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Post by ᏞᎪᎠᎽ Ꮎf fᎪᏁᎠᎾms ミ☆ on Sept 25, 2018 12:00:22 GMT -5
in my AU, i made it so Spottedleaf put a lot of pressure on firepaw due to the prophecy. in this au, bluestar told the whole clan about the fire prophecy.
firepaw still has a shallow infatuation for her, but she doesnt feel the same because shes put him on a heroic pedestal, kinda religiously worshiping hin as the chosen one.
after a shadowclan raid in Thunderclan camp, spottedleaf loses an eye to a random shadowclan warrior. sometime later, spottedleaf is killed by clawface when clawface sneaks into the camp alone after being banished by blackstat. clawface is about to strike firepaw because he was the nearest young cat he could reach, but spottedleaf sacrifices herself to save firepaw. tigerclaw and darkstripe chase after clawface as a cover up, but tigerclaw begins plotting with clawface instead. tigerclaw and darkstripe come back to report clawface got away and ran towards the mountains near moonstone.
spottedleaf dies with firepaw above her. she again pressures him about beconing a great warrior to fufill the prophecy. firepaw says he can't do it alone. spottedleaf promises to become his new guide, since the mystery voice in firepaws head since he was still rusty had disapeared shortly after joining thunderclan.
spottedleaf then begins showing up only to give firepaw advice and tips about dangers and things relating to the prophecy. fireheart soon gets over his infatuation for her since he focuses on his bond with sandstorm instead.
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Post by ᏞᎪᎠᎽ Ꮎf fᎪᏁᎠᎾms ミ☆ on Sept 25, 2018 19:58:13 GMT -5
bump
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Porgs are love
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Post by finland on Sept 26, 2018 13:43:18 GMT -5
This makes her more interesting.
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Post by ᏞᎪᎠᎽ Ꮎf fᎪᏁᎠᎾms ミ☆ on Sept 26, 2018 14:10:21 GMT -5
finlandi would have liked spottedleaf if she had more character to her other than being made to just be a love interest that sucks
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Post by finland on Sept 26, 2018 14:49:46 GMT -5
She was a very forced love interest.
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Post by NoolaNala on Sept 26, 2018 14:53:40 GMT -5
I feel like this would have been a bit more interesting, actually. Firepaw having been dealing with not only being a kittypet joining a clan, but also being the prophecy cat. Some cats would probably not believe it, looking at the 'kittypet' aspect of it.
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Post by ᏞᎪᎠᎽ Ꮎf fᎪᏁᎠᎾms ミ☆ on Sept 26, 2018 14:56:24 GMT -5
I feel like this would have been a bit more interesting, actually. Firepaw having been dealing with not only being a kittypet joining a clan, but also being the prophecy cat. Some cats would probably not believe it, looking at the 'kittypet' aspect of it. yes! thats why i started writing this AU of warriors. Firepaw would have had to deal with the pressure being put on him by those who believe the prophecy, such as the medicine cat, leader, deputy, most of the warriors, all the elders, etc. Then there are the non believers just because he is a kittypet, such as longtail, dustpelt, tigerclaw, and darkstripe, etc. Firepaw is challenged by longtail simply because longtail hates the fact the chosen one is a kittypet.
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Post by finland on Sept 27, 2018 9:14:02 GMT -5
Are you writing a fanfiction?
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Post by ᏞᎪᎠᎽ Ꮎf fᎪᏁᎠᎾms ミ☆ on Sept 27, 2018 10:42:50 GMT -5
Are you writing a fanfiction? eeh im not sure if i have enough free time to devote it to a re-write project that big. im doing an outline instead.
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Post by NoolaNala on Sept 27, 2018 12:35:45 GMT -5
dyfhrbr you don't have to, writing sounds fun rn xD
but like,,, thinking about it, this could be a line: "Why would he be the 'fire?' It's more likely that actual fire saves Thunderclan. Not some kittypet scum."
it makes sense? I'm on board with this AU.
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