept at Rusty. Rusty instinctively ducked and rolled and popped up behind Dustpaw. Dustpaw turned around and then Rusty battered his muzzle in a flurry of paws. Dustpaw yowled and swung his unsheathed claws across Rusty's side.
Rusty yowled in pain and Bluestar shouted "Dustpaw, you're claws are supposed to be sheathed! You could have really hurt Rusty!"
"I don't care, he's a kittypet." Dustpaw mewed under his breath.
"I heard that! You are on elder duty for the next moon!" Bluestar yowled angrily. Dustpaw shot Rusty a nasty look and then walked back through the ferns."I don't know why he's acting like that. But let's go back to the camp now. It's time for your third and final trial; Battling."
Back in camp, Rusty asked, "Bluestar, who will I be battling?"
"I'm going to let Tigerclaw decide." Bluestar mewed back. As soon as he heard that, he knew that it would be a hard battle. Bluestar called a clan meeting and told the clan of how Rusty's trials had been going, and then she called Tigerclaw up onto the Highrock. "Tigerclaw, who do you choose for Rusty to battle?" Bluestar asked.
Tigerclaw looked around the gathered cats and then said, "I choose Longtail!" The pale brown tabby tom that Rusty had seen yesterday stepped up and sneered, "Let's do this, kittypet!" Rusty hopped down from the rock and faced Longtail. Longtail screeched and landed on top of him. Rusty batted up with his paw and heard Longtail yowl in pain. Then Rusty flew at Longtail and tackled him to the ground. Longtail snapped his jaws and they grabbed Rusty's collar.
"Enough! The kittypet has lost his collar in a battle for his honor. He has completed the three trials successfully and will become a Thunderclan apprentice!" Bluestar yowled. The cats cheered, everyone except Tigerclaw, Longtail, Dustpaw, and the dark gray tabby tom from the day before. Bluestar called for quiet and then beckoned Rusty up onto the Highrock. "I rename you Firepaw, for your flame-colored pelt. Apprentices receive mentors so your mentor will be... Tigerclaw."
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 28, 2023 19:20:13 GMT -5
Chapter 4:
"Now it is time for Oakheart's vigil!" Bluestar shouted after Firepaw had reluctantly touched noses with Tigerclaw.
"You mean Redtail, right?" Rosetail who was one of the elders called from the crowd.
"Yes of course! I just misspoke." Bluestar responded. "Since we don't have his body we will pretend his body is lying in the middle of the hollow." After she had said that, the cats gathered in a circle and lay down.
"What am I supposed to do?" Firepaw asked Spottedleaf, who was sitting next to him.
"You go and lay down with the other cats, dearie." Spottedleaf responded as Firepaw basked in her flowery scent. He lay down in between Graypaw and Ravenpaw as the cats most important to Redtail, like his sisters Spottedleaf and Willowpelt, and his apprentice, Dustpaw. After that, Firepaw slowly fell into a deep sleep. he awoke in Starclan and saw Thunderstar.
"Welcome," the great Thunderclan leader said, all three of you." Firepaw looked over and saw Graypaw and Ravenpaw.
"Huh. You weren't lying about Thunderstar." Graystripe mewed happily.
"Ww-why are we h-here Thunderstar-r?" Ravenpaw mewed anxiously.
"Because I need your help." Thunderstar mewed. "You three must convince Bluestar that Tigerclaw killed Redtail and Oakheart."
"Why?" Graystripe asked.
"Because he must be brought to justice!" Thunderstars voice boomed like the thunder he was named after. "You two may go now." Thunderstar flicked his tail at Ravenpaw and Graypaw and they both disappeared.
"Thunderstar, why are you teaching me the ways of the clans? From what Graystripe has said, your mentor is supposed to teach you that! Firepaw exclaimed.
Thunderstar sighed and then said, "As you probably can tell from my tone and the way I talk about him, I do not trust Tigerclaw. Now, there are four clans in the forest, Thunderclan, Riverclan...
Firepaw woke with a prod in the side. Thunderstar had just been teaching him how to climb trees, and he was mad about being woken up. He looked up and saw that it was Tigerclaw. "Time for patrol, kittypet." The tabby growled.
