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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Dec 22, 2017 13:19:34 GMT -5
No one! Or you will shame them with your superior knowledge!Oh wow, well done!! I'm glad you got it to go the way you wanted to this time. Finally, Will is ready to be unleashed on the world!!
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Dec 22, 2017 20:22:43 GMT -5
Superior headcannon. As soon as I edit out the typos and get some of the worldbuilding straight, she will be!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Dec 28, 2017 17:15:19 GMT -5
Nope - it's knowledge now
I always forget that there's editing. Still, working on worldbuilding should be fun, right? Can't say the same about typos though :/
(In other news, I finally reopened the document for this fic today. So we're officially back in business!)
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Dec 29, 2017 15:07:54 GMT -5
Heh, heh. It's cannon to me and anyone I RP with.
ehhh, I'm working on editing now. I'm looking through it and I can't believe how much better I've gotten than the first draft. The first draft was...all over the place.
(WOOT!)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Dec 31, 2017 19:35:16 GMT -5
Canon to me too because you're the only reason I know about him
Yay, well done! I think first drafts are supposed to be grim though. Otherwise you don't get the sense of achievement when you finish the second
(Slowly, but surely. I've still not decided what part to start with...)
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 2, 2018 0:22:44 GMT -5
Canon to me too because you're the only reason I know about himYay, well done! I think first drafts are supposed to be grim though. Otherwise you don't get the sense of achievement when you finish the second (Slowly, but surely. I've still not decided what part to start with...) Nice, nice. Better be true. The second is way better, I must say! (Start at the ending and work your way backwards.)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 2, 2018 17:24:41 GMT -5
Actually this is embarrassing... I originally thought he was your oc. A lot of things made more sense when I finally figured out that he was in a bookGoing in the right direction! The extract you posted in October was really good, has that made the cut so far? (That is good advice. I'll see if I can decide what part to end with cx)
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 3, 2018 3:54:03 GMT -5
I've heard that a lot. Trust me on that one. There are a few characters I will claim as my OCs, but not that. I claim my headcannon appearance of him, but history and personality are all Rachel Caine.
So far that's made the cut, yes. It's one of the bits that isn't getting changed much, since I really want to include those characters. So far, I'm editing for spelling and starting to figure out what needs to be rewritten. Most of the first part is getting kept, apart from the editing needed for plot accuracy and, for lack of a better word, historic accuracy.
(Ah, that tough little challenge.)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 4, 2018 17:00:21 GMT -5
I'm pretty sure you've adopted him from Rachel Caine at this point
Ah good! Yeah, they seem pretty fun in that scene. Does historic accuracy mean the Will mythos? Good luck with that! Take your cub!
(My current strategy is writing my three plot threads individually and hoping they'll join together soon)
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 5, 2018 17:43:54 GMT -5
I'm pretty sure I have too, just don't tell them so I can continue in my delusion.
They are so fun. They turn up more in Double Mirror, however. And I really need to think up a different name for that story. The titles never stick. Yeah, sort of that. More like 'would this sort of tech even work if _____ and _____ happened?' It takes place in an alt reality, so I get to think of that stuff. Then I gotta do a lot of research about what you do and what happens after someone dies. Cub, go find me decent inspiration.
(Been there, done that. Sooner or later it worked out.)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 6, 2018 7:24:30 GMT -5
My lips are sealed.
I like 'Double Mirror' c: Although I guess you have the best idea of whether it fits the story. (You're talking to the queen of non-stick titles. You wouldn't believe the number of story ideas I have that have a theme song instead of a title. Not even counting this fic.) If it's non spoilery, I'd love to help with that. Sounds really interesting! Ah, fun. I think it depends on whether the death's suspicious or not, luckily I've not really had to deal with that.
(It's beginning to work. I should have at least a sneak peek ready soon.)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 6, 2018 11:19:42 GMT -5
Aand the sneak peek is here! foxdance mintedstar/fur » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ ᴛᴜᴇsᴅᴀʏ ᴇᴍʙᴇʀ ✴ ❆αυяσяα @battlingfear prophet Mosspool Dingoleap ѕωιƒтƒαℓcση we are back in business! The rest of the chapter should be up this week, then hopefully I can return to fortnightly updates. “So this where we were last night?” she clarifies.
