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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 9, 2016 21:42:45 GMT -5
Is anyone still here?
I'm thinking of changing the idea over to a different set of Clans I had, called the Clans of the Seasons (which are, surprisingly, based around the four seasons) so that there will be less Clans, because there's not enough interest in this to warrant 6 Clans plus loners/rogues/kittypets, unfortunately.
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Post by Ninetales on Sept 10, 2016 6:28:07 GMT -5
Sorry about that! I am afraid I wasn't able to come up with many great ideas. I think that is a good idea and the territories could be based around such. Winter I could see a mountain based area or an area that typically colder and provides a lot of snow. Summer I could see an open based area like hills, meadows, etc. where they will be out and about under the Sun. Now Spring and Fall I am having a bit of trouble with because I can see forest environments for them, but I want them to be a bit different. I am guessing with Spring it is typically associated with the coming of new life. Water can provide new life so maybe an area where there is a lot of water around. I could also see switching Summer's territory with Spring's as with it being so hot they can still be under a sunny environment that provides a lot of water for cooling off. The meadows (mainly) I could see being associated with things like flowers and other things blooming so that could work with Spring too. That would leave Fall with the forest environment and I can see them being rather mix forest.
There could also be some bias on the clans part whenever their season rolls around. In their minds they could think that they have Starclan blessing (if we even go with Starclan as the name) because it is their current seasoning. This could make the clan feel a bit more superior and feel like they have more benefits until it switches to another season where that clan feels those benefits and superiority. I was also thinking that the location many believe their ancestors are watching them is similar to the Aurora Lights. These lights seem to show these cats that their ancestors are together in peace and the different colors mean that all of the clans are united. |
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 10, 2016 13:18:16 GMT -5
I actually have a roleplay already completed, but which never got much of a following, that is the Seasons Clans. SO I actually already have territories, camps, and traditions figured out. I'm mostly just alerting you all to the change so that you can give your opinions and switch over your claims to reflect the four Clans.
The territories for the seasons were actually pretty much what you described. WinterClan was mountainous, SpringClan was open meadows with some small groves of trees, and- ironically- a spring, as well as two streams coming off it. SummerClan was a mixture of open meadows near the SpringClan border, and ever-deepening forest as they neared FallClan. FallClan was in the foothills of WinterClan's mountains, with deep, ancient forests and rocky hills and ravines.
And yes, each Clan has very distinct traditions such as the Trials, the Telling, and the Welcoming, to name a few, and all are unique to each Clan. In the original Seasons roleplay, there was also a fifth group known as the Keepers who actually raised all Clan kits, and when they reached six moons of age they would be tested to see which Clan they would become part of, not knowing until their new Clan is assigned which they were born into. I'm conflicted about keeping this, since the idea was to make less groups. But then again, the Keepers is a much smaller group than any Clan, with the exception of the kits in its care.
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Post by Ninetales on Sept 10, 2016 13:27:38 GMT -5
Ah okay! Well I give my full approval of the change! I actually like the concept of the Keepers. It is an interesting idea and can help shape the clans. Do the Keepers do anything else besides raising and determining the faith of these clan kits?
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 11, 2016 12:28:32 GMT -5
I'd have to look back onto the thread to remember exactly, but essentially, the Keepers were the mediators both between the Clans and between the Clans and StarClan. That is, they were the closest and most connected with StarClan. There are four ranks of cats in the Keepers other than the council, which are guardians, messengers, healers, and shaman. There is a shaman of each season, and these cats are considered the embodiment of their season and the closest to StarClan. Their job is both to communicate with StarClan and guide the Clans, as well as to remember and pass down the history and stories of the Clans. Unlike medicine cats, they have no healing duties. The healers, on the other paw, have no special connection with StarClan but instead are exclusively healers, as their name would suggest. Messengers are cats who visit with the other Clans daily, generally to take an offering of prey and herbs, as the Keepers only have a very, very small territory and depend on the other Clans to support them. Messengers are also the cats who will retrieve newborn kits, or act as mediators in small disputes inside or between Clans. Guardians are cats whose job is exclusively to raise kits, whether they're queens that nurse them or toms who look after them while they play outside. Then, the entire group of the Keepers is ruled by a Council, which consists of three cats chosen from each of the groups other than shaman.
Gatherings, as well as the place where the cats meet with StarClan and the trials to determine kits' Clans, are all on the Keepers' territory, which sits in the center of the Clans' territories, sharing a small border with each.
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Post by Ninetales on Sept 11, 2016 14:10:41 GMT -5
This only makes me like and support the concept and keeping of the Keepers further. If you need any help then I will do my best. Other than that I will continue to keep an eye on this.
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 11, 2016 14:39:16 GMT -5
For the moment I'm just converting my Proboards forums from the old idea to the new one. All of the information was already finished on the Seasons Clans, so all I have to do is copy and paste it, and of course reformat some of it to fit with my forums. And then, of course, hope that some of the others will actually come back.
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 12, 2016 12:30:40 GMT -5
For now, just stick around and keep this thread near the top of the first page I guess.
