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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 16, 2017 15:03:05 GMT -5
ooh, yes, i do remember this!! keep it up, saph! it's still looking very good. Thank you!!
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Post by foxdance on Aug 20, 2017 11:54:47 GMT -5
I'm a bit late to the party. Whoops. Anyways, that was a really good chapter! I cannot wait for Holly and her brothers to get to the Clans. I noticed in the alliganges that Greystripe is deputy instead of Brambleclaw; is that because Leafpool wasn't there to have the dream about bramble claws defending camp? (I haven't read the books in a while, so I'm unsure of when that happened.)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 20, 2017 15:29:47 GMT -5
I'm a bit late to the party. Whoops. Anyways, that was a really good chapter! I cannot wait for Holly and her brothers to get to the Clans. I noticed in the alliganges that Greystripe is deputy instead of Brambleclaw; is that because Leafpool wasn't there to have the dream about bramble claws defending camp? (I haven't read the books in a while, so I'm unsure of when that happened.) Hey, no worries cx Thank you! You won't have long to wait for that... And yes, that whole episode happened in Sunset, so after Leafpool left. Keep picking up on these things! You're good!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 21, 2017 8:20:48 GMT -5
Chapter two is up! And I'm making pretty good progress with three and four, so updates on Monday might become a regular thing
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 21, 2017 8:25:47 GMT -5
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 21, 2017 9:06:02 GMT -5
Thank you!! I'm lowkey proud of that line. And yes, something might be about to go wrong pretty soon...
Thanks; I'll go fix those now.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 21, 2017 9:35:47 GMT -5
xD I can imagine...
In other news, the amount of cut material from chapter 3 is almost as long as my actual draft. Ah well...
(I may need to stop replying now because holiday homework beckons and I swore I'd be productive today :c)
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Aug 21, 2017 9:58:00 GMT -5
THANK YOU FOR TAGGING ME FRIEND I GO READ NOW
[ I am very sick so I am taking this time to catch up on ALL the stories I've been missing :'D ]
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Aug 21, 2017 10:24:51 GMT -5
My reactions to Prologue; I LOVE HOW THIS IS SET UP It's both familiar and new, and I ate it up. I especially love how you tie in all those outside forces/characters at the end with nods to how the births of Crow & Leaf's kits effect the story. I really applaud you though for having Squirrelflight's reaction be last. It makes it more real/personal. I'm hooked!!!
Chapter 1; YOU HAD TO KILL LEAFPOOL Why, Saph, why D'x
Chapter 2; *laughs evilly* I see what you did there...
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 21, 2017 15:15:30 GMT -5
Tues - Indeed. Hopefully some of it can get shunted into chapter 4
Finished is an overstatement, but I'm back! Pretty happy with what I got done...
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 21, 2017 15:32:55 GMT -5
Shadow - Aww, I'm sorry you're sick! But thank you for that long comment... I'm glad you like the prologue! And the Squirrelflight bit; a lot of cats are happy that the three are here, but Squirrelflight's probably feeling stronger emotions than anyone, and I wanted to show that a bit. I'M SORRY! But character development Dx (Also, I've been seeing your banners for Tuesday, and they are so. pretty cx)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 21, 2017 15:37:49 GMT -5
i'm sure you'll make it work. c: good! if you're happy with your progress, that tends to be a good sign. It's coming together. Mostly. So many background characters! Hopefully cx. I've dragged a whole lot of French vocab out of last June, so that's got to be good
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college hard childhood easy am nostalgic
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Post by ᴇᴍʙᴇʀ ✴ on Aug 21, 2017 21:57:32 GMT -5
this is really good so far! i'm such a sucker for alternate timeline things lol. so few people write them and it's such a missed opportunity because there are so many things to explore.
you can consider me a fan :0
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 22, 2017 9:24:49 GMT -5
lol, right?? why do we all write cat fic. why are there so many background characters to account for at all times. hey, sounds like you're cruising along to me!! nicely done. Ha, I know right! ThunderClan has so many cats by the time of this story, I keep remembering new ones. Thank you
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 22, 2017 9:27:44 GMT -5
this is really good so far! i'm such a sucker for alternate timeline things lol. so few people write them and it's such a missed opportunity because there are so many things to explore. you can consider me a fan :0 Thank you!! If you're looking for au fics mintedstar/fur🦇 is writing a pretty good one currently... And hey, nice to see you back! Adding you now c;
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Aug 22, 2017 9:35:41 GMT -5
Hey, look ma! Free advertisement. <3 Thanks Sapphire!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 22, 2017 9:46:36 GMT -5
I speak only the truth
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Aug 22, 2017 10:11:32 GMT -5
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 28, 2017 12:06:38 GMT -5
Chapter 3 is up!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 28, 2017 16:10:06 GMT -5
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Aug 28, 2017 22:52:53 GMT -5
NEW CHAPTER! If I get time tomorrow I will come and read and leave a little something something for ya. :'D
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Post by foxdance on Aug 29, 2017 14:13:36 GMT -5
Yeah, a new chapter! Awesome job, Sapphire! So we know that Dovepaw and Lion are apart of the prophecy, although I've noticed that you haven't said anything of Jay's powers aside from "Heightened senses". Am I missing something here? I'm assuming Jay has powers.
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college hard childhood easy am nostalgic
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Post by ᴇᴍʙᴇʀ ✴ on Aug 29, 2017 20:56:09 GMT -5
oh, i really like the new chapter :0 i'm excited to see more of this; i love where you're going with it
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Aug 31, 2017 6:27:31 GMT -5
Yeah, a new chapter! Awesome job, Sapphire! So we know that Dovepaw and Lion are apart of the prophecy, although I've noticed that you haven't said anything of Jay's powers aside from "Heightened senses". Am I missing something here? I'm assuming Jay has powers. Thank you! No, you're not missing something. Jay's powers are quite subtle, especially from the pov of a cat who's known him all their lives. So Holly just assumes that Jay is good at sensing where things are, and a bit more empathetic than normal. Hopefully this will become clearer soon!
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