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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 19, 2021 9:14:37 GMT -5
I'mma bump
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Aug 5, 2021 13:40:12 GMT -5
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Aug 31, 2021 22:21:54 GMT -5
Author is on hiatus, figured why stop my general monthly bump?
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Sept 14, 2021 22:39:00 GMT -5
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Post by Sundance on Apr 12, 2024 12:06:39 GMT -5
I wasn't lying when I said this fanfiction positively haunts me. It may be 3 and a half years since I last worked on it, but it feels like yesterday. I still think of it often, even getting lost in scenes in my mind. The characters are so dear to me. I always dream of finishing it, but then I never do, and life gets increasingly busy ... but still I tell myself I will finish it. I just read through the prologue and Part 1&2 of Chapter 1 again and when I got to the cliffhanger ending I was like ... that's it? Where's the rest of it? Like ~I'm~ not the one that needs to finish writing it. Sob. :-P I also suffer from imposters syndrome where I'm like, oh gosh, what I wrote before is so good, I don't know if I can replicate it again, and that stills my hands from going on ... incessantly. Stupidly! Edit: in a state of insanity, after an 8 hour work shift with school bearing down on me, I decided to churn out the rest of Chapter 1. Part 3. Phew. It's a little unpolished, but it's there! It's done! mintedstar/fur🦇
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Post by phantomstar57 on Apr 12, 2024 13:52:20 GMT -5
Finally got a chance to read a bit on here after a little hiatus of my own. Intriguing tale. Will be reading bits and pieces as I can! Sundance-Love your avatar by the way-looks very Maine Coony!
Minted-good to see you again, too.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 12, 2024 15:52:18 GMT -5
Oh heck yeah! Something to read after work!!!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 12, 2024 15:52:36 GMT -5
Hey Phantom!
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Post by phantomstar57 on Apr 12, 2024 16:18:17 GMT -5
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Post by Sundance on Apr 14, 2024 21:51:01 GMT -5
Finally got a chance to read a bit on here after a little hiatus of my own. Intriguing tale. Will be reading bits and pieces as I can! Sundance-Love your avatar by the way-looks very Maine Coony!
Minted-good to see you again, too. Hi Phantom!!! :-D Thanks for stopping by to check out my fan series, it's wonderful to meet you! And great to hear from a fellow hiatus-ess. ;-P
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Post by Katanaheart on Apr 15, 2024 21:11:08 GMT -5
Finally, got around to reading!
A question though! With the cherry water blood, Death initially thinks it’s because of a ThunderClan warrior in his death throes but then thinks it’s due to Mintfur’s death. Is this an error in judgement on Death’s part? As Mintfur died, from a continuity standpoint sometime before or around the same time Little Kit and his siblings were born?
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Post by Sundance on Apr 15, 2024 23:18:22 GMT -5
Finally, got around to reading! A question though! With the cherry water blood, Death initially thinks it’s because of a ThunderClan warrior in his death throes but then thinks it’s due to Mintfur’s death. Is this an error in judgement on Death’s part? As Mintfur died, from a continuity standpoint sometime before or around the same time Little Kit and his siblings were born? Hi Katanaheart!! :-D AAHH, thank you for reading! It's great to see you! Sorry for the confusion there-- So Death got blood on him from the ThunderClan warrior dying which he then hastily described as cherry water to Little Kit. He then gets blood on them again when Mintfur dies in the present which reminds him of that time with Little Kit. Little Kit's death actually takes place many moons before Mintfur's death. Years, perhaps. So most of Chapter 1 is a flashback to a distant past, aside from the very beginning and end.
"Death took a deep, shuddering breath, as a phantom pain spread over his shoulder blades and he fell into a far-flung memory.
While this hasn't been explained yet, Death felt a "phantom pain" in this scene as he is still without his wings, signifying that Little Kit would have still been alive by the time of Mintfur's death if Death hadn't accidentally killed Little Kit all that time ago. Death still thinks of Little Kit often and wishes he could be found.
I should have made the timeline clearer so I will look into editing the last few paragraphs for clarification on what's going on and where Death is at! Thank you so much for pointing this out to me and I hope this explained things rather then made them more confusing, ha. :-)
Edit--I just realized that in the Prologue, Life states that Death is "off parole" which wouldn't make sense if his wings hadn't returned, so I changed that.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 16, 2024 0:41:59 GMT -5
Overall good! Thanks for asking!
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Post by Katanaheart on Apr 16, 2024 10:05:57 GMT -5
Finally, got around to reading! A question though! With the cherry water blood, Death initially thinks it’s because of a ThunderClan warrior in his death throes but then thinks it’s due to Mintfur’s death. Is this an error in judgement on Death’s part? As Mintfur died, from a continuity standpoint sometime before or around the same time Little Kit and his siblings were born? Hi Katanaheart!! :-D AAHH, thank you for reading! It's great to see you! Sorry for the confusion there-- So Death got blood on him from the ThunderClan warrior dying which he then hastily described as cherry water to Little Kit. He then gets blood on them again when Mintfur dies in the present which reminds him of that time with Little Kit. Little Kit's death actually takes place many moons before Mintfur's death. Years, perhaps. So most of Chapter 1 is a flashback to a distant past, aside from the very beginning and end.
"Death took a deep, shuddering breath, as a phantom pain spread over his shoulder blades and he fell into a far-flung memory.
While this hasn't been explained yet, Death felt a "phantom pain" in this scene as he is still without his wings, signifying that Little Kit would have still been alive by the time of Mintfur's death if Death hadn't accidentally killed Little Kit all that time ago. Death still thinks of Little Kit often and wishes he could be found.
