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Post by swallowtail on Sept 4, 2022 8:44:53 GMT -5
Why I put this in WFF Just before a moderator comes and moves this to somewhere else, I'll just explain that Eridanus, a leopard, supported by a ton of cats led by Swallowtail, sets out to change the world from his secret cave. So it is cat-related. Mostly.
Swallows of the River Teaser
W E L C O M E , N E W C O M E R . Y O U H A V E B E E N L O N G A W A I T E D .
A P P R O A C H , W I T H O U T F E A R . Y O U A R E W E L C O M E H E R E .
Y O U H A V E S T U M B L E D U P O N T H E G R E A T E S T A C H E I V E M E N T O F N A T U R E - T H E R I V E R S W A L L O W ' S D E N .
C O M E M E E T O U R L E A D E R .
E R I D A N U S , O U R L E A D E R , C O M E F O R T H A sound of beating wings fill the hollow cave, echoing eerily. The soft, gentle sounds gradually increase in volume in a harmonised, synchronised crescendo. From a tunnel, a flock of tiny birds burst out, chirping excitedly. Swallows. But not normal ones. Their belly was shining brightly in the once-dark cave, filling it with light. Their breast was a glistening golden, reflecting golden coloured light all around the gloomy cave. Its eyes were a striking bronze, and looked as if they were made of some metal. But the best was yet to come. Its plumage was a dazzling crystal blue, which seemed to be rippling and flowing like a body of shining water. It was truly an amazing sight.
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Post by Brownie on Sept 4, 2022 10:28:11 GMT -5
[[ I'll delete this if you need me to but a few things:
anything cat-related can go in wff, it doesn't need to specifically be Clans or fanclans (some people did a group of lions). As long as it isn't human it can really go here!
Also, you should try and make your code as readable as possible. At least on my computer, half your letters blend in with the background and it makes it like an optical illusion more than text; I had to stare at it for a while before I could see the letters pop out. Even then, the text is small and pushed close together which is challenging to decipher.
I ended up quoting it and reading the raw text, which isn't something you want readers to have to do! I do love the birds, though, and it answers my question if your username was about the birds or the butterflies <3 ]]
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Post by swallowtail on Sept 4, 2022 22:00:18 GMT -5
[Okay, thanks for advice, tell me if I misunderstood what you meant.]
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Post by Brownie on Sept 4, 2022 23:07:13 GMT -5
oooooh I do like that change! They have nice shapes now <333
But I did mean the bottom paragraph for the odd colors. The size helps a LOT. idk if it's just my computer, but the letters (i p f m) are all very dark and blend into the background? The rest is fine tho. Really weird
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Post by swallowtail on Sept 4, 2022 23:08:57 GMT -5
Swallows of the River Tidbit
        The cave was unnaturally bright, as if the sun was filtering through the thick layers of rock and gravel to light up the gloomy space. The light lifted the cave into plain sight, for anyone to see the vast space it held. A small entrance, facing the west, opened the cave up for fresh air, and let sight to the captivating sight of the pink sunset sky framed by a craggy outcrop. Opposite, facing east was three tunnels, which later opened up to a network of tunnels running deep into the mountainous terrain. To the north side, the cave ran narrow and long, thinning out further in, finally ending with a pile of rocks, piled high. At the bottom, a hastily scrawled line of words was carved into the stony floor - "Eridanus' Throne". To the south, the cave was wide, stretching vastly out. It was filled with, interestingly, trees. Trees of every kind, shape, size, colour and species. Countless glimmering swallows flitted their wings about in the air, landing in the branches of the tall trees. Multiple cats strolled about, casually discussing and gossiping. The cave seemed a truly magical sight.
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Post by phantomstar57 on Sept 5, 2022 18:47:23 GMT -5
Well here I am, the old geezer of the forums LOL. Brownie was right about the text being too dark. For me it still is. A lighter blue and I'd be able to read it.
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Post by swallowtail on Sept 5, 2022 21:31:43 GMT -5
Swallows of the River Chapter 1
        Eridanus opened his eyes dreamily. He had just dreamed of running through the vast plains and deserts with his family. The dream had ended with 'Live strong, little one,' and with that, he had woken up.         Now he had woken up, he wished fervently he hadn't. the reality was much, much worse than his dream. For in reality, he was in the middle of a long prophesied and ill-fated. For now it was called the Raging Darkness. In the future, who knows.         His eyes were heavy with sleep, and his limbs hurt as he woke up. No, they didn't hurt. Cramped would be a better word to describe it.         As he stretched and yawned, he thought about the real world. He remembered how his parents died, all of a sudden. They just... died. They had been running, then they just collapsed. He remembered the vultures screeching loudly, their cries cutting through the morning sky. And he remembered, most of all, the prophecy the vultures, messengers of the earth, had delivered a prophecy that only he could understand. And he remembered, regretfully, the prophecy.
        Five will roam, into the heart of the earth,         Make a oath, into the hearth,         Save their natural home turf,         Five, as one, rebirth.
        Eridanus tossed and turned. He had turned the prophecy round and round in his head. So far he had figured out, he, along with four cats from his feline kingdom would go on this quest. For the better of the savannah, and the forest. Swallowtail, his cat commander would have to go. That was what they were doing, after all. Trying to save the world from the Raging Darkness. The Darkness killed not only animals, but plants too. Forests had disappeared in a matter of seconds.         But Eridanus was not disheartened, not discouraged. The prophecy had come to him for a reason. And he believed, he could stop it.
