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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jul 12, 2018 13:15:24 GMT -5
*pats* Watch out.
Errrrr, needa update PtS. But I also need to pass this college finals. Maybe big 5 page update when it's over with...
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 12, 2018 13:36:27 GMT -5
oh good luck!
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 17, 2018 14:53:32 GMT -5
p. 26
i c e c r e a m
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jul 20, 2018 14:58:42 GMT -5
Ice cream, you scream, we all scream for *is smothered*
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 20, 2018 16:33:23 GMT -5
no screaming in this nice comic, of course  |
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jul 21, 2018 12:23:37 GMT -5
Yet
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 21, 2018 14:46:02 GMT -5
or ever  |
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 23, 2018 14:56:52 GMT -5
p. 27
Tadpole saying "My name is Glass" is directly lifted from the original and probably meant to mirror how Scourge introduces himself to the alley cats for the first time ("My name is Scourge," of course). In the original he says it directly after a scene break and with no background or narration, so it gives the impression he's announcing it to the world at large, rather than addressing someone in particular. Which technically could be the case. He is either speaking to or overheard by a cat named Honey, who sort of freaks out, calls out to Pounce and Tess, and escorts him to BloodClan HQ without explaining a thing. (Prior to this, he has a run-in with Lynn where she tells him to consider joining BloodClan--the two scenes have essentially been combined into one.)
Oh, and symbolism?
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jul 23, 2018 15:57:58 GMT -5
*whistles*
And we start the plot.
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 23, 2018 16:02:48 GMT -5
I bet Lynn navigates the way to Sasha’s nest |
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jul 23, 2018 19:33:01 GMT -5
You keep saying that. Maybe it'll be true.
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 23, 2018 19:55:02 GMT -5
we’ll just have to wait and see but I have a great feeling |
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 30, 2018 16:55:35 GMT -5
p. 28
In the original no one really tried to verify that he was Scourge's son. I think it's a lot more reasonable for Lynn to accidentally ask leading questions than for all the adults to just ignore the fact that there is zero proof of his parentage.
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Post by tiger beetle on Jul 30, 2018 23:38:03 GMT -5
 hmm |
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 6, 2018 12:27:23 GMT -5
p. 29
Wonder where Lynn picked that up.
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 11, 2018 20:04:51 GMT -5
p. 30 I actually had Willie as orange right up until the last minute, when I realized he was on the cover of the third Ravenpaw manga. The manga cover actually confirms that Snapper's medium-hue fur is reddish brown and that Tess's shaded fur is gray, though Pounce is a little more yellow than I've made him in this comic. (The cat that might be Minty is gray, maybe gray-brown, but my thought that it's her is based on where the cat is coming from, and there are no distinguishing features.) Of course, that's ignoring the questionable canonicity of colors on the manga covers, considering pink-brown Millie. But since the manga is the only available source, I'm going to take it for what it's worth, kind of like how I've made Scourge's collar purple despite that never being mentioned in real-canon. Anyway--I am a little disappointed that Willie is another brown tabby villain, but I think he looks fine.  |
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Aug 15, 2018 15:13:57 GMT -5
Your dedication to accurate coloring astonish me.
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 15, 2018 15:49:15 GMT -5
thank you
but I can assure you that if I’d already posted any pages of Willie he’d have been staying orange—I made the change because I still had the Pixelmator with layers
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Aug 15, 2018 16:13:18 GMT -5
I relate. That's why a lot of my characters still have similar, complicated, styles.
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 16, 2018 20:36:17 GMT -5
makes sense
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 17, 2018 22:08:27 GMT -5
p. 31
In the original, Storm and Scourge had only one kit. Obviously the story still relies on a lot of coincidence, but it's slightly more reasonable for there to be three possible names to pick.
Also: I updated the cover to the one with a yellow outline.
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Aug 18, 2018 23:30:00 GMT -5
We going to learn the other names?
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 19, 2018 0:52:15 GMT -5
Brick names them in the comic  Arum and Lightning. (Arum is the common name for a family of flowers that are deadly toxic to cats.) |
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Aug 19, 2018 17:14:56 GMT -5
Oooo! Nice!
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 19, 2018 23:04:08 GMT -5
can you BELIEVE I forgot to mention how on page 30, both when making the script AND when typing the actual text box on the page, I initially made Willie tell Lynn she was "disturbing the peach"
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Aug 19, 2018 23:47:01 GMT -5
That's ... beautiful. CX
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 20, 2018 2:04:33 GMT -5
leave that peach alone Lynn
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 20, 2018 15:59:40 GMT -5
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Post by tiger beetle on Aug 22, 2018 23:08:21 GMT -5
p. 32
I discovered while looking at Snipe in the manga that he is actually drawn inconsistently within the one book. At one point his tail is solid black and shorter than the other cats' tails (they all have pretty long tails, but his is noticeably shorter than the others'). At another point his tail is solid black but full length. At another point his tail is full length, with black at the base and brown on the end.
I chose to give him a short, solid black tail because 1. having a short tail will be one minor thing to set him apart from other designs and 2. Barley(?) says in dialogue that Snipe is "the big one with the short tail."
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Aug 23, 2018 12:25:47 GMT -5
I like that design!
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Arum and Lightning. (Arum is the common name for a family of flowers that are deadly toxic to cats.)