Re-write Into the Wild short scene
Aug 23, 2016 14:14:59 GMT -5
Pyropelt, 𝓣𝓲𝓷𝓾𝓿𝓲𝓮𝓵, and 2 more like this
Post by Deleted on Aug 23, 2016 14:14:59 GMT -5
Suddenly, an ear piercing wail sliced through the night.
“Mousefur!” Redtail growled. He looked around for the young warrior and found her lying on the ground with a large gash in her shoulder. She was bleeding out.
Redtail took action. He ran up onto Sunningrocks and decided to give Tigerclaw what he wanted. “Thunderclan! Retreat!”
At once, the other warriors began their escape from the battle, running back towards the trees. Runningwind went and helped Mousefur onto her paws and they ran together.
Redtail stayed behind. “Oakheart!” He growled. “Sunningrocks will remain on Thunderclan’s scent lines! You will not take it back!”
Oakheart was standing with his warriors. “We’ll have Sunningrocks! It’ll stay with Riverclan! Right where it belongs!” Behind him, the Riverclan cats yowled their approval.
Defeat weighed down Redtail’s heart as he growled once more before turning tail and running back to his camp.
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So basically, im almost done with the prologue and first chapter. thoughts and tips?
