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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on May 24, 2018 11:34:07 GMT -5
Love the prologue! Things are so exciting already... Oh, please fan me! thanks !! and will do ;D
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on May 26, 2018 22:59:24 GMT -5
chapter one is up ^^
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on May 27, 2018 18:22:32 GMT -5
Whoops. Didn't realize there was a new chapter. May have to wait till Tuesday to read it, sadly.
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on May 27, 2018 20:26:33 GMT -5
Whoops. Didn't realize there was a new chapter. May have to wait till Tuesday to read it, sadly. lol all's good! no rush
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Post by ѕωιƒтƒαℓcση on May 28, 2018 9:32:09 GMT -5
Can I say I'm loving all the names in this? And you're so good at building up the atmosphere here and I love it
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Asexual
ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏ
do you walk in the valley of kings? do you walk in the shadow of men who sold their lives to dream?
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Post by ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏ on May 29, 2018 22:28:05 GMT -5
okay first of all i love the whole date and location thing. it makes it feel very...crime show? i guess. very ominous. like things are already in motion and there's no stopping it now.
second, just a quick fix: looks like bazel's first words are indented, but aren't in a new paragraph. there's a later case where you have a new para but no indent. fun with formatting, huh?
THIRD OMG I LOVE THIS. THE NAMES, THE CHARACTERIZATION, SWEET LITTLE MARCELINE MY NEW CHILD. PLEASE WIN FOR SPRING.
of course, i get this terrible feeling that if she wins, it'll be at a terrible price, and if she loses? sweet little marceline is probably gonna die, in that case.
i also can't wait to learn more about grounding. there's not a whole lot on exactly what it is, and i'm eager to find out what marce is supposed to be doing in theory, even if she can't do it yet.
AND DRAMA AND CUT! oh man i'm so psyched for the rest of this fic! keep it up! also, ping me when you update so i don't miss anything, please!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on May 31, 2018 15:24:15 GMT -5
Finally read the chapter! Once again, I have to say I love the concept. It is amazing!
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Jun 2, 2018 21:34:55 GMT -5
oof while looking over the text after the note about the formatting, i realized i forgot to italicize everything that was supposed to be! whoops that probably made it read really weirdly, my apologies! i think i fixed everything
thank you guys so much!!! i'm gonna enjoy reading y'all's thoughts bc............y'all just have no idea of what i have in store muahahah. also i'm glad y'all like the names! i had a lot of fun picking, finding, and/or making up ones that fit different characters. speaking of which, little pronunciation guide!
oraia: or-RYE-uh (real, greek) bazel: like basil (invented) vazhel: VAH-jhəl (invented) and some characters introduced in upcoming chapters jozka: YOHSH-kuh (real, czech) sionek: tbh it's a real name but i can't really find a pronunciation. fwiw, in my head it's usually either sigh-OH-neck or SEE-oh-neck zivan: zee-VAHN (invented) tiriz: tih-REEZ (invented)
chapter 2 will be up in a bit!!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jun 2, 2018 21:36:31 GMT -5
Evil laugh. Uh oh. o.o
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Jun 3, 2018 3:50:52 GMT -5
tfw fallout new vegas and my friend's relationship problems made me totally forget abt adding the next chapter eek
i'll get it up soon as i wake up tomorrow. i'm dead tired for now (it's almost 5 am i just realized, why the heckie am i awake !!!! i hate it when i go to bed at...literally any time after 1 am yikes)
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jun 3, 2018 12:40:08 GMT -5
I was up at 2 when you posted that, so I feel.
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Jun 3, 2018 15:40:34 GMT -5
yikes my friend's gf started dming me..........i ain't tryna cop your man yo i have my own! i feel like i'm in high school again ;~; anyway that's what took so long, here is CHAPTER TWO! » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ mintedstar/fur🦇 ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏѕωιƒтƒαℓcση ~Sapphire~ i think that's everyone? enjoy ;D
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jun 6, 2018 18:41:08 GMT -5
D8 That CHAPTER! So far I'm really looking forward to these two POVs. Are we getting one from every province?
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jun 14, 2018 10:19:52 GMT -5
Gah I'm late! But I love how this is going! All of the three racers we know about so far are very interesting in their own ways... I really want to see Panther's view on things tbh
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Jul 1, 2018 19:16:54 GMT -5
thanks you guys!!! sorry for the extended poof lol, i've been dealing with the job search and vacation and things. mintedstar/fur🦇 i was originally planning on having all four provinces represented, but truthfully they just don't have a place in the story the way these two do. you'll meet them, but they won't have their own povs, rip aaaaand we have chapter three » ѕнαdσω ⚔️mintedstar/fur🦇ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏѕωιƒтƒαℓcση~Sapphire~
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jul 3, 2018 11:22:21 GMT -5
Nice chapter! I loved the fight scene. And I agree, things don't look too hopeful for Marceline right now
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 14, 2018 13:08:35 GMT -5
Gotta read new chapter, gotta read new chapter.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 18, 2018 15:00:16 GMT -5
And read! EEEEE! I WANT MORE!
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Jul 31, 2018 14:03:34 GMT -5
yall i suck at sticking to a schedule lol i apologize x10 i'm gonna try to get the next chapter up tomorrow? it's already written, just gotta remember to do it lol. thanks so much for reading ♥
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Aug 9, 2018 0:24:37 GMT -5
Cool!
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Oct 9, 2018 19:35:43 GMT -5
i need to come back to this. i'm really...struggling with some things and this would be a good thing to keep me occupied/distract me i guess expect a new chapter soon ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 13, 2018 16:01:02 GMT -5
Hope things work out! And that this is a good distraction!
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Oct 22, 2018 13:11:55 GMT -5
ok i'm planning on uploading later today (: i gotta do some things, and then i'll get this up as well as do a run through reading what updates i've missed on fanfics around here today and tomorrow.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 22, 2018 14:49:14 GMT -5
Ooo! That sounds very nice!
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Oct 29, 2018 22:40:27 GMT -5
okie i finally got a new chapter up lol here's to hoping this will be the beginning of consistency again ;P i'm gonna try to go for mondays as my upload day now because i never work mondays and all my homework is due on sundays, so monday is the chillest day for me
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 30, 2018 18:20:00 GMT -5
Oooo! I need to get readin'. o3o
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Nov 13, 2018 16:51:59 GMT -5
Caught up! Hope you're doing okay and I have to say that I love the latest chapter! I'm interested to see where the Trail goes. O.O
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Post by Gray Pool on Nov 19, 2018 15:36:28 GMT -5
This is super good! I would love to be added as a fan ^^
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