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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Mar 6, 2017 21:53:35 GMT -5
Here is a little something I wrote. Possibly a good opener/prologue?
Moon fire. That was all she dreamed about.
Some would take these dreams as a sign of untapped power just waiting to be scraped out and sculpted into one’s own terrible will; a foretelling of great beauty, rage, and dominance over the natural world. Yet, others would interpret it as undeniable misfortune. Fire was the destroyer, the eraser, and the claw stained in dried blood; its reach was never ending and its result was always ash. Fate would never have its day, because fate was obsolete in the presence of the great flame.
But moon fire-a fire of not sun but moon-was a peculiar shade of this destructive power. The moon was in itself, a question and an answer to the sun. What is bright, but not blinding? What is luminous, but ever-changing? The moon was not warm, but cold, and yet it changed more often than the sun, and one could safely gaze onto its pale, smooth surface and be in awe of its otherworldly beauty. Most importantly, the moon was a light in the dark, but it was not always there to provide such comforts.
This was the reality that she saw in her dreams of moon fire. An ever-changing world consumed in an un-predictable and yet calculated flame. Brilliant, graceful, and so deadly. So deadly, that she would be eaten alive by its silver conflagration.
But, the inferno would end as soon as she opened her eyes; eyes that were filled with the moon fire that she dreamed about every night until the time came for her to die. And die she did, under a moon as dark as the abyss her spirit would wander in to.
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Mar 6, 2017 22:37:50 GMT -5
Also, tentative soundtrack:
Kryptonite - 3 Doors Down My Name is Human - Highly Suspect Help - Papa Roach How Did You Love - Shinedown Cold Cold Cold - Cage the Elephant Still Breathing - Green Day Heavydirtysoul - Twenty One Pilots
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Post by Mᴏᴏɴ - - on Mar 7, 2017 8:02:06 GMT -5
Great start for an introduction! *0* I like how you described "moon fire", not in its physical form, but with interesting metaphors.
*puts headphones in* Ooh, time to listen~
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Mar 7, 2017 12:08:42 GMT -5
Ah! That is so good, Shadow!!!
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Mar 7, 2017 13:17:58 GMT -5
Mᴏᴏɴ - - mintedstar/fur Thanks guys! I hope it is an improvement from the first DSOTM. I've written more, but I don't want to share it until I finish a few chapters and I feel comfortable with the new version. This time around it will be first person past tense instead of third person present tense. I feel like the readers need a deeper connection with Spottedmoon in order to understand some of her "questionable" actions. It will remove some of the mystery, but I think this is the best course to take. Also for the prologue, I will be including more details on Spottedmoon's murder since that was a big question in the last version. It will be playing a more forward role in v.2 but will still keep its own secrets. Oh, and the scene where she is put on trial before the seven judges of the stars will remain, except I will be omitting the descriptions and names of the judges. I feel it was an overhaul of information, and sense this is the only scene they will have, I feel keeping who they are a mystery adds a better balance to the story.
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Mar 7, 2017 13:30:30 GMT -5
Sounds like a good idea to me. Tries to mentally remember the judges while I can...XD
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Mar 7, 2017 21:04:22 GMT -5
x'D
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