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Post by Deleted on Aug 18, 2016 3:31:20 GMT -5
ok quick update: im using the wiki's cliffnotes! they contain major plot points. it'll be completely different on how it is executed and how things happen, but as long as i hit major plot points, i'll be good!! be prepared for better firexsand development and other such things.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 21, 2016 22:37:56 GMT -5
;____; the prologue is a challenge. im skipping around and writing what i know so i can finish it faster!!
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Post by Jaysnow on Aug 21, 2016 23:04:27 GMT -5
Switch Graystripe's and Tigerstar's roles.
Make Graystripe, Graystripe, except it turns out he was really the villain the whole time.
Tigerstar was innocent.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 30, 2016 16:00:29 GMT -5
make lionheart more important. he was awesome.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 30, 2016 16:04:15 GMT -5
Switch Graystripe's and Tigerstar's roles. Make Graystripe, Graystripe, except it turns out he was really the villain the whole time. Tigerstar was innocent. I'm keeping Tigerstar the villain. I'm already done with the prologue ;_; |
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Post by Pyropelt on Aug 30, 2016 19:54:46 GMT -5
Maybe you can have Swiftpaw survive the dog attack like Brightheart did? But he ends up scarred too. And he can be resentful to Bluestar fof delaying them in the first place.
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Post by Amber on Sept 4, 2016 16:25:16 GMT -5
Give Redtail a bigger role
Have family relations more obvious. Like Frostfur mourning over Lionheart and Sandpaw/storm grieving for her father
Give background characters more screentime
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Post by evilzorua on Sept 4, 2016 17:30:15 GMT -5
Spottedleaf appears in fire/paw/heart/star dreams a lot, honestly for no reason either. If you could take that out, it would be ammmaazing. Plus in the first book, the cutter could be taken out because it makes too many people uncomfortable.
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