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Post by Fernstep on Jul 15, 2018 15:54:41 GMT -5
Just something I was throwing around on Discord. This was mostly based on trying to make minimal changes to the plot while still ending up with something that I would enjoy reading. If I were willing to make more drastic changes, Dovewing probably wouldn't be involved at all.
I would've fixed Tigerheart's Shadow by making the primary driver of the plot not be Dovewing's pregnancy, but rather the search for the missing ShadowClan cats. Tigerheart leaves his Clan so that he can find Rippletail, Berryheart, etc, and bring them back, because he is convinced this is the only way to make his Clan whole again. As he's leaving, Dovewing decides she's coming with him as she's about to have his kits. They meet lots of cats like Fuzzball and ultimately their search takes them to the city, where they end up having to stay due to the kits coming. They manage to find the missing ShadowClan cats somewhere in the city, and begin to make the return to the lake. Spire and Blaze accompany them, and Spire dies. Cinnamon and Ant don't come with them, because that's dumb and pointless. Tigerheart does get injured by the owl, but his death is more of a Windstar-type thing where he *almost* dies but then receives his nine lives and loses the first one immediately. Shadowkit doesn't exist; he has a different name and is a normal cat. Maybe Blaze can be special instead. I like Blaze.
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