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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jul 4, 2018 9:58:18 GMT -5
Review here! If you have any questions, just ask! I really like the story here! Blazepaw is a brave little cat and I enjoyed seeing him grow up. It really feels like one of the super editions. Your plot has plenty of twists and turns, which keeps the story exciting, and you pack a lot of juicy drama in there. I particularly liked the leader ceremony - it was so emotional to see all the characters again. To improve, try splitting your writing into paragraphs when a new character speaks, or if the action moves time or place. I also spotted some grammar mistakes - you could use a checker such as this one if you’re struggling.
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Post by hopestorm on Jul 4, 2018 18:10:21 GMT -5
Review here! If you have any questions, just ask! I really like the story here! Blazepaw is a brave little cat and I enjoyed seeing him grow up. It really feels like one of the super editions. Your plot has plenty of twists and turns, which keeps the story exciting, and you pack a lot of juicy drama in there. I particularly liked the leader ceremony - it was so emotional to see all the characters again. To improve, try splitting your writing into paragraphs when a new character speaks, or if the action moves time or place. I also spotted some grammar mistakes - you could use a checker such as this one if you’re struggling. Thank you
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Post by hopestorm on Jul 6, 2018 3:10:58 GMT -5
Bump
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