Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
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Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 19:41:40 GMT -5
I just read your post, too. xD
I may have time when I get up to get back on and go through posts and post mine. I'm slowly working on Indi's.
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Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
Name Colour
ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁
Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
Easing back in
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 19:44:05 GMT -5
Rain, I can take Loony's too ^^; ;-; Thank you kind person. I am happy and sad that this is somewhat popular. I'm happy because everyone wants to be involved and help and it'll be less that I take on and I have to force myself not to be a leaderzilla and this would get done without me overworking. I'm sad because I'm on a completely different time zone and have to sleep in a few minutes. Why? WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME? YOU'RE TEARING ME APART!
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Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
Name Colour
ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁
Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
Easing back in
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 19:46:33 GMT -5
Okay! Here's mine, featuring Greyhawk! And a few characters I threw in, so it isn't as bare-bones o3o Greyhawk - Before Dawn - WindClan Camp Quiet. The whole camp was quiet. As Greyhawk stood outside the entrance of the makeshift warriors den, he found not a single soul was awake. 'Typical...' He grumbled in his mind, stalking over to examine the fresh-kill pile. Only a scrawny old rabbit, vole and small blackbird remained. The ground below them was still damp from the last night's rain, when the cats had to retreat to their dens, hidden in old fox and badger burrows. He let out a small 'hmph' before walking towards the Tallrock. Before talking a second step, he hesitated. Was it really right to wake his father this early? Stormstar was weak, and although he hated to admit it, elderly and frail. He would need his sleep. He turned, emotionless, and walked back towards the den. Sticking his head within the dark depths, he swiftly picked out a few cats he could see in the darkness. That was Nightwhisker, Whiteheather, and Cranestep. Cranestep would bring her apprentice, of course, which would be perfect for a small hunting patrol on the western moors. Mossytail, Grousequill, Birdcry and Harefoot would be a good border patrol. He quickly went over, prodding each cat on the flank. "It's time to wake up, you lot! Patrols!" He told them gruffly, making sure they were all aware of the situation before walking out of the burrow and over to the apprentice's sleeping place. He would need to find Daisypaw for the patrol, after all, she was Cranestep's apprentice. "Daisypaw?" He spoke into the entrance, "It's time to wake up for a patrol!" He growled into the den. He disliked apprentices, especially younger ones who acted like kits. It just irritated him. They were apprentices, they should act their rank. Even so, he supposed it was a bit wrong to despise such behavior, after all, they were young and would learn. But it still annoyed him to see an apprentice on hunting duty chasing a leaf or moth. Hopefully he wouldn't have to deal with such... frustrating behavior on his patrols today. It's pretty bad, not much muse at the moment owo' Like with other posts, there are some grammar mistakes, but nothing too bad. I assume it's the rushing to get this posted before your laptop restarts. I'd also add a few details here and there to add a little bit more imagery. Now you can have Wind.
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Post by ᴏᴡʟ on Jul 30, 2016 19:46:46 GMT -5
-sitting in my corner and contemplating why everyone has such gorgeous writing styles-
-single sparkling tear rolls down cheek-
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jul 30, 2016 19:47:04 GMT -5
Sand: Thanks, though if you want I can make a new one!))
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jul 30, 2016 19:49:04 GMT -5
@rainleaf&Sandclaw: Am I accepted?
Also, thanks again for the critique Sandclaw!
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Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
Name Colour
ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁
Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
Easing back in
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 19:50:34 GMT -5
owl: Hush. You're amazing. Take my compliment! ℛ𝒶𝒾𝓃𝒻𝑜𝑜𝓉. ⛈️: Yes, you are. You can for extra criticism, but you can just PM me that. sand: Choose. A. Clan. I'll probably pick either River or Thunder. So please, choose. I will not sleep until you do.
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jul 30, 2016 19:55:15 GMT -5
@rainleaf: Accepted for Clan or no clan? Also thanks, I might end up doing that :3. (I seriously do not mean to come off impatient, please forgive me if I do sounds impatient) EDIT: Oh...Okay... Have patience Lynx Random third person talking owl: You are good! Great even! Also my writing style...isn't really all that great(Or maybe it's just me but...), :3, so you're good.
