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Post by Pyropelt on Mar 11, 2019 22:53:31 GMT -5
Chapters 7 & 8 were great! I liked the action scenes where Tide tried to die. I like the detail you put into his frantic mindset too, it gave off a good desperate feel to the story! Ooh he re-met the cat who tried to kill him. Tbh I didn't even remember him so I reread the 6th chapter. But it was still neat! Woah I didn't think Tide would see Storm so soon! And in his mind? That was interesting!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Mar 12, 2019 13:15:50 GMT -5
Great chapter! Honestly Tide, just admit you care about Storm already!
Some interesting developments here... Sounds like we've not heard the last of Barkfur. And yes, we finally get to find out what Tide did! I'm leaning towards Tide betraying his Clan - whatever he did exactly, I reckon he acted out of self interest rather than malice.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 12, 2019 14:27:53 GMT -5
Chapters 7 & 8 were great! I liked the action scenes where Tide tried to die. I like the detail you put into his frantic mindset too, it gave off a good desperate feel to the story! Ooh he re-met the cat who tried to kill him. Tbh I didn't even remember him so I reread the 6th chapter. But it was still neat! Woah I didn't think Tide would see Storm so soon! And in his mind? That was interesting! Oh, yes, I really enjoyed writing about his frantic and desperate feelings this time around. Glad you really enjoyed it! I figured it would be harder to remember Barkfur, but I enjoy putting in those small scenes and details to foreshadow trouble with them later.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 12, 2019 14:30:06 GMT -5
Great chapter! Honestly Tide, just admit you care about Storm already!
Some interesting developments here... Sounds like we've not heard the last of Barkfur. And yes, we finally get to find out what Tide did! I'm leaning towards Tide betraying his Clan - whatever he did exactly, I reckon he acted out of self interest rather than malice. Tide is a stubborn kitty :3
I'm honestly really hyped to write about what Tide did, to finally reveal details. And it's always fun to see what theories you guys have about characters. Any ideas what he might have done exactly?
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Post by phantomstar57 on Mar 12, 2019 16:10:29 GMT -5
I think he accidentally caused someone to die. Either by not doing what he should have done to help out, hesitating too long, or by being a coward and running away.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 12, 2019 16:31:45 GMT -5
I think he accidentally caused someone to die. Either by not doing what he should have done to help out, hesitating too long, or by being a coward and running away. Oh yeah,more theories! This one is pretty interesting, too. I suppose I can at least confirm that someone is dead because of him, but how and why, you'll have to read for :3
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 12, 2019 16:54:32 GMT -5
Just added a piece of art and more fun facts, if anyone wants to check them out.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Mar 13, 2019 8:25:23 GMT -5
Great chapter! Honestly Tide, just admit you care about Storm already!
Some interesting developments here... Sounds like we've not heard the last of Barkfur. And yes, we finally get to find out what Tide did! I'm leaning towards Tide betraying his Clan - whatever he did exactly, I reckon he acted out of self interest rather than malice. Tide is a stubborn kitty :3
I'm honestly really hyped to write about what Tide did, to finally reveal details. And it's always fun to see what theories you guys have about characters. Any ideas what he might have done exactly? That new art's beautiful, Sea! I'm in awe And we're all hyped for you to reveal it! Um, I like Phantom's theory of him failing to protect his Clan. Maybe he was too lazy to mend a breach in their defences, or refused to put himself in danger to deliver a warning?
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 13, 2019 11:22:30 GMT -5
Thank you! I'm happy it turned out so well.
That's also interesting. Being lazy and selfish are definitely his typical traits, for sure. I can say that much.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 17, 2019 19:20:50 GMT -5
Bump
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Post by scint on Mar 17, 2019 20:49:45 GMT -5
I've finally caught up, and I really love this story so far!
Fan me?
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Post by phantomstar57 on Mar 21, 2019 22:14:33 GMT -5
Love the art! And the additional fun facts!!
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 24, 2019 16:25:49 GMT -5
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Post by phantomstar57 on Mar 24, 2019 20:49:22 GMT -5
OMG cliff hang me why don't ya? LOL Great chapter, and it is full of raw emotion. I look forward to Chapt 10.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 24, 2019 22:56:10 GMT -5
phantomstar57 thank you very much! Gotta love cliffhangers and nothing but emotions!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Mar 25, 2019 9:55:28 GMT -5
Poor Tide - his dad's the one who really deserves eternal punishment here And I called him and Storm being together!
