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Post by mimikyutie on Jan 30, 2018 21:25:19 GMT -5
(I've gotta call it a night, but I should be on after work tmw)
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Jan 30, 2018 21:30:49 GMT -5
okie dokie
I'm probably going to hop off eventually but I'll be here at least a short while)
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Jan 30, 2018 21:36:41 GMT -5
On questions
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Jan 30, 2018 21:53:37 GMT -5
I don't understand
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Jan 30, 2018 21:58:25 GMT -5
No (stupid autocorrect)
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Jan 30, 2018 21:59:43 GMT -5
Sorry I have to go I need some sleep I have school and play rehearsal
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Jan 30, 2018 22:09:00 GMT -5
oh sorry lol
So assuming we used the sentence structure from my last post. Let's go fix anything else that needs fixed and you'll have an intro. Though they all vary in size, think of this one as a minimum length for an intro
So this is what we've got so far:
Now, everything I change will be in yellow:
You're walking though a forest and you're very lost. You're hoping to find your way out but you're startled by a hawk flying by. You smell a little mouse, so, you crouch and pounce, killing it swiftly. It's getting dark so you try to seek shelter before night falls. As you carry on, you see a cat approaching you.
(let's also describe the cat here? what does Darkstar look like? How tall/large is he? What impression should I get from him? Should I be scared, intimidated, or something else since he so willingly offers to let me join his clan? )
“What are you doing on Darkclan territory” the cat hissed
“I....I’m lost”, you respond nervously.
"I am Darkstar, leader of Darkclan. Would you like to join us?" questioned the cat.
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Jan 30, 2018 22:10:06 GMT -5
Ok I’ll edit in the morning
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Jan 30, 2018 22:11:12 GMT -5
okie dokie. Tomorrow we can work on details about the clan
goodnight
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Jan 30, 2018 22:11:42 GMT -5
Night
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 1, 2018 21:14:47 GMT -5
Hello guys
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 1, 2018 21:16:08 GMT -5
hey
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 1, 2018 21:28:42 GMT -5
Let’s get started shall we
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 1, 2018 21:46:30 GMT -5
ok so we made changes to the intro. It could use some work but why don't we work on your rules next? Having been the owner of multiple rps for quite some time now, I've come to learn that you have to be specific, detailed, and to the point with rules. There is such thing as too many but it's not as big of an issue as having too few
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 1, 2018 21:47:21 GMT -5
Ok
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 1, 2018 21:47:50 GMT -5
I will probably make new thread
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 1, 2018 21:48:01 GMT -5
I will probably make new thread
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 1, 2018 21:54:00 GMT -5
that can wait. For now, let's use this one as a planning thread
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 1, 2018 21:58:28 GMT -5
Ok
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 1, 2018 22:13:51 GMT -5
I have to go good night
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 3, 2018 16:34:46 GMT -5
Ok
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 3, 2018 16:53:36 GMT -5
hey
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 3, 2018 16:55:09 GMT -5
Ok let’s get started
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 3, 2018 17:05:24 GMT -5
ok so we made changes to the intro. It could use some work but why don't we work on your rules next? Having been the owner of multiple rps for quite some time now, I've come to learn that you have to be specific, detailed, and to the point with rules. There is such thing as too many but it's not as big of an issue as having too few So any ideas? |
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 3, 2018 17:11:50 GMT -5
Ummmm for Rules no!
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 3, 2018 17:18:41 GMT -5
Actually, rules can wait. Let's do information about the clan. Territory, temperament, prey/predators, etc..
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 3, 2018 17:58:56 GMT -5
Ok umm I can draw territory on my phone
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 3, 2018 18:00:49 GMT -5
or you can describe it first. Describe landmarks and places. Can't draw a map if you don't have information for it
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Post by 🔻Puppydawg🔻 on Feb 3, 2018 18:18:13 GMT -5
Well there’s a river a herb forest training hallow and camp
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Post by *MorningGlory* on Feb 3, 2018 18:24:54 GMT -5
Hollow*
So a river. Where is this river? Is it near camp or far away? which way does it flow? Does it have significance?
Herbs are found all over the territory so an herb forest isn't really necessary
Describe the training hollow. Where is it? How big is it? What does it look like?
You can never have too many details
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