Ivypaw nods.
Holly looks around her. They’re stood close to one end of the fallen tree, in the shadows below where the cliff is highest. Thanks to last night’s rain, now a light drizzle, the sandy ground holds no pawsteps other than their own, current ones. The same rain has washed away all traces of cat scent from the hollow - those that aren’t already masked by the foetid, rotting smells of late leaf-fall.
She remembers one night like this, back on the moor, when a fox got almost to the entrance of their den without even Jay sensing it, and vanished into the fog without a trace. It’s impossible to track anything in this weather.
“Let’s start from what we know,” she says, trying to sound confident regardless. “Sol escaped from the hollow. He might’ve been wounded, but he didn’t want to see Cinderpelt, otherwise he’d have stuck around. So where did he go?”
“Um…”
Holly’s beginning to resent being shoved into - whatever this is. Specifically, being shoved into it along with only a recalcerent apprentice.
“You said you talked to him. Did he say anything about his plans?”
Ivypaw sniffs. “Dovepaw talked to him. I was just there, as usual. I don’t know… He told us a lot about where he’d been. Mostly places I have no idea how to get to. Why are we talking about this, again? Can’t we just track him?”
“If you’re a much better tracker than I am, then yeah, sure. Go ahead.”
Ivypaw’s silent.
“What-?” Holly asks, then stutters to a halt as she realises where Ivypaw’s thoughts are probably leading. “Well, we do know one cat who’s able to track him.”
“No. We are not getting Dovepaw’s stupid prophecy involved in this.”
“It’s this, or I ask you more questions. Or we give up.”
Ivypaw glares at her, and Holly knows she’s won.
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 6, 2018 20:27:35 GMT -5
Thank you for keeping my secret.
I like the name Double Mirror as well, but for the first book out of two, it doesn't fit. I think I'll use if for book 2, but think of something else for book 1. ^^ (Heh, that's funny. I actually usually just think up something on the fly and it sticks. For the fan fictions. For the novels, they never do. Will to Live had the running title One More Moment for a year before I thought up the pun 'Will to Live'.) Yeah. I can probably PM you some of the rougher details for the really tough things. It's me trying to figure out whether the alt reality should even had...sever things. Semi-complicated. I'll send em over once you're on again. Some are, some aren't. Hence why I'm trying to get things to work. Time frames are hard to work in. Luckily I've never had to deal with it either.
(Such a sneaky peek. I loved it!)
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Post by foxdance on Jan 8, 2018 10:31:45 GMT -5
Yay, this is back! The sneakpeak was awesome!! I'm really looking forward to the rest of the chapter!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 10, 2018 4:48:37 GMT -5
mintedstar/furNo problem xDAh, fair enough. Good luck with the new title, then! (I envy you! The only title I ever thought up like that was A Lamentation of Swans. A year is worth waiting for a pun like that ) Waiting for when I'm on is probably a bad idea - I'm logging on at odd times because of getting back to school. Pm me whenever? (Thank you!) foxdanceIt's back! I'm glad you liked the sneak peek - the rest of the chapter will be up as soon as I can edit it c:
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 10, 2018 13:02:33 GMT -5
Thank you! I had to wait two years for that pun. Ha, ha. The year I had One More Moment and the year that I knew that wasn't a good title. Sure thing! I almost caught you last night. XD I'll have to write it up when I'm a touch less busy.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 10, 2018 15:52:45 GMT -5
Thank you! I had to wait two years for that pun. Ha, ha. The year I had One More Moment and the year that I knew that wasn't a good title. Sure thing! I almost caught you last night. XD I'll have to write it up when I'm a touch less busy. That is dedication. Mmm, One More Moment sounds ever so slightly like a romance title to my mind. I think I almost caught you earlier this evening, but I had to go do work before I could reply xD Sure, take your time. Or if you'd rather sort it out for yourself, I'm not fussed c;
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 11, 2018 0:26:20 GMT -5
Thank you! I had to wait two years for that pun. Ha, ha. The year I had One More Moment and the year that I knew that wasn't a good title. Sure thing! I almost caught you last night. XD I'll have to write it up when I'm a touch less busy. That is dedication. Mmm, One More Moment sounds ever so slightly like a romance title to my mind. I think I almost caught you earlier this evening, but I had to go do work before I could reply xD Sure, take your time. Or if you'd rather sort it out for yourself, I'm not fussed c; Whoo! I'm gonna have to read it later. ^^ Hum. Never thought of it that way, but probably. Good thing I changed it. It's sooo not a romance. I'll probably need an extra opinion, so I'll probably do something later. I'm still working out the kinks and that's the problem.
