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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 9, 2017 15:13:42 GMT -5
mintedstar/fur🦇 (So? what is it?) Nice! Because I love other people's opinions, favourite part so far?
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Post by prophet on Oct 9, 2017 15:22:16 GMT -5
~Sapphire~ - Oml, that's amazing, hahaha. We don't do things like that, but she's very lenient and airheaded :3
Lol, when you get threatened a lunch detention if you don't pay more attention XD Also, my dad once grounded me by saying I couldn't read
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Post by prophet on Oct 9, 2017 15:22:40 GMT -5
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 9, 2017 15:25:08 GMT -5
( :') I've got more to read.)
(Oh, it's foreshadowing to the fact the thief I'm RPing is going to be killed off by Nov-Dec.)
Chapter 1! Chapter 1 still catches my attention. I also love the fact you switched up the mentors a little. Chapter 1 attracted me the most because later chapters focuses on a lot of characters. Chapter 1 felt very personal.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 9, 2017 21:00:43 GMT -5
🎃 Yay for getting all caught up!
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Post by foxdance on Oct 10, 2017 12:09:44 GMT -5
Awesome chapter, Sapphire! Sol seems to be trying to get information from the apprentices; although it kind of seems like he's getting crushed by a tree, so I personally don't think his plan is going to work out for him. I really liked how you wrote the tree falling scene; I've just decided that it is my favorite part of the story so far.
Also, is Ashfur in this story? I noticed he wasn't in the alliances or anything.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 10, 2017 13:22:52 GMT -5
🎃 I have to agree with foxdance when she says the tree falling scene is my favorite part.
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Post by » ѕнαdσω ⚔️ on Oct 10, 2017 20:56:02 GMT -5
I have caught up! :'D I like how you are sticking to the events of the book series, but I do hope that there is some breaking off point where your story truly diverges from the books. I can see it starting to happen, and I feel like something big is coming, so I'm anxious to see where this will go!
I am enjoying the POV's as well. I know there are certain people who don't like multiple POV's but I've always enjoyed them. (':
Holly is still my favorite
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 11, 2017 10:34:58 GMT -5
prophetNice! She sounds like the stereotypical artist (and also kind of like one of my friends...) They seriously threatened you with detention? Not cool. That sounds like the worst grounding ever - I'd have been bored stiff. And yes, new chapter :3 I hope you will/did enjoy it
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Post by prophet on Oct 11, 2017 10:44:19 GMT -5
prophetNice! She sounds like the stereotypical artist (and also kind of like one of my friends...) They seriously threatened you with detention? Not cool. That sounds like the worst grounding ever - I'd have been bored stiff. And yes, new chapter :3 I hope you will/did enjoy it She is indeed XD It must be interesting to have such a friend, lol
Well, it was one particular teacher, and for some reason absolutely hated it if your attention was not on them at all times, lol. Honestly, it was aweful. I still read at school, though XD My dad figured that out, but wasn't too harsh about it. I'm pretty much a prepetual good child, lol
Love the new chapter~~
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 11, 2017 10:44:21 GMT -5
mintedstar/fur🦇(Is that the Kid? I feel like I'd be really sad if he died ) Well, the mentor thing was partly out of necessity, because Lionblaze and Cinderheart weren't around in this au. But I'm glad you like it; I wanted to give Brightheart an apprentice so much! And yes, chapter one, the brief moment of (semi) peace before all the Clan cats show up. Not to spoil anything, but I definitely want to go back to that feeling at some point. Yay!! And I'm glad you both like the tree cx
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 11, 2017 10:49:33 GMT -5
prophet - She somehow manages to be like the youngest person in the group and the oldest at the same time, so yes, interesting cx And she's the most amazing artist Ugh, we all have that teacher, who you can't work out why they wanted to work with kids in the first place. If reading in class was as rebellious as you got, I can see why :3 Thank you
