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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 13:54:12 GMT -5
Don't you love it when main characters in books are edgy and cold for no reason! Well, take a gander at these lovely quotes from Blake, not even three chapters in.
"We spend our whole lives learning ways to block each other out. It's safe to stay locked away in the dark bunkers of our minds." (Page 1.)
"I figured out a long time ago that the quickest way to make a stranger dislike you is to interrupt them while they are checking their social media feed. Everyone would probably be happy as hell if the only way we ever interacted with each other were through an electronic device. I know that's how I feel." (Page 1.)
"I'd rather be in my car, even if that means sitting in gridlock, watching the minutes pass as I slowly die." (Page 2.)
All three of these quotes are related to him sitting in a public train, talking about people on their phones. I can't believe it.
"I yawn, which draws a yawn from the guy in a flannel shirt across from me. He pulls some headphones out of a backpack and puts them over his ears. He stares out the window, listening to some depressing song." (Page 2.)
"Even though I know my life is too short, I will never do anything about it." (Page 3.)
"She just rolled her eyes at me. Women. They can kill you with the smallest of gestures when they want to. Especially if you really love them." (Page 3.)
"We all live in our own little world, or so we think when we think we're alone." (Page 3.)
"I feel the briefest flicker of unexplainable fear. Nothing more than a vague sense that something is terrible is about to happen. Not like a premonition or any bull**** like that. Just this weird feeling, like I'm imagining a spider crawling over my skin. It freaks me out because the last time I felt that way was about two minutes before I lost control of my car on the highway and hit a truck." (Page 4.)
"We couldn't be more different that way. I typically don't give a damn about anyone but my family. Amanda tells me all the time that I don't act like I even care about them." (Page 6.)
"I'm not typically a violent person, even when all I want to do is hit something in the face." (Page 6.)
"Once, I bet half a million dollars on a ten-to-one horse called Preacher Man. That was as close as I've come to a religious experience in my life. Honestly, I knew I would win. Besides, I couldn't think of anything else to do with my money. If you knew all about the kind of cash I had in those days and where it all went, it would probably make you sick as hell. I was so young and stupid, and everyone around me wouldn't shut up about how brilliant I was. I even believed them at the time." (Page 13.)
"Anybody who knows me will tell you; I don't smile all that often. This girl smiles genuinely though. There is nothing but warmth and sincerity behind it. It's nice, but I don't look her in the eyes because I'm not used to such honesty. When you finally meet someone nice in this world, all it usually does is make you feel like more of a phony." (Page 15.)
"Without hesitation, I loosen my Italian silk tie and pull it off over my head. It was a Father's Day gift from my wife. How unoriginal. It was an expensive tie, and she thought I should try to look more professional. I pointed out I don't have a profession anymore, other than talking about myself. That really made her eyes roll." (Page 16.)
Edge lord Blake, everybody.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 13:57:15 GMT -5
it's just annoying when background characters are like that, but with main characters it's AWFUL
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 13:58:38 GMT -5
➳ that... that doesn't even compare to a side character in the book series im reading
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 13:58:54 GMT -5
it's just annoying when background characters are like that, but with main characters it's AWFUL 100% true. I'm only three chapters in and I already want this guy to be killed off. Please.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 13:59:22 GMT -5
➳ that... that doesn't even compare to a side character in the book series im reading give us quotes give us quotes
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 13:59:46 GMT -5
➳ that... that doesn't even compare to a side character in the book series im reading I'm sure there are even worse characters out there than Blake.
At least it's just a side character, right?
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:00:26 GMT -5
it's just annoying when background characters are like that, but with main characters it's AWFUL 100% true. I'm only three chapters in and I already want this guy to be killed off. Please.
I'm trying to write a book series (more like a poor excuse for a short story) and my main character, so far, is extremely peppy but kind of an idiot kind of annoying, but I still think it's better than him
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:08:33 GMT -5
ok i agree but i will defend holden caulfield to the death just so yall know Oh. Holden Caulfield.
I read that book in High School and I..
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:10:43 GMT -5
➳ here's one of the first (appropriate) quotes i could find from him:
"It had been a long time since anyone had made him hurt like that... Part of him, the squinting child who has first confronted the authorities after hitting another six-year-old in the face with a hammer, wanted to find out the old bastard's true name, track him to his RL hideaway, then razor him and [excessive violence]."
"He summoned up the music... Ominous but cool. Thinking music. Planning music. You'll-never-catch-me music."
"Before he could get any more work done, he decided, he would have to get a little exercise... He turned up his inner music and went to get his sharp things."
his thing is that he's a psychopath and is obsessed with music
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:10:43 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:12:32 GMT -5
➳ here's one of the first (appropriate) quotes i could find from him:
"It had been a long time since anyone had made him hurt like that... Part of him, the squinting child who has first confronted the authorities after hitting another six-year-old in the face with a hammer, wanted to find out the old bastard's true name, track him to his RL hideaway, then razor him and [excessive violence]."
"He summoned up the music... Ominous but cool. Thinking music. Planning music. You'll-never-catch-me music."
"Before he could get any more work done, he decided, he would have to get a little exercise... He turned up his inner music and went to get his sharp things."
his thing is that he's a psychopath and is obsessed with music You're right. This guy is 10x worse than Blake. Oh my god.
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Post by John 3:16 on Oct 1, 2016 14:15:49 GMT -5
is this a picture of him
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:16:49 GMT -5
➳ and, to be extra special, he's the only character in the book with a superpower!
"The moments leading up to the first time he twisted something had been surprisingly ordinary... As she dragged him, intent on locking him in his room, he had reached a crescendo of screaming anger and the wallscreen had abruptly wavered and gone black."
