Ideas for a Fanfic?

(note: this is cross-posted from felinefiction, because i would like as much feedback as possible!)


Hello! I've been planning some stuff for a potential fanfiction, and I was wondering If I could get some feedback?

It's about the clans of a region called The Fallen Moon, because they all surround a crescent-shaped lake that reflects the moon. Each clan is a little different culturally from each other, and there are some minor differences between how they work compared to the canon clans. (For example, they believe StarClan actually has a leader, who is Moonstar, whom they worship like a goddess.)

I threw together a map on inkarnate for their territory:



As you can see, there are four clans on this territory; SunClan, DuskClan, CreekClan, and MistClan.

The main characters would be three siblings in SunClan, Crowkit, Icekit, and Puddlekit. I don't want to reveal to much about the plot (esp since most of it is still a work in progress!) but I do have the allegiances done for SunClan! 

SunClan is a bit more militant than the other clans, and they value battle skills over pretty much everything else. However, they aren't bloodthirsty or anything like that, in fact, they have a great sense of honor and pride, and so they mostly use their battle skills to defend their territory (and their aforementioned pride)

Leader:

Ashenstar - A nervous tom who was formerly a medicine cat. He became leader due to greencough taking both the current leader and deputy.

Deputy:


Stonewhisker - A self-assured and confident mollie who is considered a perfect foil to Ashenstar. They are also siblings.

Medicine Cats:


Dapplewing - A kind, but quite cynical and snarky young mollie. Was a warrior before becoming a medicine cat.

Apprentice:


Featherpaw - A very shy but sweet young tom. Very close to getting his medicine cat name. Ashenstar and Mintfur's son, Ripplepaw and Birchpaw's brother.

Warriors:


Rabbitstripe - A very energetic young warrior. Needlefang's brother, Fogpelt's son.

Hollyheart - A plucky young molly who often cracks jokes. Petalbreeze's daughter, Swiftpelt's sister.
Swiftpelt - A grumpy young tom who is actually quite shy and easily embarrassed. Petalbreeze's son, Hollyheart's brother.
Fogpelt - A quiet, lonely tom who doesn't like to talk very much. Rabbitstripe and Needlefang's father.

Mintfur - A sweet and motherly cat, but has little tolerance for nonsense (unless it's just normal kit-play) and is very direct. Ashenstar's mate, Featherpaw's mother.
Russetstorm - Stoic and serious, and quite strict. Used to be wild as a younger warrior, and is now embarrassed to discuss those days. Foxkit and Turtlekit's father.
Needlefang - A somewhat bossy and childishly petty mollie, but she'll probably grow out of it. Rabbitstripe's sister, Fogpelt's daughter.
Shimmerpelt - A rather rowdy mollie, but endlessly determined and perseverant. 
Petalbreeze - A kind but rather spacy mollie. Generally has a poor memory. Hollyheart and Swiftpelt's mother.
Brightstream - A former kittypet who's quite naive, but loyal as end-all to her clan, and a bit touchy about her kittypet origins.

Apprentices:


Birchpaw - A rather negative and bitter young tom, and likely the future founder of feline-nihilism. Mintfur and Ashenstar's son,Ripplepaw and Featherpaw's brother.
Galepaw - A hotheaded and risk-taking young tom, but he's very friendly and amiable to his clanmates, even a bit dorky. Stonewhisker's only son.
Ripplepaw - A bit stuck up and bitter mollie with a bit of a faux superiority complex. Deep down, she's very insecure. Mintfur and Ashenstar's daughter, Birchpaw and Featherpaw's sister.

Queens:


Snowflower - A very strange and out-there mollie who often says nonsensical things, but is very quiet and understanding. Mother to Crowkit, Icekit, and Puddlekit.
Redfoot - A rough-around-the-edges and gruff mollie, but has a soft spot deep inside her. Mother to Foxkit and Turtlekit.

Kits (pictured as adults):

Crowkit - A hopeless braggart, but really a big dork. Can be a bit cowardly at times. Icekit and Puddlekit's brother, Snowflower's son.
Icekit - Very stiff in conversation, and incredibly awkward socially. Crowkit and Puddlekit's brother, Snowflower's son.
Puddlekit - Gloomy, and not very confident in herself, and desperately wants to be good enough. Crowkit and Icekit's sister, Snowflower's daughter.
Foxkit - The largest of all of the kits. As an adult, he looks intimidating, but really he's just a big fuzzy softie. Redfoot's son, Turtlekit's brother.
Turtlekit - An idealistic mollie who loves to craft and tell romantic stories. Redfoot's daughter, Foxkit's sister.

Elders:

Harefoot - A grumpy old mollie who loves to complain, but secretly has a soft spot for kits.
Ratfur - A sincere old tom who is essentially like a dad to everyone. Loves to tell cheesy stories. Redfoot's father.

I made all of the pixels myself, btw! I may release this little base to be free for use at some point

So, any feedback so far? I'll probably do the other three clans soon!