Post by Sparkly on Jul 3, 2017 6:17:11 GMT -5
Hi, guys! Welcome to my OC Rater! All you have to do is fill in the form, and post it below! I'll rate each bit, such as the name, appearance, personality, and backstory, before giving you a total score. If you want things such as reasons for the scores, or tips on how to improve your OC, simply say so! I will NOT be rating gender, or Clan. Here's the form:
Name:
Why They Were Named That:
Gender:
Age:
Rank:
Clan:
Appearance:
Personality:
Likes:
Dislikes:
Skills:
Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Aspirations:
Family:
Friends:
Enemies:
Apprentices:
Backstory:
Here's an example OC!
Name: Amberbreeze
Why They Were Named that: Amber for her amber-coloured pelt, and breeze for her long legs, fast running skills, and messy fur.
Gender: She-Cat
Age: 43 moons old
Rank: Deputy
Clan: ShadowClan
Appearance: Amberbreeze has an amber-golden coloured pelt, with messy fur, and long legs. She has a sleek, slender build, and hazel-brown eyes.
Personality: Amberbreeze is easy-going and carefree, usually letting patrol leaders pick their own patrols. She isn't the best at fighting, but loves to hunt, and is sweet and kind. However, she can be very fearful, and tends to spook easily.
Likes: Running, hunting, eating frogs, the scent of yarrow and thyme.
Dislikes: Chatty Queens, overly bloodthirsty cats, badgers, the rain.
Skills: She's good at fast running over long distances, and has a bigger herb knowledge than most cats.
Strengths: She's very kind and sweet, and has no trouble with self-image.
Weaknesses: She tends to have flashbacks to when her father was killed whenever badgers are mentioned, or she sees, smells, or hears a badger.
Aspirations: Amberbreeze just wants to serve her Clan, and become the best cat that she can possibly be!
Family:
Mother: Nettlewing: A tabby she-cat, with brown eyes. Spiky fur. Kind, and sweet. However, very shy. Named for her pelt colour, and her love of eating birds.
Father: Troutstrike: A grey tabby tom, with golden eyes. Strict, but not mean. Enjoys fighting. Named after his pelt colour, and his fighting skills.
Sister: Cindermoon: A grey tabby she-cat, with blue eyes, and white paws. Likes fighting, but not bloodthirsty. Named after her hot-tempered personality, and her moon-like eyes.
Brother: Barkthyme: A brown tabby tom, with brown eyes. Helpful, but an introvert, and mainly keeps himself to himself. Good at keeping secrets. Named after his brown fur, and after his Medicine Cat status. He is a Medicine Cat.
Mate: Boulderfang: A dark grey tom, with green eyes. He's kind and calm, and it's hard to make him loose his cool. Named after his grey pelt, and his fighting skills.
Friends:
Cindermoon: See Family.
Boulderfang: See Family.
Barkthyme: See Family.
Raintail: A grey tabby she-cat, with bright green eyes, and white tuxedo markings. She has long fur. She's energetic and excitable, but very sassy, too.
Enemies:
Wisp: A white-pelted, amber-eyed Kittypet she-cat. Very rude, your typical mean girl. She became enemies with Amberbreeze when Wisp stole some herbs from Amberbreeze, which were urgently needed back at the Clan.
Redpaw: A ginger tom, with a stocky, muscular build, and green eyes. Very stuck-up, and egoistic. He became enemies with Amberbreeze when he refused to apologise after insulting her sister, Cindermoon.
Applescar: A tortoishell tom, with long fur, and green eyes. He's bloodthirsty and battle-hungry, and hates peaceful cats. From ThunderClan. He became enemies with Amberbreeze after he almost killed Boulderfang in a battle.
Apprentices:
Nightpaw: A black she-cat, with a slim, slender, sleek build, shiny fur, amber eyes, and small, folded-over ears. She was kind and helpful, and one of Amberbreeze's best friends. Unfortunately, she got run over by a monster on the way to a Gathering when Nightpaw was 8 moons old, and died.
Fernstream: A brown tabby she-cat, with long fur, and green eyes. She's very kind and nurturing, and loves kits. However, she joined the Clan from being a Kittypet, and some of the Clan considers her soft. Amberbreeze mentored her by choice, and actually physically fought to be Fernstream's mentor, despite Amberbreeze's lack of fighting skills. When Fernstream asks why Amberbreeze fought, Amberbreeze simply replies "I felt that there was something about you. Something strong. Something that told me that you're meant to be in a Clan.".
Mentor:
Emberwing: A dark ginger tom, with long fur, and green eyes. He's kind, yet strict, and helped Amberbreeze out a lot with her fighting skills.
Backstory:
Kithood:
Amberkit had a relatively normal kithood. She spent most of her kithood either playing with her brother and sister, Cinderkit and Barkkit, and the two other kits in the nursery, Boulderkit and Rainkit, or exploring camp. One day, when she was four moons old, she met Emberwing, and the two quickly became good friends. Her father, Troutstrike, was mysteriously absent from her life for the next two moons, but she would later discover that Troutstrike was trying to convince the leader, Frogstar, to make Emberwing Amberkit's mentor.
Apprenticeship:
When she was an apprentice, Amberpaw struggled a lot with fighting. However, Emberwing would always help her if she asked. When she was 11 moons old, she was sent to gather herbs - A mixture of parsley, tansy, yarrow, and honey. However, on her way back to the camp, a Kittypet named Wisp stole the herbs from her. From then on, the two were enemies.
