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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 31, 2017 6:28:37 GMT -5
oh, i really like the new chapter :0 i'm excited to see more of this; i love where you're going with it Thanks! <3
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 31, 2017 6:32:15 GMT -5
this is a really interesting look at how those three are nestling into thunderclan life. is jay not blind in this au, though? or is he still blind but just a whiz with those heightened senses? that was the one thing that pestered me in this otherwise lovely chapter. Thank you! Ugh, thanks for spotting that. No, he's definitely blind; I think I've fixed the offending bit now.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 1, 2017 13:07:05 GMT -5
I might need to work on my proofreading >.<
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 5, 2017 11:56:49 GMT -5
As a heads-up, chapter 4 probably won't be up for another week because I've been busy preparing for school tomorrow >.< Wish me luck?
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Post by foxdance on Sept 5, 2017 14:52:11 GMT -5
Good luck, Sapphire! I will be eagerly awaiting chapter four!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 6, 2017 15:19:12 GMT -5
Thanks, both of you! idk about great, but I'm still alive so
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❆αυяσяα
remember that scene from up with the old man? Yeah. Sad.
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Post by ❆αυяσяα on Sept 6, 2017 16:03:43 GMT -5
Add me as a fan this is good!!!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 6, 2017 16:19:51 GMT -5
Thank you!! Adding now c:
(That siggie tho)
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Sept 11, 2017 15:58:24 GMT -5
*cries* I so want to read this, but school so doesn't want me to. XC
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Sept 11, 2017 16:59:54 GMT -5
WHEN I GET TIME I WILL BE READING THIS I PROMISE <3 I think this coming weekend is going to be a nice break (no big things to do) so hopefully I can leave you a couple of fat comments/thoughts by then. <33
SO happy you are finding time to write!!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 12, 2017 11:44:49 GMT -5
*cries* I so want to read this, but school so doesn't want me to. XC Poor you, Mint! I hope school eases up for you soon... This fic will still be around whenever you do hae tme for it cx
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 12, 2017 11:50:07 GMT -5
WHEN I GET TIME I WILL BE READING THIS I PROMISE <3 I think this coming weekend is going to be a nice break (no big things to do) so hopefully I can leave you a couple of fat comments/thoughts by then. <33 SO happy you are finding time to write!! I'll look forward to those! And enjoy your weekend, too <3 Get some rest from the busyness! Haha, I'm not sure how long that will last. But thanks c:
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 12, 2017 11:51:43 GMT -5
*cries* I so want to read this, but school so doesn't want me to. XC Poor you, Mint! I hope school eases up for you soon... This fic will still be around whenever you do have time for it cx
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Sept 12, 2017 13:30:38 GMT -5
Thank you. I might get a chance after I finish my homework today. ^^
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 14, 2017 14:41:16 GMT -5
Thank you!! I'm glad you like Ivypaw - she can be a bit tricky to write sometimes.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 17, 2017 13:23:30 GMT -5
And Ivypaw is nothing but petulant. There was more Dovepaw-bashing in the first draft of that chapter than would have been fair for anyone to read. I honestly love her though so that makes up for it c'x
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Post by foxdance on Sept 18, 2017 19:29:36 GMT -5
Great chapter! It took me forever to find the time to read it, but it was worth it. I like how you gave Ivypaw Brightheart as a mentor; it's a much better fit for Ivypaw than Cinderheart was, in my opinion.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 23, 2017 16:17:53 GMT -5
tbh i think her frustration with her sister is what makes her interesting. jealousy makes for flawed, multi-faceted characters, and that's always more interesting. True! I was talking more about my inability to show that without being repetitive
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 23, 2017 16:20:46 GMT -5
Great chapter! It took me forever to find the time to read it, but it was worth it. I like how you gave Ivypaw Brightheart as a mentor; it's a much better fit for Ivypaw than Cinderheart was, in my opinion. Thank you I think a lot of people are struggling for time with school starting again. Haha I just like Brightheart as a character, but you're right! Ivypaw will (hopefully) begin to recognise Brightheart's experience
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Post by foxdance on Sept 24, 2017 19:48:50 GMT -5
I'm really glad about that. Brightheart is one of my favorites and it always bothered me that the first apprentice she got looked down on her so much. I don't get bothered by the school thing as much because I'm home -schooled, although I do have lots of chores and animals to take care of. That and the fact that my computer is about as fast as a stationary rock, can cause me to miss out on being on the forums.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 25, 2017 10:32:29 GMT -5
Agreed! Given how gutsy she is in the original series, she deserves a stronger role than being Jayfeather's scratching post.
I envy you. Both on the not having to get up for school, and on the animals. How many do you have?
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 25, 2017 12:37:21 GMT -5
Also, Chapter 5 is now up! This concludes the first 'part' of the fic. We're either a third or a quarter of the way through, depending on how much extra stuff I decide to put in ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ foxdance mintedstar/fur🦇 » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏ ᴇᴍʙᴇʀ ✴ ❆αυяσяα
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Post by foxdance on Sept 25, 2017 19:13:55 GMT -5
I actually got to read it today! Awesome chapter, Sapphire! I'm excited to see how Jay and Lion deal with being apart of a prophecy; hopefully they don't start acting differently to Holly because of it. I liked the conversation between her and Squirrelflight, too. It's too bad that Squirrelflight and Leafpool ended on such a bad night, but I hope that she can get a better relationship with Holly, Lion and Jay. Yes, being home schooled it pretty cool. I currently have 3 dogs, 3 cats, 9 foster cats, 2 bunnies, 1 tortoise and 15 snails. I and my siblings are pet sitting a dog and four rats right now as well, and we may get some fish at some point, because we released an alligator turtle to the wild yesterday and have an unused tank.
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