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Post by Midnightcacoon loves Sunbeam on Oct 2, 2021 19:38:34 GMT -5
What would make you like the ship, and if you do like the ship, what would have made it even better?
My thoughts (bristle): - Developing bristlefrost more
I feel like after Veil of Shadows bristlefrost is mostly just not necessary, it would be better if she possibly gained some confidence and helped bring her clan closer together. I mean, her friend rootspring was getting a lot of character development and it just makes her look bland compared to him and shadowsight.
- Show more scene's of her growing to like rootspring before she confesses to him
My thoughts (root):
- Maybe have him talk to his dad about his crush or something. Actually pretty good romantic character for bristlefrost
Anyway, what are your thoughts on how the ship could be improved?
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Post by ᏞᎪᎠᎽ Ꮎf fᎪᏁᎠᎾms ミ☆ on Oct 2, 2021 20:11:30 GMT -5
root's side is fine as it is. it's literally only bristle's side thats the major, glaring problem. she never thinks about him pre-confession. and if she does, it's not romantic or longing. it's just normal platonic stuff. build up her thoughts and inner monologue. make her confused and start to compare root with stem to show us she is starting to think of root that way back. make her confusion about her feelings towards both toms more intense as we get close to the confession scene. then when she confesses, she even confuses herself and she thinks she must have blurted it out because of frustration building up in her and she tries to backpedal, telling him she didnt mean it, but inside we know she did. then from that moment on, she allows herself to feel those things for root and it continues to develop from there like in canon. but with these changes, it'll have an actual foundation
as root x bristle is right now in canon, it has NO foundation on bristle's side AT ALL. her confession literally comes out of nowhere with ZERO build up or tension within her POVs. my changes would at least give her a foundation and development that LEADS to the confession scene, thus giving the ship valid foundation to go on with, regardless of how it ends.
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Post by ❅Maplefrost❅ on Oct 2, 2021 21:25:01 GMT -5
There's really not much I'd probably change about it personally? Honestly, I just saw Bristlefrost as a recipromantic or something along those lines. I think the only thing I'd change is them choosing their clans in the end, cause I'm not really fond of the idea of them leaving their own clans, or having a secret relationship.
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Post by 𝕱𝖑𝖚𝖙𝖙𝖊𝖗𝖋𝖆𝖑𝖑 on Oct 3, 2021 9:52:22 GMT -5
I'm just tired of having a forbidden relationship in every arc at this point (except DotC). So my fixing method of the RootBristle romance would simply be for them to break up and both decide to be loyal to their Clans instead.
Edit: Or for the Clans to abolish that rule from the Warrior Code so it doesn't become a source of drama ever again.
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