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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 13, 2017 1:00:32 GMT -5
mintedstar/fur🦇 ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ Dingoleap ~Sapphire~ Mosspool ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏ Mᴏᴏɴ - - Thornheart ✲ριкαƒυєу✲ --cato phoenix Headphone Actor Katanaheart prophetChapter five and new poll! I would really love some feedback on this since this is where I took an old idea and made it new. The soul shard of innocence was always sad, but in this instance I wanted it to truly feel like she had no control over the situation. That her innocence was truly STOLEN from her. Also want to check with you guys how you feel about this pace. A soul shard being discovered every chapter (almost), with conversations revealing new or old information in a different light. I want this story not to be so flashy, but more spiritual/emotional. I want y'all to feel super attached to Spottedmoon and understand her so well that you begin to see her life through her eyes more easily. As we go on her history will be stripped back more and more and even I have trouble forgiving all of her transgressions. So it's crucial (at least to me) that we go about the soul shard thing this way with flash backs to important parts in her life. Let me know all of your thoughts! Thanks for all the support thus far! <3
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Post by prophet on Oct 13, 2017 1:04:34 GMT -5
@ - I'll give you a more detailed answer tomorrow, but letting you know now that I really like where it's going~
Please check out my fanfic, Listen
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 13, 2017 1:16:06 GMT -5
Thank you! <3 I gotta go to bed now before I just don't. x'D
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Post by Katanaheart on Oct 13, 2017 2:36:07 GMT -5
Was Spottedmoon's Curse supposed to replace the Curse of Bravery? It was quite cruel of Talonstar to use two kits like that... Is Spottedmoon's sister even alive, still? The pace also seems to fit well with the story's current progression. Also that would be a lot of soul shards if there was one every Chapter.
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 13, 2017 9:26:54 GMT -5
Yes, her curse was supposed to replace the one lost. Yes, it was cruel, and I don't know. :'P Awesome! And it would be, which is why I put (mostly). There will be certain chapters where action takes over the dialogue or any discoveries made.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 13, 2017 14:39:24 GMT -5
Wait, Darkmoon's weak? Makes you wonder what on earth a 'strong' death curse like Hadiya is capable of. (So many ideas about Snow o.o How long ago is this story set before Curse again?)
Also, I'm really enjoying the pacing. Given the story's essentially character-driven, you really don't want to get too caught up in action scenes.
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 13, 2017 15:01:08 GMT -5
~Sapphire~LOL, yes Darkmoon is very weak for a Cursed. The only time she was even weaker was just after she awakened her curse, as most Cursed are since they are like toddlers with a flame thrower. And I can actually tell you the upper reaches of what a death curse can do. The strongest death curse was able to lift an entire battlefield of cats back from the dead (at a price of loosing a good year or two off of their lives; possibly more) and they could essentially cure any ailment that caused that cat to die: illnesses like cancer or brain damage. Be-headings or missing limbs. It's even been recorded (can't say if it's true or not) that a strong curse of death could make stronger ties between soul and body after raising a dead cat, essentially extending their life span. Also, it wouldn't matter how long this cat had been dead, so long as they still had flesh on their body. The body must still be there no matter what. A soul needs a vessel. Compare this to Darkmoon who can only raise a cat within three days of being dead, and can only do one at a time (as we know so far). It's very taxing on her, so she might need a few days to feel fully normal again after doing it. DSOTM is a companion story to Curse. So this is set with the later part of Curse. You know the chapter of Curse where Shadowface meets Hadiya? That lines up to where Hadiya left Spottedmoon in chapter four. BUT with the flashbacks added in this will be before and during AND AFTER Curse eventually. I won't be trying to confuse you guys with how DSOTM and Curse line up. I will try to be as straightforward as possible. So chapter 5 of DSOTM is happening as Shadowface is meeting the rogues in chapter 32. (': Good, good, good. I'm glad that is the case.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 14, 2017 14:39:52 GMT -5
*awe of hadiya intensifies*
Thanks!
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 14, 2017 21:06:01 GMT -5
x'D No problem! It's not spoiler information, its just stuff that I haven't posted before.
