🦋A Butterfly's Wings 🦋 A Tuesday challenge one-shot

I liked the hint of the world building here, and the callback to the signs and omens that were so prevalent in the books. :)

this is really cute, ghost. it's not too complicated, and even if it isn't a tense, action-packed scene, it still has a lot of power to it. mother-child scenes, especially quiet moments like this, are pretty strong, and you did a nice job.

you have a few things to watch out for, though. first, its vs it's. its is the possessive. it's means "it is." you frequently use it's where you should use its, so remember to double check that. and when in doubt, insert "it is" in place of the its/it's you're trying to use. if "it is" works, then use it's. if "it is" makes zero sense, you want its.

as for your dialogue (and this is a common mistake; took me years to learn it), you need commas. whenever a sentence would end in a period, but there's a verb of speaking that comes immediately after the dialogue, you need a comma in place of the period, and then the first letter of the first word outside the dialogue should not be capitalized unless it's a proper noun.

ex: "But it's barely made a dent in it." He whispered.

becomes

"But it's barely made a dent in it," he whispered.


if you have a question mark or exclamation point, those punctuation marks always stay the same. the rule about capitalization, though, still applies.

ex: "But it's barely made a dent in it?" he whispered.

or

"But it's barely made a dent in it!" he whispered.

on the whole, good work. c:

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Errors fixed