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Post by phantomstar57 on Jan 5, 2018 13:30:35 GMT -5
Good to hear its done! Now I have to catch up and finish. You do have me as a Fan right?
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 5, 2018 13:31:02 GMT -5
I hope so! I'll check! 0.0
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 6, 2018 9:41:14 GMT -5
So I finished it, and wow! I love the Hawkpaw segment - you nail his confusion and shock. I'd wondered what happened to poor Mothpaw - Tigerstar really doesn't seem to care about his family at all.
But that ending, how dare you? Although I'm glad Smokepaw succeeded, he ought to have had a chance to see his success, the poor thing! (I saw your poll - I'm stoked for whatever you decide comes next c: )
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 6, 2018 14:47:11 GMT -5
Yay! Thanks! I'm glad I could do that. I wanted to stay in-character, but also explain why he might have been tilted one way or another. I was waiting to see the reactions. o3o And I was waiting to address what happened to Mothpaw.
I was wondering if I'd get nailed for that. The original ending had a more happy outcome, but it was soooo cliche. (Cool! I just have to figure out what to write. I have plans for some human related fics, but I also want to stay active within the WFF as a writer, so I want to tackle another writing project that has been waiting patiently in the wings.) Also, for those who love fun facts and because I never got to insert it anywhere: Spoilers for, give or take, chapter 16 Firestar lost six lives when Tigerstar killed him. That would mean he would have around three lives when he was Copper.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 10, 2018 8:48:06 GMT -5
He's a lot more sympathetic in your fic than in canon, but you can see that he's at a crossroads. If he hadn't become Minnow, he'd probably have ended up as the Hawkfrost we all know and (don't) love.
This ending is great - I just had so much invested in Smokepaw surviving. I was really surprised when Rose didn't come charging in to save him. (I saw the new page! o.o)
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Bisexual
Iceclaw
You can kill me, but you will never destroy me.
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Post by Iceclaw on Jan 10, 2018 11:34:42 GMT -5
//falls in I decided to start my wff binge here and WOW I was not disappointed Mint this is amazing!! Where to even begin oh man I think you nailed Tigerstar he's evil and literally the worst and you definitely nail it. I was dying when he made Mothpaw fight that cat knowing very well that she couldn't AND GOING OFF OF THAT HAWKPAW WOWOWOWOW
GOOD
I LOVE
You threw me for a complete loop when Bramble turned out to be the bad guy and Hawk was actually Minnow eeee I loved it and the chapter that was Hawk's pov with Firestar? Damn. DAMN it was so good I loved it I read it over twice because it was just amazing. Speaking of Firestar hello? Copper? God my heart broke when Rose was telling Smokepaw that if he'd failed his Clan like that, he'd want to leave behind that life and identity too I just HHHNNN ;;;;
Smokepaw yesyesyesyesyesyes I loved him. When I was little I thought Cinderpelt and Littlecloud would be cute together so congratulations on making 11 year old Ice very happy. Smokepaw was amazing just at the end when he's like "yo I gotta sacrifice myself to save the Clans" just bby no you're so small and good please. I was really hoping someone would save him but then nobody came and I just ;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;; This was really good!! Since it's over it's like definitely too late to add me to the fan list but please add me to the fan list nfdjgkhfkg also tell me when you write more stuff I want to read everything //grabby hands
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 10, 2018 12:22:26 GMT -5
//falls in I decided to start my wff binge here and WOW I was not disappointed Mint this is amazing!! Where to even begin oh man I think you nailed Tigerstar he's evil and literally the worst and you definitely nail it. I was dying when he made Mothpaw fight that cat knowing very well that she couldn't AND GOING OFF OF THAT HAWKPAW WOWOWOWOW
GOOD
I LOVE
You threw me for a complete loop when Bramble turned out to be the bad guy and Hawk was actually Minnow eeee I loved it and the chapter that was Hawk's pov with Firestar? Damn. DAMN it was so good I loved it I read it over twice because it was just amazing. Speaking of Firestar hello? Copper? God my heart broke when Rose was telling Smokepaw that if he'd failed his Clan like that, he'd want to leave behind that life and identity too I just HHHNNN ;;;;
Smokepaw yesyesyesyesyesyes I loved him. When I was little I thought Cinderpelt and Littlecloud would be cute together so congratulations on making 11 year old Ice very happy. Smokepaw was amazing just at the end when he's like "yo I gotta sacrifice myself to save the Clans" just bby no you're so small and good please. I was really hoping someone would save him but then nobody came and I just ;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;; This was really good!! Since it's over it's like definitely too late to add me to the fan list but please add me to the fan list nfdjgkhfkg also tell me when you write more stuff I want to read everything //grabby hands *whistles* I'm impressed. And thanks! Oh thank you. That's very helpful to know, since I always feel I have a little trouble nailing the badies. And that was the point. :3 Gotta have that plot twist. And I always loved inserting more than one What-if plot into my story, since they really do end up being a domino effect. I did give you a little hint when I named him Minnow, since the association with RiverClan would be there. Thank you so much! Glad that things like this stuck out to you! Pfft. I'll add you whenever. Sometimes I do short stories or fun fact seasons and abuse the tag list. Well, I have this WIP page where my new fic will be: wcrpforums.com/thread/51431/shattered-wip? and I have another completed one called Mortality. wcrpforums.com/thread/2010/fun-facts?But honestly? Scroll through the WFF, because there are a whole bunch of fan fictions that are better edited than my Mortality is. XD
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 10, 2018 12:55:57 GMT -5
He's a lot more sympathetic in your fic than in canon, but you can see that he's at a crossroads. If he hadn't become Minnow, he'd probably have ended up as the Hawkfrost we all know and (don't) love.