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 11, 2017 10:56:17 GMT -5
foxdanceWell he's Sol, so who knows what his plan was? You might be right about it not going well though xD And I'm so glad you like that scene!! It took me forever to write; I don't write such action-y scenes very often Ah no, he isn't. I decided the Squirrelflight thing was too complicated to fit in, so we can safely assume he died of greencough. Sorry if you were looking forward to seeing him :/
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 11, 2017 11:07:47 GMT -5
» ѕнαdσω ⚔️Yay! c'x Something big is going to happen. The point of no return is coming pretty soon, but I though it'd be nice to reference canon first. Especially as the tree falling fitted so nicely into what I have planned Coming from the forum queen of multiple povs, that's quite a compliment I love having multiple outlooks on a story; it allows you to play with dramatic irony and other fun things She'll be back, promise
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Post by prophet on Oct 11, 2017 11:23:04 GMT -5
prophet - She somehow manages to be like the youngest person in the group and the oldest at the same time, so yes, interesting cx And she's the most amazing artist Ugh, we all have that teacher, who you can't work out why they wanted to work with kids in the first place. If reading in class was as rebellious as you got, I can see why :3 Oml, lol. That sounds like a fun friend ;3 Ikr? Yeah, I was given lots of freedom and I never had a "teenage rebellion" phase, lol. I just did what I wanted and my parents didn't care XD
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Post by prophet on Oct 11, 2017 11:27:50 GMT -5
@ - Yeah, the new chapter is awesome because it changed everything that happened in the series. I'm really curious to see where it's going, though I have my suspicious. I really like how you built the scene up—I had no idea it was the tree falling scene until Ivypaw went outside. I also think it's pretty awesome that so far, you've been consistant with parallels of the characters—the same, but not quite, with similar circumstances. In all, really enjoying the story so far~
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 11, 2017 11:57:34 GMT -5
prophetYup x'D I'm kind of similar - I'm the oldest, and my younger brother's so much more of a rebel it's hilarious. Thank you!! That's definitely what I was aiming for, so yay! (Would you mind sharing your suspicions? I have such a definite idea of what's happening next so)
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Post by prophet on Oct 11, 2017 13:37:05 GMT -5
prophet Yup x'D I'm kind of similar - I'm the oldest, and my younger brother's so much more of a rebel it's hilarious. Thank you!! That's definitely what I was aiming for, so yay! (Would you mind sharing your suspicions? I have such a definite idea of what's happening next so) @ - Same!!! Oml. And my crazy mom decided to have a third child, smh
No, I don't mind! So I think that Sol is gonna be the new Briarlight, or dead. Holly is probably dead, but I think she'll love, because I think you have plans for her in the future (she did come back in the original series). And as I was considering that, I thought maybe you would make Holly the fourth cat but idk
Please check out my fanfic, A Walk In Darkness.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 11, 2017 15:23:45 GMT -5
mintedstar/fur🦇(Is that the Kid? I feel like I'd be really sad if he died ) Well, the mentor thing was partly out of necessity, because Lionblaze and Cinderheart weren't around in this au. But I'm glad you like it; I wanted to give Brightheart an apprentice so much! And yes, chapter one, the brief moment of (semi) peace before all the Clan cats show up. Not to spoil anything, but I definitely want to go back to that feeling at some point. Yay!! And I'm glad you both like the tree cx
🎃 (Yes, yes... RIP Kid. And broken keeps screaming 'noooo' at me, so I feel so guilty...but...it's been planned from day one... So maybe he wont be gone for good, but it is going to be where he dies.) Yessss! Brightheart needs an apprentice! And the latest chapter recaptured a lot of that, I must say.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 12, 2017 10:43:48 GMT -5
prophet - Older siblings unite! Actually, I also have 2 siblings - this is getting kind of spooky. You'd better be prepared for chaos to break loose when your youngest sibling reaches their rebellion stage. Hmm, interesting... We'll just have to see if you're right :3