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Post by Kitsune on Jul 30, 2016 19:55:18 GMT -5
Toriel! It's wonderful to see you again! Hello! c: Hey Indi! It's good to see you again too and I seriously miss you!
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Post by Fallen Stars on Jul 30, 2016 19:57:50 GMT -5
[ x - - Oh, I didn't realize that people would look over the roleplay examples~ owo I can repost mine if needed. Or, it's one the first page.
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Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
Name Colour
ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁
Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
Easing back in
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 19:58:29 GMT -5
@rainleaf: Accepted for Clan or no clan? Also thanks, I might end up doing that :3. (I seriously do not mean to come off impatient, please forgive me if I do sounds impatient) EDIT: Oh...Okay... Have patience Lynx Random third person talking owl: You are good! Great even! Also my writing style...isn't really all that great(Or maybe it's just me but...), :3, so you're good. Patience, young grasshopper. xD If you do, I may not respond today/tonight. Sand, pick a Clan so I can sleep, why are you so mean? ;-;
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Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
Name Colour
ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁
Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
Easing back in
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 19:59:13 GMT -5
[ x - - Oh, I didn't realize that people would look over the roleplay examples~ owo I can repost mine if needed. Or, it's one the first page. Nah, it's alright. We'll get to it. ;D
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Post by Deleted on Jul 30, 2016 20:00:28 GMT -5
Curses! I was a dunce and forget that I should probably click on page 5.
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Post by ⁻ ⁻ ☾ ᵇˡᵘᵉ ᵐᵒᵒᶰ on Jul 30, 2016 20:00:53 GMT -5
Toriel! It's wonderful to see you again! Hello! c: Hey Indi! It's good to see you again too and I seriously miss you! I missed you too! cx How have you been?
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jul 30, 2016 20:08:08 GMT -5
@rainleaf: Accepted for Clan or no clan? Also thanks, I might end up doing that :3. (I seriously do not mean to come off impatient, please forgive me if I do sounds impatient) EDIT: Oh...Okay... Have patience Lynx Random third person talking owl: You are good! Great even! Also my writing style...isn't really all that great(Or maybe it's just me but...), :3, so you're good. Patience, young grasshopper. xD If you do, I may not respond today/tonight. Sand, pick a Clan so I can sleep, why are you so mean? ;-; 1.Sand may have left? 2.Okay.
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Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
Name Colour
ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁
Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
Easing back in
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 20:10:48 GMT -5
Patience, young grasshopper. xD If you do, I may not respond today/tonight. Sand, pick a Clan so I can sleep, why are you so mean? ;-; 1.Sand may have left? 2.Okay. She poofed to look at forms or eat, I think.
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Post by Featherwing on Jul 30, 2016 20:13:35 GMT -5
Woop, back from dinner!
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jul 30, 2016 20:15:50 GMT -5
Wahaha, my new status is good.
Cat puns.
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Post by Sand on Jul 30, 2016 20:19:43 GMT -5
I would love LOVE to help out, if you're sure and if Rain says it's A-okay. I'll get my rp sample up because I know that's the requirement. Now, Stormtrail is not known for being the most patient cat in the world. And as it was, he'd been up at the crack of dawn huffing and puffing in the cold over his herb selection. "IVYPAW! WHERE DID YOU PUT THE WITCH HAZEL!" He thundered, the vines hanging in front of the den trembling slightly with the force of his yell. Ivypaw let out a groan, having just started eating her breakfast. "I'm coming, Stormtrail," she cast her friends a glance, exasperated to the core. The small group of apprentices snickered as she walked off towards the medicine den. "IVYPAW- oh there you are." He'd essentially started shouting her name just as she walked in, causing her ears to ring. "Yes, Stormtrail? You couldn't find the witch hazel?" Ivypaw's voice was toneless, flat and bored. "Well, yes. Where did you put it?" Stormtrail gruffed out, ears perked and eyes narrowed in on his apprentice. "Second rock shelf from the bottom. Behind the moss covered rock that looks vaguely like a mouse." At her words, Stormtrail went to check and sure enough, there the herbs were. Tucked in the shelf, neat and tidy. The medicine cat scowled, "right well. Off you go then" He shooed her from the den, "And, uh. Good job with putting those herbs away." He disappeared back into the den, leaving Ivypaw feeling smug and warm inside despite the chill in the camp. She was incredibly pleased to say the least, Stormtrail was a tough mentor and getting praised was like pulling teeth. She sucked in a breath, feeling the icy air swirl around her lungs like a cyclone. 'Wow it's cold'[ Fea, I can't find hardly anything to nitpick.. Stop making this hard for me. xDD. What I've highlighted in red: "Right" needs to be capitalized & a comma could go after it too. Only thing you need in the other line I highlighted in red is a period. Other than that, this is great! Accepted ~ ]
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Post by Sand on Jul 30, 2016 20:22:05 GMT -5
I'm sorry, food was calling my name & I up and left you all here without warning. xDD Hmmm, I think I want to take a different clan for once. I'm good with Thunder or Sky.
