Post by Deleted on May 29, 2018 17:55:19 GMT -5
Here's my revision to TPOT. No powers (except Jayfeather's), no Dark Forest, no Tribe/Ancients.
The Sight: After a dead fox is spotted on their territory, Lionkit, Hollykit, and Jaykit decide to chase off the cubs themselves. After being punished, they're made apprentices. Lionpaw is mentored by Spiderleg (Mousepaw is mentored by Ashfur instead), Hollypaw is to be Leafpool’s apprentice, and Jaypaw is mentored by Brightheart. Holly and Jay switch roles and mentors later on. Lionpaw meets Heatherpaw. An outbreak of whitecough occurs that kills Mousefur. Poppypaw almost dies, but Jaypaw is able to guide her back from StarClan. He later rescues Lionpaw and Breezepaw and is given special recognition when the Daylight Gathering ends.
Dark River: At the Gathering, it is revealed that Tawnypelt has given birth to Rowanclaw’s kits: Tigerkit, Flamekit, and Dawnkit. The threat of Twoleg activity forces RiverClan to temporarily relocate their camp to the Island. Lionpaw and Heatherpaw begin meeting secretly in the tunnels, but Hollypaw finds them out. She later goes to help out RiverClan, but is kept there after her group encounters a hostile WindClan patrol. Lionpaw ends his friendship with Heatherpaw. Cinderpaw injures her leg after falling out of the Sky Oak in an attempt to rescue Mousepaw. A litter of WindClan kits goes missing and Lionpaw, Hollypaw, and Jaypaw recover them with Breezepaw and Heatherpaw’s help.
Outcast: Foxkit and Icekit become ‘paws, their mentors are Sorreltail and Squirrelflight. Daisy has become mates with Thornclaw and she recently gave birth to his kits: Thrushkit and Cloverkit. Brook is pregnant with Stormfur’s kits and moves into the nursery. Lionpaw and Hollypaw spot a strange cat on WindClan territory. Cloudtail dies in a border fight with ShadowClan.
Eclipse: Brook gives birth to Shadekit, Featherkit, and Littlekit. A battle breaks out between all four Clans, but is stopped by the solar eclipse predicted by Sol. Several cats die, notably Ashfoot and Blackstar. Crowfeather and Squirrelflight are seriously injured. Sol joins ShadowClan. Lionpaw, Hollypaw, and Sorreltail’s litter receive their warrior names. Sandstorm and Graystripe move into the elder’s den. At the Gathering near the end of the book, Russetstar announces that ShadowClan has revoked their belief in StarClan.
Long Shadows: Sol is banished from ShadowClan as the result of “a sign from StarClan”. Jaypaw gets his proper name of Jaystorm. Whitewing and Squirrelflight are revealed to be pregnant by Rainwhisker and Brambleclaw. During the fire that breaks out in camp, Ashfur blurts out Squirrel’s secret and tries to burn the Three in front of ThunderClan. Firestar throws himself at Ashfur and they both fall into the flames. Brambleclaw is shocked and dismayed that Squirrelflight had lied to him, but understands what she and her sister had to do. Bramble and Leaf travel to the Moonpool where he receives his nine lives and new name. His choice of deputy is Brackenfur.
Sunrise: Lionclaw, Hollyheart, and Jaystorm try to tell Crowfeather about their relation, but he doesn’t believe them. Later, Hollyheart can’t help but give away the secret to all the Clans. Afterward, she runs off in shame. As the black molly crosses the tree bridge, she slips and falls into the lake. She is rescued by Beechfur, who escorts her to the RiverClan-WindClan border. After taking some time to calm down, Hollyheart has a talk with Squirrelflight and Leafpool. The book ends with the birth of Whitewing and Squirrelflight’s kits.
Dark River: At the Gathering, it is revealed that Tawnypelt has given birth to Rowanclaw’s kits: Tigerkit, Flamekit, and Dawnkit. The threat of Twoleg activity forces RiverClan to temporarily relocate their camp to the Island. Lionpaw and Heatherpaw begin meeting secretly in the tunnels, but Hollypaw finds them out. She later goes to help out RiverClan, but is kept there after her group encounters a hostile WindClan patrol. Lionpaw ends his friendship with Heatherpaw. Cinderpaw injures her leg after falling out of the Sky Oak in an attempt to rescue Mousepaw. A litter of WindClan kits goes missing and Lionpaw, Hollypaw, and Jaypaw recover them with Breezepaw and Heatherpaw’s help.
Outcast: Foxkit and Icekit become ‘paws, their mentors are Sorreltail and Squirrelflight. Daisy has become mates with Thornclaw and she recently gave birth to his kits: Thrushkit and Cloverkit. Brook is pregnant with Stormfur’s kits and moves into the nursery. Lionpaw and Hollypaw spot a strange cat on WindClan territory. Cloudtail dies in a border fight with ShadowClan.
Eclipse: Brook gives birth to Shadekit, Featherkit, and Littlekit. A battle breaks out between all four Clans, but is stopped by the solar eclipse predicted by Sol. Several cats die, notably Ashfoot and Blackstar. Crowfeather and Squirrelflight are seriously injured. Sol joins ShadowClan. Lionpaw, Hollypaw, and Sorreltail’s litter receive their warrior names. Sandstorm and Graystripe move into the elder’s den. At the Gathering near the end of the book, Russetstar announces that ShadowClan has revoked their belief in StarClan.
Long Shadows: Sol is banished from ShadowClan as the result of “a sign from StarClan”. Jaypaw gets his proper name of Jaystorm. Whitewing and Squirrelflight are revealed to be pregnant by Rainwhisker and Brambleclaw. During the fire that breaks out in camp, Ashfur blurts out Squirrel’s secret and tries to burn the Three in front of ThunderClan. Firestar throws himself at Ashfur and they both fall into the flames. Brambleclaw is shocked and dismayed that Squirrelflight had lied to him, but understands what she and her sister had to do. Bramble and Leaf travel to the Moonpool where he receives his nine lives and new name. His choice of deputy is Brackenfur.
Sunrise: Lionclaw, Hollyheart, and Jaystorm try to tell Crowfeather about their relation, but he doesn’t believe them. Later, Hollyheart can’t help but give away the secret to all the Clans. Afterward, she runs off in shame. As the black molly crosses the tree bridge, she slips and falls into the lake. She is rescued by Beechfur, who escorts her to the RiverClan-WindClan border. After taking some time to calm down, Hollyheart has a talk with Squirrelflight and Leafpool. The book ends with the birth of Whitewing and Squirrelflight’s kits.
What do you think? I'll write all this out eventually, and I'm also going to revise Omen of The Stars.