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Post by crystalstar on Sept 14, 2016 21:53:04 GMT -5
This seems pretty cool, I'll certainly help out in any way I can  Um am I doing this right? My first time doing anything like this buuuuut I would like to be a kit??? Is this even how this works? Also will it let me become an apprentice and eventually leader? Oh yeah I mean a kit for groveclan |
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 15, 2016 9:09:41 GMT -5
Oh yeah I should probably update the front page. Unfortunately 6 Clans has proved to be more than attention warrants so instead I'm changing the idea. You can read the details on previous posts from this page. However, yes you may be a kit if that's what you want, and depending on your roleplay skill and characters' personality and traits, yes, it may eventually allow you to become leader. Definitely apprentice and then warrior.
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Post by Stormheart on Sept 16, 2016 7:12:59 GMT -5
Can I be a Clan leader?
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Post by Stormheart on Sept 16, 2016 7:14:10 GMT -5
I am almost at school so I will reply when I get in the bus 😀
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 16, 2016 14:01:50 GMT -5
Yes, sure. One sec, I need to actually update the page to reflect the new concept. As for Clan leaders, you get to pick which seasons Clan you lead in the same order you posted on this thread. So, if they ever come back, Rose gets first pick Ottersong gets second, and you get third Stormheart. So wait for a bit and see if they return; if they don't come back by around this time tomorrow (3:00 pm Eastern Time) then you can pick whichever Clan you like.
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Post by Stormheart on Sept 16, 2016 14:18:19 GMT -5
Okay great! Thank you. I have Eastern time too BTW😀
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Post by Stormheart on Sept 17, 2016 19:16:58 GMT -5
Can I have SummerClan?
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Post by Stormheart on Sept 17, 2016 19:41:34 GMT -5
If so, I will make my leader
Blazestar
Blazestar is a dark ginger she-cat with bright golden eyes. The feminine is thick-furred and large. She is quite muscular and her fur is very shiny. The Molly is a fair and kind leader, always listening to her clanmates' thoughts and opinions on important matters. Blazestar likes to go hunting and patrolling with her Clan. She insists that she must do what her clanmates do, as it is only fair. The Molly hates staying in camp and not helping with patrols, often letting others lead to see how they perform on her own leading patrols. Blazestar loves have fun at the end of the day, and just relax and play games with her clanmates under the evening sky. She is very serious and stern when she has to be though. Blazestar wishes to find a mate to spend her life with and even have a litter of kits. She trusts her deputy will be able to lead the Clan when the time comes with the help of one of her most trusted senior warriors. Blazestar is very prideful and confident in her Clan, insisting they do not need assistance unless the circumstances are extremely dire. The she-cat is very kind and caring, and treats every clanmate from the tiniest kit to the most senior elder with equal love and attention. She would gladly give all of her remaining seven lives to keep her Clan from harm. Blazestar is very skilled in battle, often leaving her foes scarred and deeply wounded, although she prefers to find a peaceful solution rather than fight with teeth and claws. Do not be fooled though, she is hot-headed and stubborn when she thinks what she believes in is right.
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 19, 2016 11:57:35 GMT -5
Looks alright I suppose. The forms on the actual site are a bit different, but it's a good start.
Just for some general writing advise though: try varying the lengths of your sentences somewhat, it adds a lot to your writing. Many of your sentences is pretty short and very similar in construction (especially at the beginning of your paragraph), which makes it seem rather boring and redundant after a few sentences. Try to group similar ideas in one sentence as much as possible, and when describing things, try to do so in as few words as possible to keep your paragraph concise. For example, when you are describing her, it may be better to write it something more like: "Blazestar is a large, muscular she-cat with bright golden eyes and thick, shiny dark ginger fur. [the next sentence is alright].... Blazestar likes to go hunting and patrolling with her Clan, insisting that it is only fair that she do what her Clanmates do." And so on and so forth. You do you, but generally when describing things in roleplays, packing as much detail into as short a space as possible is better. Length isn't always literacy.
Just want to specify, I'm not just criticizing you, simply giving suggestions on how you might improve. I generally try to point out flaws I see in others' writing (and welcome critiques of mine as well) as it's difficult to fix problems one doesn't know they have. And besides, what roleplayer doesn't want to be a better writer? Sorry if I offend you in any way.
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Post by Stormheart on Sept 19, 2016 19:20:06 GMT -5
That's okay, I was typing really fast, and it was on my phone so it was difficult to really tell. Normally, my sentences are long and there are not as many. I'l fix that in a bit. |
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 19, 2016 23:38:56 GMT -5
Oh okay. It's fine then, you don't have to fix it. I just had no other example if your writing so I had no way of knowing that wasn't typical of you.
Anyways, your cat is accepted, except for one thing: I just realized her name isn't a SummerClan name. If you look on the front page, I believe it says somewhere the names each Clan has. SummerClan cats, for example, are all named after animals.
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Post by Stormheart on Sept 20, 2016 5:45:16 GMT -5
Okay! The funny thing is that she was originally going to be Squirrelstar. LOL XD
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Post by Aphelyon on Sept 21, 2016 15:07:53 GMT -5
Lol well, I suppose that works out then.
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