LarchLeaf
Welp, I just put 8 more things on my back of To-Dos!
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Post by LarchLeaf on Jan 2, 2018 4:56:26 GMT -5
Rustle would wake up to find nothing. His collar destroyed. His food bowl empty. His squeaking mouse missing. His housefolk gone.
He’d search frantically around his housefolks nest, but there was nothing. He’d call out for help, but there was nobody to listen. He’d swiftly run out the cat door, to look outside.
Nothing.
“Where did they go!” He cried, as his eyes searched the yard. “They left me!” He yowled once more, hoping for response as he hopped onto the fence.
He’d stare into the forest. It was silent.
The trees swayed slightly, but they always did that. “What happened!?” He cried as he threw himself over the fence and into the forest. “Where did everyone go?!” He continued to cry, not understanding the danger he’d just put himself in.
“Right here, Kittypet.” A deep voice mewed. Rustle turned his head, but before he could look—
It all went black, and he realized, he was never alone.
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LarchLeaf
Welp, I just put 8 more things on my back of To-Dos!
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Post by LarchLeaf on Jan 2, 2018 14:46:23 GMT -5
Wowza I feel alone here! (Get it?)
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redfur
I am reading rising storm and I am working on my own clan called Ashclan! :D
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Post by redfur on Jan 2, 2018 17:26:03 GMT -5
Very Dramatic! I like it! Maybe some backstory on rustle would be cool! I like the way you write!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 2, 2018 17:52:16 GMT -5
This is a pretty slow forum - it's not unusual for threads to take a few days to get noticed c; It's looking good so far! I love the tension in your writing. (One thing - when you're writing speech, unless you follow it with a name or start a new sentence, the word afterwards shouldn't be capitalised. For example “Where did they go!” he cried rather than He cried. )
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LarchLeaf
Welp, I just put 8 more things on my back of To-Dos!
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Post by LarchLeaf on Jan 2, 2018 19:29:12 GMT -5
Thanks for the positive feedback, and the advice
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 3, 2018 12:42:34 GMT -5
Nice! Very dramatic! And I'd love to read more.
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