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 19, 2017 10:39:14 GMT -5
Hmm, I am hopng someone has noticed that there is a hiccup with the timeline between DSOTM and Curse. Spottedmoon appeared earlier in Curse...what could this mean? :'O
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 19, 2017 10:40:08 GMT -5
It could just mean that I messed up horribly but I have a solution to fix it. x'D
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 23, 2017 19:22:21 GMT -5
🎃 That's basically my reactions to plot holes. Can I a) work it in as foreshadowing/plot twist instead? or put off fixing it until everyone forgets about it?
Fun fact: it took me 4 years to learn I could leave pages up on my computer/phone so I could read fics when there wasn't any internet. Because of this, ever school day I finish 1-3 updates or read halfway through a complete fic. ( i.e. what I'm getting at is...I've nearly caught up!!!! Not just with Curse related stories, but all my backlog. :') Why did it take this long to do this?)
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 23, 2017 20:34:19 GMT -5
@mintedstar/fur - Lol, so so true x'D Dang, Mint. You're a reading monster! :'O <3
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 23, 2017 20:47:37 GMT -5
🎃 My reaction to all my fic/actual stories so far. Tis what I do for fun. Now I just have to remember to post when I get back on the internet. :')
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 23, 2017 20:50:53 GMT -5
I want to read all the stories on here, but my mind is too easily distracted when it comes to being online. If all of this was in paper form it would be no problem. D'x Plus I think I've realized I'm picky when it comes to fan-fictions. Like, in a series like Warrior Cats, there are so many books and stories out there already that I would kinda just like to read more about original works than re-tellings or what ifs, though those can be good too if executed correctly.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 23, 2017 21:47:19 GMT -5
Or you could be me and just...print them out. X'D
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 24, 2017 13:07:20 GMT -5
But I am at a college where I have a limit to how much I can print out! x'D
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 24, 2017 13:26:55 GMT -5
🎃 I'm commuting to my college, so I can just mooch off the libraries print outs if I need to. Pity that you can't... Maybe next time you get to go home you can print out a lot of the finished ones. (Also what I do. I have folders and folders of finished fics. :'D )
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Nov 9, 2017 12:14:02 GMT -5
ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏ It does seem odd, doesn't it? Basically the last Curse of Bravery that died did not have any descendants to pass on his blood. He was the last of his family line. Hadiya on the other hand did have children, but for whatever reason down the line, the curse of death was lost. (the reason why is spoiler content) It all comes down to your blood. Does it have the capacity to hold this "fire spirit" inside of you? Since Spottedmoon did have the blood of a Cursed, it was able to manifest. Thank you so much, Tues. <3 It's been a pleasure to write it so far. I can actually talk about all the world stuff without it being spoilers!!
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Nov 9, 2017 13:36:50 GMT -5
BY THE WAY IGNORE EVERYTHING I HAVE SAID ABOUT WHERE THE TIMELINE FITS WITH CURSE I WAS WRONG TOTALLY WRONG
If it is not mentioned in the story itself, then it is not true. x'D It will be very clear where this all fits once Shadowpaw/face is mentioned by Hadiya or Spottedmoon.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Nov 9, 2017 16:24:33 GMT -5
Well... this will be interesting...
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Nov 9, 2017 22:40:52 GMT -5
*cries in a corner* There are too many plot lines to keep up with I need to make an entire wall of my dorm dedicated to cotv plot lines
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Nov 9, 2017 23:14:48 GMT -5
Sounds like The Game.
Never mind the fact I'm bordering on 8 Word Docs devoted to Will to Live/Double Mirror alone. And that's the stuff having to do with the world. Never mind the actual stories.
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Dec 10, 2017 22:07:33 GMT -5
I can't wait to get back to this.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Dec 21, 2017 15:22:34 GMT -5
So I was rereading and:
The curse of fate deals in time and time continuums. When they change fate, they create another time line and leave the old one behind.
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Dec 21, 2017 15:54:09 GMT -5
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Post by ѕωιƒтƒαℓcση on Dec 21, 2017 16:10:40 GMT -5
Hi?
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Dec 21, 2017 16:36:05 GMT -5
Hello lol
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Post by ѕωιƒтƒαℓcση on Dec 21, 2017 16:48:22 GMT -5
Did you tag me on accident or am I missing something here?
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