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 12, 2017 10:49:04 GMT -5
mintedstar/fur🦇 - (Aww no! I won't give you any more flak for it... Resurrection/ghost plots are always a thing, you're right!) *marches on the Erins' headquarters* Brightheart must have an apprentice! Thank you
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Post by prophet on Oct 12, 2017 12:37:04 GMT -5
prophet - Older siblings unite! Actually, I also have 2 siblings - this is getting kind of spooky. You'd better be prepared for chaos to break loose when your youngest sibling reaches their rebellion stage. Hmm, interesting... We'll just have to see if you're right :3 @ - Older Sibling Force, go! I hope it's not two brothers, omg Yeah, that won't be for a long time. He's two, lol. I'll be living in my own house by the time he gets there, haha We'll see
Please check out my fanfic, Listen
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 12, 2017 19:46:14 GMT -5
🎃 (I like knowing he is loved. So I don't mind, but I keep trying to figure out how to keep him on, at least for brief pops-in. And I might just bring him in from an alt-timeline, or from further in the past, or keep him frozen just before his death. TPH has a lot of resurrection/ghost options. ;D )
*joins the march*
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 13, 2017 14:23:39 GMT -5
prophet - Haha no, thank goodness! One brother and one sister. xD I kind of wish I had a sibling that age. My sister's 12, which is waay past the cute stage. mintedstar/fur🦇 - (That is a LOT of options xD So you have no excuse! Do you have other characters in TPH for when he's dead?) *aggressively waves Mint's rolling pin*
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Post by foxdance on Oct 13, 2017 22:15:48 GMT -5
foxdance Well he's Sol, so who knows what his plan was? You might be right about it not going well though xD And I'm so glad you like that scene!! It took me forever to write; I don't write such action-y scenes very often Ah no, he isn't. I decided the Squirrelflight thing was too complicated to fit in, so we can safely assume he died of greencough. Sorry if you were looking forward to seeing him :/ lol it's fine. I never liked Ashfur anyways; I was just curious.
I have trouble writing action scenes, too! I find it hard to balance between too fast -paced and too slow -paced. But the tree falling scene was really interesting to me, because the way you wrote it made it really exciting but also had an eerie note to it. Can't wait for the next chapter; I'm wondering how alive Sol is going to be.
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Post by prophet on Oct 14, 2017 6:15:11 GMT -5
~Sapphire~ - Ok, that was close, lol It has it's pros and cons. But since I'm older now, it's a lot different than with my (oldest) younger brother. It's still weird thinking that I have another brother, tbh. My mom thought she wouldn't be able to have more kids, so. She's 38, but there were some complications with her womb
Please check out my fanfic, Listen
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Oct 14, 2017 15:14:13 GMT -5
foxdanceHaha same! Glad I could give you a sort of answer, then c: Agreed :/ I find that description's the hardest part; too little and the scene takes place in a void, too much and you lose the sense of urgency. Thank you! Eerie is definitely what I want I started work on it this morning, so hopefully you won't have too long to wait c; prophetIndeed x'D I don't actually know that many three sibling families irl either Yeah, I can see how that'd be a shock to the system. Congrats to your mum, though!
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Post by prophet on Oct 14, 2017 22:13:07 GMT -5
~Sapphire~ - same, most are five or more, lol Thanks ^^ She really loves kids, and has wanted another one for a long time.
Please check out my fanfic, Listen
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Oct 14, 2017 23:37:03 GMT -5
prophet - Haha no, thank goodness! One brother and one sister. xD I kind of wish I had a sibling that age. My sister's 12, which is waay past the cute stage. mintedstar/fur🦇 - (That is a LOT of options xD So you have no excuse! Do you have other characters in TPH for when he's dead?) *aggressively waves Mint's rolling pin*
🎃 (Yeah...over 28 that I want to use. o.O)
Steal my rolling pin, will you. Now I can't work out plot kinks...
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