I should have made the timeline clearer so I will look into editing the last few paragraphs for clarification on what's going on and where Death is at! Thank you so much for pointing this out to me and I hope this explained things rather then made them more confusing, ha. :-)
Edit--I just realized that in the Prologue, Life states that Death is "off parole" which wouldn't make sense if his wings hadn't returned, so I changed that. Ah, I see now! I had the timeline in reverse of what it was supposed to be. Mintfur’s death is the most recent event with Little Kit’s death having occurred seasons prior.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 17, 2024 10:29:14 GMT -5
I'm off to reread everything. :3 Gonna do a play-by-play I think.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 17, 2024 10:39:17 GMT -5
Prologue reread play-by-play: Mood Death. I too dissociate after a job. Gotta appreciate the effort it takes for you to add in the 'Nowhere' image. Good dog descriptions. Also Death sounds tired. Harold's a good boy. Maybe. Look, I think lilypads will hold my weight too. By all rights, they should. Love how the HellHounds have a party and Death's just here like " -_- Another day" Parole still interests me. "Hello, my name is ____!" Death: This does not compute. See, Mintfur has a fun time with short term memory and just ... follows Death. XD Your descriptions continue to amuse me.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 17, 2024 10:58:03 GMT -5
Chapter 1 Part 1 reread play-by-play: Look, would you be surprised if a monster reached down from the sky? Would you really? XD What made you assume he finds ANY of them later, Mintfur? Death: I'm gonna say something utterly terrible in a very straight forward way. With added deadpan, as applied by Mint (me). You mean I have to die and pass tests again? XD You didn't seem to care much later about the paw. There's a difference between forgetting and setting the memory aside. Frankly, I'd be more annoyed by mimicking Lilybloom, but that's me. XD Byeeee Mintfur. Wonder if he does this for the Dark Forest too. Or whether it's more Connections (tm) he's looking for. - Honey, if I smelled like rabbit pee, I don't think the rabbits will think you're one of their own. Ah the 'You look worse than a rabbit' insult. I can see apprentices have such original jabs. /j Ah ha, I sense ... plot. Death, adoption by the end of life seems like something they'd turn you down for. Deeeeeath ... don't smile at the plot. It'll encourage it. - I'm amused that he can now identify names if he hears the kit say them. Don't tell the kit about your job. It's a bad idea. Good job, Imaginary Friend. Good job Death, you've found a weird kit. And you've adopted it. You might make a good med. cat. But fair is fair that you shouldn't have to be. DAD. PFFt. I forgot that part. Death, did you just make a wine joke? - Death, the resident ghost. Life has issues with adoption.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 17, 2024 11:09:39 GMT -5
Chapter 1 Part 2 reread play-by-play: Ghost Kit, ghost kit, ghost kit! Will becoming a puddle on the ground help anything, Death? Ah, asking the real questions now you're dead. As if Little Kit needed to be more scared, now we're introducing The Dogs. Use your own legs, Death. They're attached to your body, unlike the HellHounds. Or wings. Wings work too. Why not start with that, idiot? You're not being very convincing, Death. Good job, Death. You created a tunnel ghost. - Life, I think being pissed off is miiiildly allowed right now, so I'll give that to you. 'Healthy' might be a stretch, but wasn't supposed to die sounds right. The bosses want to speeeeeeeak with yooooooou.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 17, 2024 11:30:15 GMT -5
Chapter 1 Part 3 heh heh heh new part >:3 play-by-play: I feel very much like this is a warped dream scape. "Hello fellow cats, we are totally 100% cats. Look, aren't we cats!" Very good imagery about the pinned wings. That's a fun mental image. Death, they're telling you that you can, in fact, not do cuddles. Yeaaaah, should he have known that though? Yeah, maybe the whole 'spending every moment with him' would kinda entail you wouldn't have his memories. Mind readers be suck like that. Ooo! Names! Seeeee, now we have a ghost roaming around. I'm sure that'll be fun. - Ooooh wait, I see. So Little Kit was the past and we're having a fun time jumpity. I assume. Well. How's that going for you, Death? XD Life, that's still very backstabbing of you. DEAAAAAAAAATH YOU IDIOT Death ... have a single thought. One would do. XD Life ... Was the thought meant to be incouraging originally, because now you just look cruel. Good for dragging him out though. I mean, I hate to say, but the obsession doesn't boad well Death. It might be just a little bit of a good idea. Little Kit won't want to see you. - Good job Death. You've graduated to having Issues. Also oof. Generally oof.
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Post by stormshade1 on Apr 25, 2024 22:49:31 GMT -5
Hi amazing job! Just wanted to point out, because my brain will not let me leave without saying this, but Lilybloom becomes Lilybear at one point in the prologue. In part 3 it also says til, but it should be 'til. In part 3 it also says "the Celestials' cocked their heads", but it should just be Celestials, and it says "what won't they do to me", but it probably should be will. I also says the Celestials were almost human, is that intended? Would Death know what humans are, or would they be refered to as Twolegs? But all in all, AMAZING fic, and I love the... I'm not sure how to express it, but the way the creatures, the HellHounds for example, are kinda gory and whatnot, but in the perfect way if you know what I mean... you know what, that sounds really weird, but wtv.
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Post by stormshade1 on Apr 25, 2024 22:58:39 GMT -5
Oh and also if Death is still on parole in prologue how come HellHounds have snouts?
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