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:17:27 GMT -5
is this a picture of him ➳ it is
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:18:46 GMT -5
➳ and, to be extra special, he's the only character in the book with a superpower!
"The moments leading up to the first time he twisted something had been surprisingly ordinary... As she dragged him, intent on locking him in his room, he had reached a crescendo of screaming anger and the wallscreen had abruptly wavered and gone black." Oh god, that's even worse.
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Post by ℜust ℜed ℜose on Oct 1, 2016 14:19:03 GMT -5
Well, I guess that means the way I started my book is perhaps the edgiest way possible.
"It wasn’t the dark that terrified him. No, it always was what lay within it that he truly feared. He never understood why people said they were once scared of the dark; only fool would be afraid of something that couldn’t hurt him" (Unnamed, page 1).
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:19:07 GMT -5
➳ i mean hes not really a side character he ends up being the main villain but the edge is still uncalled for
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:21:02 GMT -5
Well, I guess that means the way I started my book is perhaps the edgiest way possible. "It wasn’t the dark that terrified him. No, it always was what lay within it that he truly feared. He never understood why people said they were once scared of the dark; only fool would be afraid of something that couldn’t hurt him" (Unnamed, page 1). ➳ truly edgy idk if the character has considered this but people are scared of the dark because it means they can't see what's coming
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Post by ℜust ℜed ℜose on Oct 1, 2016 14:22:56 GMT -5
Well, I guess that means the way I started my book is perhaps the edgiest way possible. "It wasn’t the dark that terrified him. No, it always was what lay within it that he truly feared. He never understood why people said they were once scared of the dark; only fool would be afraid of something that couldn’t hurt him" (Unnamed, page 1). ➳ truly edgy idk if the character has considered this but people are scared of the dark because it means they can't see what's coming He's only nine. He doesn't really do a lot of reasonable thinking. And the second line basically says just that; it's what's coming that's truly terrifying.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:24:06 GMT -5
Well, I guess that means the way I started my book is perhaps the edgiest way possible. "It wasn’t the dark that terrified him. No, it always was what lay within it that he truly feared. He never understood why people said they were once scared of the dark; only fool would be afraid of something that couldn’t hurt him" (Unnamed, page 1). I don't really think that is that bad if it's only the start of the book.
It's not as worse as Blake lmao.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:24:40 GMT -5
➳ i mean hes not really a side character he ends up being the main villain but the edge is still uncalled for
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:24:54 GMT -5
➳ truly edgy idk if the character has considered this but people are scared of the dark because it means they can't see what's coming He's only nine. He doesn't really do a lot of reasonable thinking. ➳ i see i see hes pretty edge for a nine yr old tho
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Post by Deleted on Oct 1, 2016 14:25:32 GMT -5
➳ truly edgy idk if the character has considered this but people are scared of the dark because it means they can't see what's coming He's only nine. He doesn't really do a lot of reasonable thinking. And the second line basically says just that; it's what's coming that's truly terrifying. Wow, very edgy for a nine year old.
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Post by tiger beetle on Oct 1, 2016 14:27:11 GMT -5
main characters are weird
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:28:24 GMT -5
➳ yeah luckily he's the only one like that at all the other characters are good
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Post by ℜust ℜed ℜose on Oct 1, 2016 14:28:32 GMT -5
He's only nine. He doesn't really do a lot of reasonable thinking. And the second line basically says just that; it's what's coming that's truly terrifying. Wow, very edgy for a nine year old.
I blame my word choice for that. Like, if I said "He wasn't scared of the dark. It was the stuff inside the dark that was really scary. He didn't get why people called it 'fear of the dark'. The dark wasn't going to hurt anybody." That would be very different. The problem here is that the author is the edgy one.
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Post by Gengar on Oct 1, 2016 14:32:45 GMT -5
Wow, very edgy for a nine year old.
I blame my word choice for that. Like, if I said "He wasn't scared of the dark. It was the stuff inside the dark that was really scary. He didn't get why people called it 'fear of the dark'. The dark wasn't going to hurt anybody." That would be very different. The problem here is that the author is the edgy one. ➳ this is true. i think best wording would be sentence 1, sentence 4, then sentence 2. leave out 3 because it's too repetative
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Rainbow
silverbrook
it takes guts to be gentle and kind
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Post by silverbrook on Oct 1, 2016 17:48:41 GMT -5
ok i agree but i will defend holden caulfield to the death just so yall know Oh. Holden Caulfield.
I read that book in High School and I..
are u about to say something bad about my boy ill fight you
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Post by Dᴀɴɴʏ Pʜᴀɴᴛᴏᴍ on Oct 1, 2016 18:31:59 GMT -5
I like dark and bitter characters, but to me a character who is dark and bitter should have something to justify it. For example, the MC in my planned series is dark, but not necessarily bitter, due to the fact that she was exposed too early to the crime underworld to try and support her family. She's not edgy; she doesn't constantly complain about the world. She just makes occasional side comments about it. Her darkness is intertwined, however, with an intense loyalty to her family, friends, and country. Her darkness stems more from her belief that she's morally obligated to do whatever it takes to keep herself and those she loves alive, which in turn has corrupted her mental state. This darkness gets progressively worse, until she basically becomes this person willing to commit any kind of immoral act to accomplish her task, but who doesn't give a damn unless it matters.
To me, being edgy is making comments like those above just for the sake of being dark and honest/salty, whereas dark and bitter is making comments that are brutally honest for the sake of trying to justify their own actions. They don't bring their unhappiness up unless there's reason to, and even then it's restricted to snarky side comments and the occasional blow-up.
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