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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Aug 30, 2017 21:22:48 GMT -5
Oh, please add me as a fan. I forgot to ask last time I was here. x'D
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Post by Mosspool on Aug 30, 2017 21:51:05 GMT -5
Thanks I will xD
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Post by Mosspool on Aug 31, 2017 21:06:29 GMT -5
Thanks!
I say that now but it always ends up in there xD Luckily I have a clear idea of where this is going so hopefully it won't
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 15, 2017 6:08:43 GMT -5
Bump
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Post by Headphone Actor on Sept 18, 2017 23:02:38 GMT -5
Fan me please! Can't wait to see more!
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 19, 2017 11:06:25 GMT -5
Fan me please! Can't wait to see more! Thank you! I'll add you to the list!
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 19, 2017 12:52:39 GMT -5
Chapter One is up!
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 21, 2017 13:21:38 GMT -5
Some fun facts I thought of while writing: On half of the documents I have for this story Shadowed Heart is called Shattered Heart. For some reason I keep making this mistake and can't seem to get it in my mind that it is Shadowed Heart. There will be a total of 11 chapters plus the prelude. There may be an epilogue but I haven't decided yet. There will be six points of view in this story, yes SIX! I'm trying something different here, hopefully it works.
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Asexual
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do you walk in the valley of kings? do you walk in the shadow of men who sold their lives to dream?
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Post by ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏ on Sept 23, 2017 10:49:29 GMT -5
hmmmmm... i'm not sure how i feel about this first chapter. on one hand, yeah, being shy can really put a damper on things. on the other hand, what's stopping literally everyone from actually just. talking to duckpaw? being paired off doesn't mean that you can't cycle pairs, especially if mentors are in charge of pairing now and again. it feels a little like the classic "everyone hates this character for no reason" plot. i suspect you'll put a twist on it (an unreliable, biased narrator would probably help you do so), but at the moment, the first chapter doesn't jump out at me with a ton of reasons to sympathize with anyone or root for anyone. i just want them to communicate, plain and simple. btw, make sure you tag your fans when you update! helps us all show up when there's new content.
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 23, 2017 20:17:53 GMT -5
Hopefully things will be more clear about that in the next chapter. There is a reason though.
Thanks for reminding me. I will in the next chapter.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Sept 24, 2017 8:32:05 GMT -5
Poor Duckpaw, though! The more experienced mentors ought to be doing a lot more to help her imo.
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 24, 2017 21:08:11 GMT -5
maybe hint a little at that reason in this chapter? that would alleviate some of the "they hate her for no reason" vibe. also, who has this chapter's pov? that was a little unclear to me. you're welcome! easy enough to forget. i've done it a couple times and then gone back and tagged folks later. I'll go back and do some editing on this chapter. Redcloud had this chapter.
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Post by prophet on Sept 30, 2017 3:16:28 GMT -5
Mosspool - Hey, Mossy! It's been awhile. How are you??? Btw, I love this story so far! I was hooked~
Please save them from death:
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 30, 2017 17:01:10 GMT -5
Hey! I'm pretty good! How are you? Thank you!
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Post by prophet on Sept 30, 2017 17:10:16 GMT -5
Mosspool - Doing good. Got to go to work soon, so just enjoying my lazy day until then XD What'chya up to?
Please save them from death:
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 30, 2017 19:59:27 GMT -5
Right now I'm just watching a movie. I worked all day today so I'm happy to just relax xD
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Post by prophet on Sept 30, 2017 20:33:45 GMT -5
Right now I'm just watching a movie. I worked all day today so I'm happy to just relax xD Nice XD I'm on break right now. What movie are you watching? Or watched, since you'll probably be done
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Post by Mosspool on Sept 30, 2017 21:22:00 GMT -5
The Heat. It was pretty good!
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Post by prophet on Sept 30, 2017 22:34:24 GMT -5
The Heat. It was pretty good! That's good~ I haven't seen it, but the casst looked pretty nice. Was it funny?
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Post by Mosspool on Oct 1, 2017 7:37:04 GMT -5
Yeah it was pretty funny
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Post by prophet on Oct 1, 2017 13:45:00 GMT -5
Well, it’s great you enjoyed it~
Please save them from death:
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Post by Mosspool on Oct 4, 2017 10:02:01 GMT -5
Chapter Two will be up in the next day!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 5, 2017 1:47:24 GMT -5
🎃 Hey Moss! Sorry I haven't posted. (You know if Mint goes silent for any length of time, she's been to busy to read the latest chapter and doesn't want to be called out about it. x.x So sorry.)
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Post by Mosspool on Oct 5, 2017 6:03:36 GMT -5
Hey Mint!! No worries!
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 5, 2017 17:59:05 GMT -5
Oooooh after my exam tomorrow I plan on sitting down and catching up on everyone's stories. <3 Thanks for letting me know you updated!
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Post by Mosspool on Oct 5, 2017 18:05:14 GMT -5
Good luck on your exam!!!
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