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jul 30, 2016 20:22:56 GMT -5
Oh, just so you know Rain, someone else is doing the original five clans, I think they said they where the first, just so you know.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 30, 2016 20:23:28 GMT -5
Huzzah! For Sandy
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Post by ᴍɪsᴛғᴀʟʟ » on Jul 30, 2016 20:28:01 GMT -5
cackles because mine is still left and I have to sleep soon
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Post by Featherwing on Jul 30, 2016 20:30:27 GMT -5
Oooh! Can't believe I forgot those XD Thank you for the critique! Looking forward to throwing ideas out.
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Bisexual
#ffc5c5
Official Queen of Fan Clans
Name Colour
ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁
Official ThunderClan & ElmClan Leader
Easing back in
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Post by ʀᴀɪɴʟᴇᴀғ 🍁 on Jul 30, 2016 20:32:43 GMT -5
Oh, just so you know Rain, someone else is doing the original five clans, I think they said they where the first, just so you know. Who? o-e
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Post by Sand on Jul 30, 2016 20:33:28 GMT -5
Doing Loony's now uwu ~
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Post by Sand on Jul 30, 2016 20:43:25 GMT -5
Here is my roleplay sample! A slight shorter and wordier than usual, but this is my general ranking.
" Tighten of sinew, such as a brace, in a fashion that suggested instinct over intelligent mulls. But the movement didn't shift the molly's cranium away, as the momentary seep of unconscious was overtaken by a more prevalent, and more enjoyable, sensation. The touch was soft, a bare press to her skin, but it was there nonetheless. For the time, the haggard stress which hung beneath imploring pearls livened and cleared to a more humane visage. The tentative nature was not lost on the honed attention, but any musing of it didn't create a place for itself against the softness of her expression. Instead, a more sincere formation came in a tender smile, rosette shells fluttering in a gesture of shy geniality. Obsidian stars lilted towards the other, remained against the rogue's posture, even as eyelashes buckled beneath an instinctual and etiquette pressure not to stare too long- fear of politeness, fear of the other staring back at her too. There was only a slight tightening to the visage, a darkening of the jewels, as she grimly listened to the information of the Shadows said rankings. She had already figured such, when she was on the battlefield, beneath waves of the stench of blood, death, and primal figures. A look of sympathy cast to the other molly, a shifting on her toes like she was coming closer. She would wait for her to become acquainted with the camp. For now, her need for need was subdued. Standing to attention, she would do all required and asked of her. "
[ eeyeyy macarena ~ ] First off, I'm dead.. the description here *-*..! There is a point where I feel like the big words are too much but that may be because I have the vocab level of a 4th grader. I'm curious to know what this cat looks like though-- but there's nothing wrong with that there; this is pretty darn awesome. You're accepted!~
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Post by 𝕊𝕙𝕒𝕕𝕠𝕨 on Jul 30, 2016 20:43:42 GMT -5
Hi Code from the old forums. Credit to me and Brownie for the EASY TUTORIAL page for helping me configure it to here!
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Post by Kitsune on Jul 30, 2016 20:44:15 GMT -5
Hey Indi! It's good to see you again too and I seriously miss you! I missed you too! cx How have you been? Admittedly I am currently having a mixture of shock and happiness. Shock because I never expected to forums to just shut down like that and happy because so far I am having a good day and happy to see others I recognize. How about yourself?
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Post by Featherwing on Jul 30, 2016 20:51:29 GMT -5
Pap, you are masterful at description. I grovel at your feet.
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