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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 9, 2019 23:33:23 GMT -5
Haza! May I ask your favorite part of the chapter?
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Post by phantomstar57 on Feb 10, 2019 20:25:34 GMT -5
Haza! May I ask your favorite part of the chapter? OOOPS! Forgot to put it in a spoiler!
When Storm saved Tide, then vanished, leaving him vulnerable.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 11, 2019 10:30:06 GMT -5
Awesome! But better put that in a spoiler I think that was my favorite part too, honestly.
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Post by phantomstar57 on Feb 11, 2019 14:10:45 GMT -5
Awesome! But better put that in a spoiler I think that was my favorite part too, honestly. Thanks for reminding me :-)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Feb 13, 2019 8:52:13 GMT -5
Caught up on chapters 5 and 6, this is getting better and better! Storm chose to be Tide's guardian - my ship has sailed! And I love the fight scene. Storm taking over and defeating the fox was such an exciting moment.
Also, the significance of Tide and Storm not having Clan names just struck me, since Tide talked about his original Clan. Did he mean one of the Clans he encountered during his afterlife, or are they from a time before Clan manes evolved?
Pretty sure Storm's going to be back. Although her being away for a bit might give Tide some practice standing on his own feet for once.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 13, 2019 14:31:56 GMT -5
~Sapphire~Many past events and secrets are definitely unfolding, making way for future events. Keep that ship ready, and any others you may have! We'll see how many make it and how many sink Think back to the prologue, when Tide first died. Then connect it to what's happening now. It'll give you some clues. This can only mean trouble, lol.
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Post by Pyropelt on Feb 13, 2019 22:34:12 GMT -5
I was so shocked that Storm took over Tide's body! I was neutral on her, but now begin to like her.
I love how you show us what Tide is thinking and feeling on acount of his actions, but don't hammer us over the head with what it was that Tide did. Like, you don't mention it everytime he thinks of the past, you know?
I really like how you go back and forth with the past and present! I think your writing in a way that is really smart, and easy to understand where Tide's mindset is at any given moment. And I love Cloudleap! You do a great job with all your character's personalities!
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 14, 2019 20:24:41 GMT -5
Pyropelt Thank you very much!
Glad you're starting to like Storm more! She's definitely going to have a big impact on the story as a whole.
I think I get it, and I'm pretty happy I can convey things nicely in such a way. Same goes with the past/present dynamic. I'm glad it's not confusing at all and helps explain things!
Doing different personalities always worries me, tbh. I'm always scared they will all come out as stereotypes and nothing more. I desperately want to convey characters with depth and substance, so knowing I'm doing that helps a great deal.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Feb 15, 2019 1:35:13 GMT -5
Wheeee! Finally here! Time to stop reading!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Feb 15, 2019 13:36:22 GMT -5
Oh, there's many ships that I'd like to see happen. Guess I'll just have to wait and see...
So he definitely comes from some kind of organised group, but with some different names. Interesting.
Indeed xD
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Feb 15, 2019 14:03:20 GMT -5
I click spoiler tags - learn nothing - but grow more curious.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 15, 2019 17:40:50 GMT -5
I click spoiler tags - learn nothing - but grow more curious. Quit clicking the spoiler tags before you read the story!!! XD
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Feb 15, 2019 19:33:35 GMT -5
I'm sooooooooooooorry. Bad habit! XD
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 20, 2019 17:05:09 GMT -5
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Post by Maplestone360 on Feb 20, 2019 18:39:04 GMT -5
I'm all caught up! And aah! Suspense!
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Post by phantomstar57 on Feb 20, 2019 18:47:27 GMT -5
good chapter!
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 20, 2019 20:47:28 GMT -5
Glad you guys enjoyed it!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Feb 23, 2019 17:35:58 GMT -5
Some backstory, yes!! I loved getting to know Sevenstar - her backstory made me so emotional, and really gives another side to her character. I definitely hope we get to see more of her!
As for Tide... thanks for telling me most of what I wanted to know last chapter xD And I'm not sure what to think about his plan. If he somehow manages to get himself killed for real, I feel like the consequences will make him regret it.
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Post by phantomstar57 on Feb 23, 2019 21:56:36 GMT -5
Pyropelt Thank you very much!
Glad you're starting to like Storm more! She's definitely going to have a big impact on the story as a whole.
I think I get it, and I'm pretty happy I can convey things nicely in such a way. Same goes with the past/present dynamic. I'm glad it's not confusing at all and helps explain things!
Doing different personalities always worries me, tbh. I'm always scared they will all come out as stereotypes and nothing more. I desperately want to convey characters with depth and substance, so knowing I'm doing that helps a great deal. No worries there. Your characters always have depth and scope, thus never appear stereotypical or shallow.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Feb 24, 2019 6:54:50 GMT -5
No worries there. Your characters always have depth and scope, thus never appear stereotypical or shallow. Seconded! I'm really enjoying the different personalities in Death Wish
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 24, 2019 18:42:58 GMT -5
Thank you, guys! It really helps to know that! Now I just gotta think up some stuff for chapter 8. got a basis, but I need the more in depth stuff yet, the real flesh of the chapter.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Feb 25, 2019 20:45:04 GMT -5
Just a bump.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 6, 2019 17:07:30 GMT -5
Just a bump for now, and I want to also say that I'll get a new chapter up in the next few days, hopefully. A lot of big exams are this week, so I have to study hard for them. thanks for the patients!
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Post by phantomstar57 on Mar 10, 2019 14:46:47 GMT -5
Tho I leaned toward betraying his Clan, I am inclined to think he unwittingly caused some sort of accident or event that killed a lot of his Clan and the guilt has caused him to never want to think about what happened ever again.
Good story!
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 10, 2019 16:58:38 GMT -5
Interesting theory, Phantom. I'm pretty hyped to write what happens next, tbh. It's exciting stuff, I think. Any parts of the chapter you liked in particular?
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Post by phantomstar57 on Mar 11, 2019 10:34:24 GMT -5
Well I think when he finally faces those memories and accepts that it happened and his responsibility for it, he may get to the promised land.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 11, 2019 11:17:28 GMT -5
It's a good theory, but do keep in mind we're only on chapter 8. Anything could happen *wink*
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Post by phantomstar57 on Mar 11, 2019 12:08:38 GMT -5
It's a good theory, but do keep in mind we're only on chapter 8. Anything could happen *wink* True, but i am thinking long term. I am certain he has a lot of obstacles and heartache to go thru before he comes to terms with whatever he did.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 11, 2019 17:15:59 GMT -5
Can't say you're right or wrong, but I do like the theory. And I appreciate the reads and comments, as always
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