Rує
So many story ideas, and so little time!
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Post by Rує on Jun 25, 2017 10:28:30 GMT -5
Blackstar sure changed his mind there quickly. xP
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jun 25, 2017 12:58:59 GMT -5
When you have a family to think of, Tigerstar isn't as scary as the next season of greencough.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jun 25, 2017 13:26:24 GMT -5
Like the new chapter! One question though: when Smokepaw says he's trained for 6 moons, does that mean there's been a time skip or is Smokepaw lying? Edit: the only spelling mistake I saw was 'horse' where I think you mean 'hoarse', otherwise you're good c; Time skip. I'll probably show some way to express that in the next chapter, but I couldn't think how to in this one. ^^' Ah, something to fix! Be right back. Okay, thank you (: Maybe just add 'six moons later' in italics at the beginning of the chapter? Kind of obvious but it does work.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jun 25, 2017 13:59:57 GMT -5
xD Alright! I'll go do that. And marvel at the fact I didn't consider doing that...
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Post by phantomstar57 on Jun 25, 2017 14:16:52 GMT -5
Finally caught up with this story and Tigerstar's betrayal. Both are great but my issue is the grey backgrounds and the light fonts. Bolding them would help me:-) But I am reading!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jun 25, 2017 17:18:28 GMT -5
I can bold it! Be right back.
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Post by phantomstar57 on Jun 25, 2017 20:49:39 GMT -5
I can bold it! Be right back. THANK you!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jun 25, 2017 20:52:49 GMT -5
No problem.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 10, 2017 18:43:43 GMT -5
Chapter 10 up! As usual, see any mistakes, inform me and I'll get right on it. :3
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Post by 𝓓𝓪𝓻𝓽𝓱 𝓑𝓻𝓪𝓶𝓫𝓵𝓮 on Jul 11, 2017 17:19:18 GMT -5
Great as always! However, you said that Blackstar would turn him into Tigerstar... like he becomes tigerstar. Other than that, nothing that I noticed is wrong
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 11, 2017 17:21:24 GMT -5
Thank you very much!
Ah! The mandatory error! Really odd error. o.O Thank you. I shall go fix that now.
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Post by 𝓓𝓪𝓻𝓽𝓱 𝓑𝓻𝓪𝓶𝓫𝓵𝓮 on Jul 11, 2017 17:24:32 GMT -5
Just my typical critic... nothing to thank me about.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 11, 2017 17:26:02 GMT -5
Hey, I get where you are coming from. I did ask that if anyone saw an error to say as such. Grammar's a weakness, so I need all the help I can get. So, you get a thank you. <3
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Post by 𝓓𝓪𝓻𝓽𝓱 𝓑𝓻𝓪𝓶𝓫𝓵𝓮 on Jul 11, 2017 17:31:23 GMT -5
You say that to the cat who can't grammer to save their life xD
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 11, 2017 17:43:42 GMT -5
*shrugs* Welcome to the club.
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Post by Owlmoon on Jul 13, 2017 12:54:24 GMT -5
Heyyyyyyyyyyy) How ya doin' Mint?
- Owlmoon
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Post by Owlmoon on Jul 13, 2017 12:57:04 GMT -5
Heeeeellllllllllloo typo: “Shhh, don’t look so panicked. He can't (? right?) do anything to you.”
- Owlmoon
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 13, 2017 15:29:27 GMT -5
Heyyyyyyyyyyy) How ya doin' Mint?
- Owlmoon I'm doing pretty good. Thanks for asking.
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Post by Owlmoon on Jul 13, 2017 15:38:35 GMT -5
Heyyyyyyyyyyy) How ya doin' Mint?
- Owlmoon I'm doing pretty good. Thanks for asking. No problem! Can't wait for the new chapter! ^^
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 13, 2017 15:43:56 GMT -5
I'll have the next chapter up tomorrow.
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Post by Dingoleap on Jul 13, 2017 18:38:42 GMT -5
I have a lot of reading to do O.o Hope to catch up with this on the weekend!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 13, 2017 18:44:06 GMT -5
xD By then there will be another chapter up.
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Post by Dingoleap on Jul 13, 2017 18:52:10 GMT -5
So far behind XD
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 13, 2017 19:00:05 GMT -5
You'll get there.
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Post by Owlmoon on Jul 14, 2017 7:34:17 GMT -5
*coughs* New chapter! *is excited*
- Owlmoon
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Hyenafang
"I do not support Seaworld or any Marine Parks that exploit Cenaceans!"
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Post by Hyenafang on Jul 14, 2017 8:31:45 GMT -5
This is really good. I just read the first five chapters! Unfortunately it's 11:30pm here so I'll have to read the rest later.
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 14, 2017 13:52:36 GMT -5
;D Glad you like it!
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Jul 21, 2017 23:49:24 GMT -5
Chapter 11 up~!
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Post by Owlmoon on Jul 22, 2017 7:04:07 GMT -5
OH LORDY WHY MUST YOU KILL ME WITH THE CLIFF MINT HOW DARE YOU I WANNA READ MOOOOOOOOOOORE
- Owlmoon
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