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Post by daurianwind on Sept 7, 2022 5:21:19 GMT -5
So there are heavy emotional discussion about One x White; but what about other problems of that book.
Weak-willed protagonist who jerk, coward, dependent from other’s words and opinion just every line in the book, fails every moral choice and doesn’t make a progress, since he becomes a leader (how Clan warrior can be such coward, how others can respect and obey him).
Mess, haste and self-repetition in chapters and books structure.
Missed important episodes like adventure of Wind Clan after being exiled by Brokenstar, mentioring Gorsepaw, helping Thunder Clan after attack of badgers, fighting with Dark Forest, speaking for ex-Dark forest students (in Crowfeather trial).
But lot of retcons and strange things, like Darktail elusive to walk through the territory of the Clan and make an ambushes, journey through the mountains for cat who was there just once are fast, easy and safe.
Strange moral, he doesn’t othercome himself, he doesn’t make a progress, he even doesn’t solve moral problem with killing his son, saving Clans but risking go to Dark Forest (One just saw darkness in Darktail, and decided what he was evil from the beginning, so he isn’t guilty for everything, don’t risking go to Dark Forest and so it’s ok to kill his son, because no punishment to fear).
In general, it feels like it's written about some other Onestar with some other story and character; and for some other book series.
What do you think and what other problems you found?
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Post by Stormwind on Sept 7, 2022 16:48:05 GMT -5
It feels like there’s not an actual main character for this book. One star just kind of…exists? I’ve only read to the part where Tallstar dies so that might change. But Onestar doesn’t really make any decisions, for the most part he’s just observing what’s happening around him. And when he does make decisions it negatively impacts the ones around him. I don’t understand why Tallstar picked him at all. I think Ashfoot would have been the better choice.
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Post by Ṣanɗypaw™ on Sept 7, 2022 17:07:20 GMT -5
I'm just so annoyed that the book skipped over the Eclipse battle, and didn't even mention it at all apparently. It would have been really good to see Onestar's motivation behind that because it fit to the whole theme of his book.
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