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Captain Americat
"Don't frown, someone could be falling in love with your smile." - Teen Wolf
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Post by Captain Americat on Dec 3, 2016 19:11:54 GMT -5
That makes a sense (: Dishes used to be my chore, but now I just do it to help out xD Have you found somewhere new? (: House shopping is always interesting.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 3, 2016 19:19:30 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayYee, we found a lot of houses and there's one my mom likes a lot so hopefully we sell this one and then move into the new one.
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#f0a9e4
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Captain Americat
"Don't frown, someone could be falling in love with your smile." - Teen Wolf
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Post by Captain Americat on Dec 3, 2016 19:53:11 GMT -5
That's good! (:
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Post by Deleted on Dec 3, 2016 19:59:12 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayMhm X3 how was your day?
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#f0a9e4
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Captain Americat
"Don't frown, someone could be falling in love with your smile." - Teen Wolf
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Post by Captain Americat on Dec 3, 2016 20:01:40 GMT -5
It was good (: watched the Hannah Montana marathon on Disney xD hbu?
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Post by Deleted on Dec 3, 2016 20:05:05 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of Daywas pretty much here for the entire day XDD well besides doing the dishes and taking a shower but other than that I was here XDDD
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sɪʟᴠᴇʀᴏᴡʟ ☾
rood yelling meanie
be cunning and full of tricks
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Post by sɪʟᴠᴇʀᴏᴡʟ ☾ on Dec 3, 2016 21:32:20 GMT -5
•♕• hey guys! i have a bunch of worldbuilding notes and i would be eternally greatful if some of you gave parts of it a quick read and told me what you think/what i should add! warning for swearing and like, REALLY BAD TYPOS AND GRAMMAR they are all from the notes on my phone and i havent really gone and organied them over the past, like, two years here is the link•♔• I think your world is absolutely marvelous! There are a lot of things that do need to be fixed like you said, typos and grammar. You should go over them and organize your thoughts a bit better as it is all over the place. Lots of things are not explained till later on, so it's hard to read at first. •♕• yeah, well its not supposed to be super organized lexicon or anything. like literally its what you said, an all-over-the-place collection of thoughts. im planning on making a separate document when i have more things figured out. also when the docs table of contents tool works what parts did you like? dislike? beyond the organization/grammar/typos (trust me i know about those lol) •♔•
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 3, 2016 21:35:20 GMT -5
For some reason it kind of grosses me out when it comes to washing dishes (other people's food are on them and possibly their salvia and it seems gross even though I'm not exactly a germaphobe) so I usually only put them away, not wash them. :/
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Post by Deleted on Dec 3, 2016 21:45:03 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayYeah it used to bother me specifically when my mom would throw things away from the fridge and some of it was bad and smelt nasty I almost threw up. And we have a garbage disposal in our sink so I have to push all of that down there.
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 3, 2016 22:04:48 GMT -5
Yeah. :/ Plus sometimes my parents eat things that I wouldn't eat myself so it kind of gets gross. (They say I'm a picky eater. cx)
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Post by Deleted on Dec 3, 2016 22:06:08 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayI am too so you're good X3 although they call me weird because I like to eat weird food at times like sweet and spicy Doritos.
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 3, 2016 22:20:37 GMT -5
Same. cx I don't think I'd mind too much washing my own dishes though.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 3, 2016 22:26:38 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayProbably not saddly I don't have a choice got wash em so I don't have much to do after dinner.
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Post by Dreamers Delight on Dec 3, 2016 23:58:35 GMT -5
I think your world is absolutely marvelous! There are a lot of things that do need to be fixed like you said, typos and grammar. You should go over them and organize your thoughts a bit better as it is all over the place. Lots of things are not explained till later on, so it's hard to read at first. •♕• yeah, well its not supposed to be super organized lexicon or anything. like literally its what you said, an all-over-the-place collection of thoughts. im planning on making a separate document when i have more things figured out. also when the docs table of contents tool works what parts did you like? dislike? beyond the organization/grammar/typos (trust me i know about those lol) •♔• I think you need to have more of an explanation of what the Vele is and the 8 original. As well, how was the evil 1 able to create beings? Also the eros and other species you had, go into more detail on what they were, what they looked like and how they worked. Perhaps go more in depth of the role of the royal family? A question that pops up is; what is the royal family needed for? It seems the people are self governing from the Vele/energy, perhaps they are just a symbolism or bigger? I really liked that you brought in your own idea for genders, language and hair styles. I really thought the hair styles representing parts of a persons life and heritage were very unique. Learning about the different hair styles and braids was probably my favorite (Though I've never spoke with anyone about world building before) Edit: There's also a lot of confusion when you talk about Vele-born things. I think I understood what you were trying to get at, but you called humans and elves vele-born while I think you were trying to call other creatures non vele-born. But you had ended up calling them both vele-born when it seemed you were trying to differentiate between the two.
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 4, 2016 9:08:35 GMT -5
Hello! ;3
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#f0a9e4
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Captain Americat
"Don't frown, someone could be falling in love with your smile." - Teen Wolf
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Post by Captain Americat on Dec 4, 2016 12:06:07 GMT -5
Hey! (:
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 4, 2016 12:36:49 GMT -5
How's it going?
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 13:16:57 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayHello X3
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 4, 2016 13:49:52 GMT -5
I'm really happy. :3 I finally got Thunder and Shadow in the mail.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 13:52:40 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayOoooh nice X333
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 4, 2016 14:05:01 GMT -5
Can't wait to read it. C:
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 14:15:49 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayI bet X3 I haven't read anything after the first arc which was a new prophecy when Bluestar was still a leader. She's my favorite character XDD
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 15:02:28 GMT -5
»Gooooood morning fellow forumers.
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 15:04:36 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayMorning X3
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 15:13:28 GMT -5
»Err well I guess it's more afternoon now isnt it xD
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 15:21:23 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayYeah XDD it's 2:21 here
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Post by Maplestone360 on Dec 4, 2016 15:40:52 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayI bet X3 I haven't read anything after the first arc which was a new prophecy when Bluestar was still a leader. She's my favorite character XDD
You should read the rest! They're great! :3
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Post by Deleted on Dec 4, 2016 15:47:14 GMT -5
Character | Age | Location | Time Of DayI will when I get the rest because I'm poor XDDD
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#f0a9e4
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Captain Americat
"Don't frown, someone could be falling in love with your smile." - Teen Wolf
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Post by Captain Americat on Dec 4, 2016 15:50:21 GMT -5
I'm really happy. :3 I finally got Thunder and Shadow in the mail. Awesome! I asked for it for Christmas (:
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Post by Saint Ambrosef on Dec 4, 2016 16:28:03 GMT -5
please help. i have a notepad on my phone that i use to write down writing thoughts so i dont forget them, and the idea is to unload it on this document every now and then. but now it's been months and its grown into a 3k word monster
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