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Post by swallowtail on Sept 5, 2022 21:44:36 GMT -5
phantomstar57Oh, I think I know what the problem is after viewing from a different computer. I've changed it up a little. Thanks!
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Post by swallowtail on Sept 6, 2022 1:32:04 GMT -5
Swallows of the River Chapter 1 - Part 2
        Swallowtail sat up and stretched. It was late morning, or at least she thought it was. The sun would be high in the sky by now. But Swallowtail didn't care to look up. She knew all she would see would be the rocky roof of the small cave, beside Eridanus' cave, that the leftmpost tunnel in the living cave led to.         Swallowtail smiled as she thought of Eridanus. The little cheetah was a year and two months old, and had no idea what he was letting himself in for. That had been the reason Swallowtail had joined. That, and surprisingly, vengeance.         Vengeance had been important for her. After all, her whole family had disappeared in a second, in fact, her whole clan, AetherClan too. The sky had not been bright for her that day. Especially when her whole forest territory had disappeared, withered, or died. That had been scary.         Swallowtail switched her thoughts back to her life now. It wasn't too bad, considering her past. Now she could make a difference, at least. I wonder if that lazy cheetah has woken up yet, she mused. Probably. But maybe not. One could never tell time from a cave.         Swallowtail got up, then sauntered next door. Now would be a good a time as ever to check on him. As she walked down the corridor, she admired the stone carvings the swallows had carved into the walls. She wondered how Eridanus had gotten them to do it. He was mysterious about these things.         As Swallowtail poked her head into Eridanus's room, she saw a tense cheetah sitting rigid on a vine hammock, identical to hers.         "What's up, bud?"
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Post by swallowtail on Sept 7, 2022 23:39:26 GMT -5
Ok thanks phantomstar57! I don't mind you posting here, but could you put your earlier post in a spoiler? I was thinking the story bits could be identified by the background. Thanks!
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Post by phantomstar57 on Sept 8, 2022 14:07:14 GMT -5
Ok thanks phantomstar57 ! I don't mind you posting here, but could you put your earlier post in a spoiler? I was thinking the story bits could be identified by the background. Thanks! Sure, if can remember how! I tried and failed. I may be able to use what you already posted not in spoiler. I just deleted the text so most of it isn't there. I have done spoilers on my fics before but for the life of me can't find the place to do it. It may be off screen or something as I am on my laptop. My desktop fried out n glorious blue sparks a week ago.
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Post by Brownie on Sept 8, 2022 14:22:28 GMT -5
Ok thanks phantomstar57 ! I don't mind you posting here, but could you put your earlier post in a spoiler? I was thinking the story bits could be identified by the background. Thanks! Sure, if can remember how! I tried and failed. I may be able to use what you already posted not in spoiler. I just deleted the text so most of it isn't there. I have done spoilers on my fics before but for the life of me can't find the place to do it. It may be off screen or something as I am on my laptop. My desktop fried out n glorious blue sparks a week ago.[spoiler]things inside[/spoiler] you can also just delete the post since swallowtail fixed it (;
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Post by phantomstar57 on Sept 8, 2022 14:31:41 GMT -5
Sure, if can remember how! I tried and failed. I may be able to use what you already posted not in spoiler. I just deleted the text so most of it isn't there. I have done spoilers on my fics before but for the life of me can't find the place to do it. It may be off screen or something as I am on my laptop. My desktop fried out n glorious blue sparks a week ago. [spoiler]things inside[/spoiler]
you can also just delete the post since swallowtail fixed it (; Maybe that us a better idea now. But thanks!~ Forgot it was a snip of code!
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Post by phantomstar57 on Sept 8, 2022 14:33:44 GMT -5
OK just deleted the post since its not needed any more. Going to play with the code snip and try and burn it into my brain.
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Post by swallowtail on Sept 14, 2022 1:56:55 GMT -5
Swallows of the River Chapter 1 - Part 3
        "No. I won't."         "Yes, you will."         "No."         "Oh, come on, if you guys really want to argue," Echopaw put on an exasperated look, "at least be more interesting. Honestly, who could think of lamer words than 'yes' and 'no'?"         "I can. 'Maybe'!" Thunderpaw's voice was bright and chirpy.         Echopaw immediately cringed as the sound of his voice rang loudly in her ears, considering he had shouted into her ear. Maybe getting Thunderpaw to talk was way way worse than Eaglepaw and Cascadepaw arguing. Hearing them argue day and night helped her get used to it.         Now, Cascadepaw was trying to convince Eaglepaw to jump over the Crooked Canyon after failing to convince Echopaw to do it. She shot a look at Thunderpaw, as if saying, shut up or you'll be next.Jumping across the canyon was against the rules, of course, like anything else Cascadepaw suggested. Like getting Eaglepaw to jump into the Endless Lake and swim to the bottom. Eaglepaw had actually been persuaded on that one, and Cascadepaw had been trying to get him to do other things ever since. Really annoying, she was. Persuasive too. She once convinced Swallowtail to let the five of them littermates as kits go out into the mountain. Swallowtail had been trying to live that down ever since.         Yeah, five. Echopaw leaped up as her last brother and only other sane littermate Falconpaw strolled into the den. His coat was brown and beige, a brown male calico, one of the rarest cats, as a male calico. Almost as rare as a male tortoiseshell. But, of course having a sensible littermate came with a catch. Falconpaw was, well, deaf.         However, Echopaw had adapted. She tapped the floor, then pointed subtly at the other three apprentices, then moved a paw in a spiral at her head, the sign they had made for they are being crazy.         She hid a smile as Falconpaw's expression became full of mirth and amusement. She was happy she had him.
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