The patrol was made up of 6 cats, Firepaw, Dustpaw, Tigerclaw, Darkstripe (The other tom Firepaw had seen not cheering) Whitestorm ( A white tom) and Willowpelt (Redtail's other sister.) Tigerclaw was leading and he said they were checking the Shadowclan border. "What scents can you pick up kittypaw?" Tigerclaw sneered. Firepaw rolled his eyes and opened his mouth. He picked up scents of mouse, squirrel, the Thunderpath (they had one in the twolegplace) and an odd scent of cat.
Firestar realized it was Shadowclan, one of the clans Thunderstar had told him about. He recognized the scent from the leader's training. "Tigerclaw, Shadowclan scent on our land!" Firepaw yowled.
"How many?" Tigerclaw growled as he sprinted up to him.
"More than our patrol!" Firepaw meowed back.
"Run back to the camp and get more warriors! Hurry! Whitestorm shouted. Firepaw raced through the trees and toward the direction of the camp.
When he reached the camp, Graypaw came flying out of the elders den and asked, "Firepaw what's wrong? Are you hurt? Is there a battle? I'm your friend you can talk to me!" For some reason, Graypaw winked when he said, friend.
Firepaw was so winded that he could only say a few words and they were, "Shadowclan. Border. Battle. Need Warrior."
"What did he say?" Longtail asked.
"He said, We're in a battle with Shadoclan at the border and we need more warriors!" Graypaw mewed. "Now come on, let's go help!" Graypaw, Firepaw, Longtail, Bluestar, Mousefur (a dusky brown she-cat), Runningwind (a light brown tabby tom), and Spottedleaf raced out of camp and towards the border. When they reached the border, it looked like Shadowclan was just barely winning, Tigerclaw was grappling with a white tom with black paws, Whitestorm and Darkstripe were battling a tom with a twisted tail, and Willowpelt was fighting with a russet-colored she-cat. Lionheart let out a screech and flew into the battle. The rest of the cats followed, and after a few minutes, it seemed like Thunderclan was winning. Firepaw noticed a kit in the middle of the battle. He ran over to the kit and he was surprised when it attacked him. He just brushed the kit off and let it go. All of a sudden he heard a screech and saw the cat with the twisted tail bite Bluestar on the neck and he saw her fall to the ground. Then, the cat with the twisted tail ran away and the Shadowclan cats followed.
Firepaw ran over to Bluestar and saw that she was dead. "Oh, no!!" Firestar wailed "Bluestar is dead!"
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Post by Firestar on Aug 28, 2023 19:45:16 GMT -5
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 28, 2023 20:27:33 GMT -5
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Post by {Azure} on Aug 28, 2023 22:13:00 GMT -5
kingfoot i love graypaw being a comedic genius with that wink at the worst possible time (no i'm not being sarcastic i laughed so hard i almost fell out of my chair)
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Post by Deleted on Aug 29, 2023 6:11:48 GMT -5
This is really cool!
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 29, 2023 15:45:39 GMT -5
Thunderclan Allegiances in Rewrite Start of Book! Thunderclan Leader: Bluestar- Blue Gray She-Cat tinged with silver around her muzzle Deputy: Redtail- Small tortoiseshell tom with distinctive ginger tail Medicine Cats: Spottedleaf-Beautiful tortoiseshell she-cat with the dappled coat Apprentice, Ravenpaw- Small, skinny black tom with a tiny white dash on his tail and a white tail tip. Warriors: Lionheart- Magnificent Golden Tabby tom with thick fur like a lion's mane Apprentice, Graypaw- Long Haired solid gray tom Tigerclaw-Large Brown Tabby Tom with unusually long claws Whitestorm-Big White Tom Darkstripe- Sleek Black and Gray tabby tom Longtail- Pale tabby tom with dark black stripes. Apprentice, Dustpaw- Dark Brown Tabby tom Runningwind- Swift Tabby Tom Apprentice, Cherrypaw- Ginger and White she-cat Mousefur- Small Dusky Brown she-cat Willowpelt- Very pale gray she-cat with unusual blue eyes Apprentice, Chestnutpaw- Reddish-Brown Tom Queens: Frostfur- Beautiful white she-cat with blue eyes Brindleface: Pretty tabby she-cat Goldenflower- Pale ginger she-cat Speckletail- Old pale tabby she-cat Elders: Halftail- Big brown tabby tom with half his tail missing Smallear- Gray tom with small ears Patchpelt: Small Black and white tom One-Eye- Pale gray she cat with one eye missing Dappletail- She-cat with dappled coat Rosetail- Gray tabby she cat with pinkish-orange tail Kits: Thornkit- Golden brown tabby tom with pale blue eyes Brightkit- White she-cat with ginger patches and blue eyes Cinderkit-Small Dark Gray she-cat with pale blue eyes Brackenkit- Golden brown tabby tom with amber eyes. Fernkit- Pale gray she-cat with dark spots and green eyes Ashkit- Pale gray tom with dark spots and dark blue eyes Tulipkit- Pale gray tom with dark spots and blue eyes
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Post by {Azure} on Aug 29, 2023 15:46:53 GMT -5
but please tell me that wasn't the gay panic, bc as hilarious as it was it seams like he couldn't speak due to being out of breath, not graypaw.