She gained her Warrior name, Amberbreeze, after she stole two kits, Redkit and Moonkit, back from WindClan, after the Clan raided ShadowClan's camp. She gained her Warrior name for being carefree, her long legs, and her fast running skills.
Warriorhood:
(TBC)
Why They Were Named That:
Gender:
Age:
Rank:
Clan:
Appearance:
Personality:
Likes:
Dislikes:
Skills:
Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Aspirations:
Family:
Friends:
Enemies:
Apprentices:
Backstory:
Here's an example OC!
Name: Amberbreeze
Why They Were Named that: Amber for her amber-coloured pelt, and breeze for her long legs, fast running skills, and messy fur.
Gender: She-Cat
Age: 43 moons old
Rank: Deputy
Clan: ShadowClan
Appearance: Amberbreeze has an amber-golden coloured pelt, with messy fur, and long legs. She has a sleek, slender build, and hazel-brown eyes.
Personality: Amberbreeze is easy-going and carefree, usually letting patrol leaders pick their own patrols. She isn't the best at fighting, but loves to hunt, and is sweet and kind. However, she can be very fearful, and tends to spook easily.
Likes: Running, hunting, eating frogs, the scent of yarrow and thyme.
Dislikes: Chatty Queens, overly bloodthirsty cats, badgers, the rain.
Skills: She's good at fast running over long distances, and has a bigger herb knowledge than most cats.
Strengths: She's very kind and sweet, and has no trouble with self-image.
Weaknesses: She tends to have flashbacks to when her father was killed whenever badgers are mentioned, or she sees, smells, or hears a badger.
Aspirations: Amberbreeze just wants to serve her Clan, and become the best cat that she can possibly be!
Family:
Mother: Nettlewing: A tabby she-cat, with brown eyes. Spiky fur. Kind, and sweet. However, very shy. Named for her pelt colour, and her love of eating birds.
Father: Troutstrike: A grey tabby tom, with golden eyes. Strict, but not mean. Enjoys fighting. Named after his pelt colour, and his fighting skills.
Sister: Cindermoon: A grey tabby she-cat, with blue eyes, and white paws. Likes fighting, but not bloodthirsty. Named after her hot-tempered personality, and her moon-like eyes.
Brother: Barkthyme: A brown tabby tom, with brown eyes. Helpful, but an introvert, and mainly keeps himself to himself. Good at keeping secrets. Named after his brown fur, and after his Medicine Cat status. He is a Medicine Cat.
Mate: Boulderfang: A dark grey tom, with green eyes. He's kind and calm, and it's hard to make him loose his cool. Named after his grey pelt, and his fighting skills.
Friends:
Cindermoon: See Family.
Boulderfang: See Family.
Barkthyme: See Family.
Raintail: A grey tabby she-cat, with bright green eyes, and white tuxedo markings. She has long fur. She's energetic and excitable, but very sassy, too.
Enemies:
Wisp: A white-pelted, amber-eyed Kittypet she-cat. Very rude, your typical mean girl. She became enemies with Amberbreeze when Wisp stole some herbs from Amberbreeze, which were urgently needed back at the Clan.
Redpaw: A ginger tom, with a stocky, muscular build, and green eyes. Very stuck-up, and egoistic. He became enemies with Amberbreeze when he refused to apologise after insulting her sister, Cindermoon.
Applescar: A tortoishell tom, with long fur, and green eyes. He's bloodthirsty and battle-hungry, and hates peaceful cats. From ThunderClan. He became enemies with Amberbreeze after he almost killed Boulderfang in a battle.
Apprentices:
Nightpaw: A black she-cat, with a slim, slender, sleek build, shiny fur, amber eyes, and small, folded-over ears. She was kind and helpful, and one of Amberbreeze's best friends. Unfortunately, she got run over by a monster on the way to a Gathering when Nightpaw was 8 moons old, and died.
Fernstream: A brown tabby she-cat, with long fur, and green eyes. She's very kind and nurturing, and loves kits. However, she joined the Clan from being a Kittypet, and some of the Clan considers her soft. Amberbreeze mentored her by choice, and actually physically fought to be Fernstream's mentor, despite Amberbreeze's lack of fighting skills. When Fernstream asks why Amberbreeze fought, Amberbreeze simply replies "I felt that there was something about you. Something strong. Something that told me that you're meant to be in a Clan.".
Mentor:
Emberwing: A dark ginger tom, with long fur, and green eyes. He's kind, yet strict, and helped Amberbreeze out a lot with her fighting skills.
Backstory:
Kithood:
Amberkit had a relatively normal kithood. She spent most of her kithood either playing with her brother and sister, Cinderkit and Barkkit, and the two other kits in the nursery, Boulderkit and Rainkit, or exploring camp. One day, when she was four moons old, she met Emberwing, and the two quickly became good friends. Her father, Troutstrike, was mysteriously absent from her life for the next two moons, but she would later discover that Troutstrike was trying to convince the leader, Frogstar, to make Emberwing Amberkit's mentor.
Apprenticeship:
When she was an apprentice, Amberpaw struggled a lot with fighting. However, Emberwing would always help her if she asked. When she was 11 moons old, she was sent to gather herbs - A mixture of parsley, tansy, yarrow, and honey. However, on her way back to the camp, a Kittypet named Wisp stole the herbs from her. From then on, the two were enemies.
She gained her Warrior name, Amberbreeze, after she stole two kits, Redkit and Moonkit, back from WindClan, after the Clan raided ShadowClan's camp. She gained her Warrior name for being carefree, her long legs, and her fast running skills.
Warriorhood:
(TBC)