I'm willing to bet that his worst memory is Storm's death. Or the events leading up to it anyway.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 25, 2019 10:55:50 GMT -5
Yeah, hide father is a huge jerk, but so was just about everyone else in the clan in their own ways, except Mint(the healer) and Storm herself.
That's a good guess. I obviously can't say much, but it's a good guess.
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Post by phantomstar57 on Mar 25, 2019 12:02:03 GMT -5
phantomstar57 thank you very much! Gotta love cliffhangers and nothing but emotions! From chapter to chapter they are ok and work great to keep the reader going, LOL But at the end of an arc or TV show season or worse a movie, I despise them LOL. But great job!
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Mar 25, 2019 13:41:55 GMT -5
True, true. Definitely a case of them creating their own villain.
Out of interest, how long is the story going to last after these reveals?
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 25, 2019 17:21:30 GMT -5
phantomstar57 I know exactly what you mean! I don't mind cliffhangers in chapters or shows of a series, but when it come to the ending of anything, movies included, it's not okay. I want a good, satisfying ending! ~Sapphire~ Honestly, I'm not entirely sure. It'll go on for a while yet, because there will still be more things to uncover and to deal with, such as the war between the clans and Tide still trying to get to Paradise - or at least be rid of his curse. So, it will still have a little while yet.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 29, 2019 14:23:09 GMT -5
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Post by darkfeather88 on Mar 29, 2019 22:51:31 GMT -5
Sorry for not commenting sooner...
In a way, I want Tide to find some peace... Being forced to live for a long time would have some side effects...
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Mar 30, 2019 11:49:15 GMT -5
Sorry for not commenting sooner... In a way, I want Tide to find some peace... Being forced to live for a long time would have some side effects... No need to apologize! I'm always happy to know when people read and enjoy my work, though. You're right, being alive for so long does have its negative effects for sure. Would you like me to add you to the fan list, so you're tagged and notified each time a new chapter is added?
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Apr 2, 2019 13:52:42 GMT -5
Bump
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Post by Pyropelt on Apr 3, 2019 14:02:29 GMT -5
Wow I am surprised that it was Feather who accidentally kicked her off the cliff. On one hand it's sad but at the same time interesting because you didn't put anything about him after that, making the focus of Storm's hate for a long while be on Tide.
And I was shocked how him not saving Storm and leading the rats to camp was his final deed that ultimately got him stuck in the Void for a bit. But I love how you tied all that in with the beginning!
Plus, I like how you had a great talk and emotion packed chapter with Tide's life growing up, to his relationship with Storm. And then have Tide feel so much remorse while watching his memories, knowing he can't change them is just great.
Oh and the battles were good too.
And that vow at the end, how he'll try hard for the new cats in his life? Warmed my heart!
I do wonder though after all this newfound turning over a new leaf for Tide, if he will accidentally let something slip to Cloudleap?
You write so good, I continue to be impressed with every story of yours.
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Post by phantomstar57 on Apr 3, 2019 14:39:34 GMT -5
Dang missed the poll butt it was a bit unexpected-the vermin that is. Great job.
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Post by 🍁Searipple101🍁 on Apr 4, 2019 1:21:57 GMT -5
Pyropelt So happy you enjoyed it so much! This one was very exciting to write. We may see more of Feather later, perhaps. But, for now, it's definitely Tide and Storm's time. Watching the memories go by is truly an amazing time, I think. But will his vow actually hold true? he may not keep it, knowing him. but we shall see. *quiet, evil laughter* phantomstar57 Yeah, I knew the rat thing would probably get people, but I did foreshadow it. I believe it was the chapter right before, or perhaps the one before that, when Tide first sees how mangled she is, she comments how she must look like a pack of rats got to her. And she wasn't wrong! But always glad you liked it!
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Post by phantomstar57 on Apr 4, 2019 10:23:14 GMT -5
Pyropelt So happy you enjoyed it so much! This one was very exciting to write. We may see more of Feather later, perhaps. But, for now, it's definitely Tide and Storm's time. Watching the memories go by is truly an amazing time, I think. But will his vow actually hold true? he may not keep it, knowing him. but we shall see. *quiet, evil laughter* phantomstar57 Yeah, I knew the rat thing would probably get people, but I did foreshadow it. I believe it was the chapter right before, or perhaps the one before that, when Tide first sees how mangled she is, she comments how she must look like a pack of rats got to her. And she wasn't wrong! But always glad you liked it! L OL yep you did with that little tidbit, but I didn't catch it enough to think rats would be her demise.
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