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 29, 2023 15:55:37 GMT -5
don't worry, we'll have double gay panic soon
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Post by {Azure} on Aug 29, 2023 16:32:41 GMT -5
yeeeeahhhhh!!!!
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Post by kingfoot on Aug 29, 2023 18:18:51 GMT -5
Chapter 5:
Lionheart and Spottedleaf raced over and took a look at Bluestar. "Was she on her last life?" Spottedleaf asked.
"What do you mean, last life?" Firepaw asked curiously.
Spottedleaf looked away from Bluestar quickly and answered, "When they become leaders, they receive nine lives which means they can die eight times, but if they die nine times, they truly die and join Starclan. Also-." Suddenly Spottedleaf collapsed.
"Spottedleaf!" A voice cried from behind Firepaw. Bluestar ran to where Spottedlaf lay. "Are you okay?"
"Yes," Spottedlaf croaked "Just exhausted."
"Let's get you back to camp." Bluestar mewed.
"Before you do, can you tell me how many lives you have left?" Firepaw asked.
"No!" Bluestar snapped. Firestar took a step back, surprised by her harsh tone. "I'm sorry. It is just hard to lose a life." Bluestar confessed, "Now, we have to get Spottedleaf treated!"
The next day, Ravenpaw, Cherrypaw, and Runnigwind. walked up to Firepaw. Ravenpaw asked Firepaw, "Do you want to come looking for herbs with us? It's to let Spottedleaf rest after what happened yesterday."
"I would if I could, but I'm supposed to be training with Tigerclaw." Firepaw said gloomily.
"It'll be fine, just tell him you were helping look for herbs." Runningwind mewed.
"Alright!" Firepaw said brightly as he hopped up and followed the group of cats. Pretty soon they found lots of tansy, borage, and marigold. Cherrypaw had even found watermint. The cats were about to head back to camp when something leaped at Ravenpaw. He shrieked and dropped the tansy he was carrying and said "Big tall, hot man cat!"
"What did he say?" Cherrypaw asked. The attacker finally got off of Ravenpaw and said, "My name is Barley, and I'm sorry for attacking you, I just thought you were a giant rat."
"Get off our land, loner!" Runnigwind shouted and he bared his teeth.
"Fine! I'm going! Just let me give you my number." Barley said and then he whispered something in Ravenpaw's ear. "Also, watch out for rats. They've been bad lately." With that, the loner walked away.
The cats started walking back to camp, and Runningwind asked, "Ravenpaw what did Barley whisper to you?"
"I couldn't understand anything he said," Ravenpaw mewed, but Firepaw noticed he seemed more fidgety than usual. Firepaw also noticed what looked like a pair of beady black eyes pocking out of the bushes. He kept walking, but he kept hearing rustling behind him. Finally, it was too much, and he turned around and saw an entire horde of rats behind him.
"Runningwind, rats!" Firepaw shouted as the rats started leaping towards him.
"Run back to the camp and get help, Ravenpaw!" Running wind shouted as he and Cherrypaw jumped into the battle. Firepaw swung his paws and the rats slowly started to thin out and finally, there were no rats left. Ravenpaw burst through the trees and Lionheart, Mousefur, Willowpelt, and Chestnutpaw followed. Chestnutpaw took a look around and then saw Cherrypaw lying on the ground. He ran over to his sister with a horrified expression on his face. "No, Cherrypaw! Cherrypaw is dead!"
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Post by {Azure} on Aug 30, 2023 6:43:25 GMT -5
cats have phones? cool ig
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