redfur
I am reading rising storm and I am working on my own clan called Ashclan! :D
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Post by redfur on Jan 2, 2018 17:38:26 GMT -5
Hey this is my first fanfiction I'm putting online with Ashclan I hope you enjoy!
Chapter 1
Bramblekit rested in his bed of Moss, in a soft quiet slumber. “I’M GONNA BE A APPRENTICE! I’M GONNA BE A APPRENTICE!” Yowled Redkit. “Get UP Bramblekit!” The she-cat Meowed loudly.
Bramblekit moaned and Got up from his Nest.
“ Redkit its not until SunHigh when we become apprentices!” Bramblekit meowed softly.
“I cant wait! I’m going to be the best warrior in Ashclan!” She Purred Arrogantly.
“Why dont you two go grab some freshkill for the elders instead of chitchatting?” Meowed FlamePelt, Redkits mother.
“Sure!” Redkit Meowed Prodding out of the nursery.
Bramblekit smiled. Even though it didn’t look like it, he was so exited. After so many moons he was one step closer to feeling the pride of defending his clan. He walked outside ready for the adventure that awaits.
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redfur
I am reading rising storm and I am working on my own clan called Ashclan! :D
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Post by redfur on Jan 2, 2018 18:30:50 GMT -5
I have a backstory for Ashstar ashclans leader If you want to read let me know! ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 3, 2018 12:44:45 GMT -5
I think this is a pretty good start! Good job! The only suggestion I have is fixing the capitalization in some places and that's the bulk of it. ^^ I'd love to see more of this in the future.
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redfur
I am reading rising storm and I am working on my own clan called Ashclan! :D
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Post by redfur on Jan 3, 2018 13:01:58 GMT -5
Thank you! I'm not good at the whole editing and spelling thing but I will try my best thanks for the advice!
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 3, 2018 13:41:50 GMT -5
I've been there and done that. XD What I did was ask people to edit my work for the stuff I missed and that usually works well in my favor.
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