Post by mintedstar/fur on Aug 8, 2021 23:22:31 GMT -5
Gotten to read more! I like the story a lot, but there's a lot of exposition. Particularly in chapter 1. It might be more expressive to think of scenes to show world building rather than have the main character just talk about the world building.
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