This ending is great - I just had so much invested in Smokepaw surviving. I was really surprised when Rose didn't come charging in to save him. (I saw the new page! o.o) All know and don't love. Yup. Yup. However much I would have loved to do that... she was busy at the time and couldn't. (Wooh! I need to write Prologue and actually make the page look good.)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 10, 2018 17:30:32 GMT -5
Although he's such a gloriously hammy bad guy... So maybe a little love? So what was your original ending? Rose not being busy? Or something else? (Can't wait!)
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 10, 2018 18:02:57 GMT -5
The original ending involved Smokepaw getting Leopardstar on his side and them all attacking Tigerstar. However, there wasn't a logical way for Smokepaw to get RiverClan support in the space of time before Tigerstar attacked again.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 22, 2018 5:57:49 GMT -5
Ah, interesting. Yeah, I could see that as a problem. Still kinda wish it had happened though, sorry
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 22, 2018 10:50:47 GMT -5
Well, I really don't see why your saying sorry. I did kill off the main character.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 22, 2018 14:20:36 GMT -5
British. We apologise for everything
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 22, 2018 15:29:16 GMT -5
I'm Mint. I apologize for everything without having to be British.
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Post by Owlmoon on Jan 23, 2018 16:05:52 GMT -5
I just finished it! YOU DID SO GOOD!!! I came back, and was like, what the crap? How are all of my favorites finished? You know what? Forget about it, I need to binge read.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 23, 2018 16:18:20 GMT -5
>:3 I finished it just to trigger a binge read. My plot was discovered.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 23, 2018 16:46:55 GMT -5
One of us! One of us!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 23, 2018 16:59:55 GMT -5
Exactly. XD
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Post by Owlmoon on Jan 23, 2018 18:47:47 GMT -5
The ending was unexpected, but it was REALLY GOOD.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 23, 2018 23:01:57 GMT -5
Yes! I succeeded! I wanted to add a little plot twist and still make it good. Glad you liked it!
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Post by Owlmoon on Jan 24, 2018 19:46:03 GMT -5
Plot twists are my fave:)
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 24, 2018 20:37:04 GMT -5
Same.
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Post by Owlmoon on Jan 25, 2018 15:01:09 GMT -5
I did one on one of my Wattpad works just for fun lol though it didn't make too much sense I've gotten both compliments and complaints about it
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 25, 2018 16:36:05 GMT -5
Ah well. That's what you get for any published story. Hum. I've never wrote anything on Wattpad, but I know that Dingoleap has some stuff on there. A story called Razor's Edge.
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Post by Owlmoon on Jan 25, 2018 20:09:47 GMT -5
Ah well. That's what you get for any published story. Hum. I've never wrote anything on Wattpad, but I know that Dingoleap has some stuff on there. A story called Razor's Edge. Uh-oh, that story sounds...*shivers* I might check it out, though.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 25, 2018 21:58:10 GMT -5
Apparently it's about wolves. ^^
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Post by Owlmoon on Jan 26, 2018 7:54:07 GMT -5
Ohhhhhh okay. That makes me feel better about it.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jan 26, 2018 10:59:54 GMT -5
I think she posted some art for it a while back as well. She's also planning to create a book about Australian (I think?) urban legends.
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Post by Owlmoon on Jan 26, 2018 17:10:26 GMT -5
Ooh, that sounds cool.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Feb 6, 2018 10:33:21 GMT -5
I love when I finished a fic. ^^
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