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Post by ѕωιƒтƒαℓcση on Jan 11, 2018 21:21:31 GMT -5
I think I've said this before, but I love how you're handling this AU. It's still clear who everyone is but at the same time there are the tiny changes that reflect how they grew up; Dovepaw coming across as a bit more spoiled rather than just naive, Holly lacking the trace of haughtyness that book Hollyleaf had.
Anyways, I loved the chapter and I'm looking forward to the next one!
also I maaaaay be shipping Holly and Ivypaw just a little bit right now
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Post by foxdance on Jan 13, 2018 1:19:00 GMT -5
lol, I agree with Swiftfalcon. I'm kind of shipping Holly and Ivypaw a little bit too~ This was a really good chapter, Sapphire! You did a nice job both relaying lots of information and keeping it really interesting, too.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 13, 2018 6:30:05 GMT -5
mintedstar/furYou do that Think of all the innocent romance readers you're missing out on fooling, though. (Although the cover would probably give the real genre away) ѕωιƒтƒαℓcσηThank you! Yeah, Dovepaw's definitely been affected by all the attention that she's had (although the fact that we see her through Ivypaw's eyes a lot of the time doesn't help). I think Holly's spent time already trying to figure out where she fits in, rather than taking her place in ThunderClan for granted like in the books I'm glad you liked it! There's potential, that's all I'm gonna say
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 13, 2018 6:33:25 GMT -5
foxdanceThere seems to be a consensus, then Thank you! I'm glad I kept the interest; when I read the chapter back there seemed to be a lot of dialogue. The next chapter is going to be more action packed.
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 13, 2018 15:09:29 GMT -5
mintedstar/fur You do that Think of all the innocent romance readers you're missing out on fooling, though. (Although the cover would probably give the real genre away) Oh fun. Something new to ship. Also, I've been using this fic to test out new art programs, so I have a ton Hollyleaf pieces I draw with BaH in mind. (The cover would.) And if they want romance they have to be satisfied with a couple of the secondary main characters getting love interests. That's about it. I focus on platonic relationships a little more than romantic.
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Post by foxdance on Jan 14, 2018 0:50:55 GMT -5
I actually used to ship Holly/Ivy in the actual books. I don't do it so much anymore b/c I haven't read the books in forever, but my love for that ship is slowly being reawakened by this story.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 19, 2018 17:45:16 GMT -5
mintedstar/furI'm always happy to provide? Omg PLEASE SHOW ME!! I'm flattered to be the inspiration for your art! Tbh I spent an hour today in a bookshop trying to find something that wasn't romance focused. So I need books that focus on platonic relationships (this is not working with the shipping conversation we seem to be having but hey) foxdanceHaha I used to ship them a bit (Holly died before I could really get into it though.) This fic is definitely reawakening my love of their relationship, we'll have to see what that turns into
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 19, 2018 23:33:47 GMT -5
Yes. X'D There need not be a questionmark there. I shall soon! I have two. Oh, then you'll probably like mine. I'm trying to remember when romantic relationships appear. I don't think it's until later in the first series. Book 3, perhaps. And as I said, that's between secondary main characters. And I love the new chapter!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 22, 2018 5:55:00 GMT -5
*I'm always happy to provide! xD Ahh I can't wait! First art for this fic!
Sounds like my kind of series!
Yay, thank you! Favourite part? And good timing - the new one should be up really soon. I have a half decent outline for once which is nice.
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Post by mintedstar/fur on Jan 23, 2018 0:46:17 GMT -5
I'll try and post them tomorrow when I'm on my phone. ^^ Goody! Favorite part. Hum. I love how the characters are so well written that they stick to original personalities but you still have them complete a story in such a unique way. Nice! That's really nice!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 23, 2018 16:39:57 GMT -5
Yay!
The first of your massive fanbase has been found! On that subject, have you read any good books lately?
Aww thank you! I try, I try... Yes! Just need to make myself write it up!
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