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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Mar 25, 2017 22:46:29 GMT -5
Cool! An update!
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Post by Brownie on Mar 25, 2017 23:01:34 GMT -5
mhm there was only a little left to write for this part I was stuck so it's a bit shorter than I would have thought it would be but it has all the pieces, just less fluff
part six shouldn't take as long, it's already mostly done.
and glad you guys are enjoying my ramblings off an old idea xD
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Mar 26, 2017 8:42:12 GMT -5
Nice chapter! It's nice to see Tempestpaw growing up a bit there.
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Post by Brownie on Mar 26, 2017 8:50:51 GMT -5
heh yeah seeing people walk up walls really snaps things into perspective rather quickly. xD but thanks definitively the most challenging one to write yet
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Post by Brownie on Mar 26, 2017 10:57:12 GMT -5
added the summary for the recent part.
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Post by Brownie on Mar 26, 2017 13:08:05 GMT -5
mk here's a little bit of fun stuff because why not:
Siva - In their language, Se is the pronoun for 'he/she/it' and irival is the verb 'to be corrupt' so the word Siva is a play on words to mean 'it is corrupt' Svans - similarly, Se is 'he/she/it' and -van is a suffix to mean alone. So the ones who are lonely.
Both of these terms are relatively new to 'Siva' only having been added since the Star was stolen and their world fell into 'corruption' The old world would have been named Neimera (literally 'our world')
The herb Ghostflight gave Tempest to help with his headache was called Garre, a large spiky plant sort of like aloe that grows upside down in caverns. The medicinal properties come mostly from it's roots, which are thin and spindly but can block pain receptors in the brain if reacted with water and nitrogen. The plant is common, but the roots are hard to harvest due to their fragility and the fact that they can grow right through stone!
The mixture Ghostflight gave Tempest to cure his okmae eye problem was a paste of Theshan bark toned down with Fireweed petals. Raw Theshan bark is toxic, but when mixed with Fireweed petals and frozen it is a very effective treatment for traumatic stress. Ghostflight had measured out the herbs correctly, and told the truth when he told Tempest he had an allergic reaction to it, causing Tempest to experience far greater effects (like being put under light anesthetics instead of only lessening the pressures on his brain). Ghostflight gave him a poppy seed wrapped in a fireweed petal to knock him out, hoping the added fireweed could fight the Theshan bark's effects. The whole time, there was a risk that he would either never wake up or, if he did, be quite insane. Luckily he ended up being fine, and Ghostflight never told him how close he had been to death there.
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Post by Brownie on Mar 26, 2017 14:14:08 GMT -5
Also sorry, lots of updates on this today. I wasn't expecting the results of this contest to be out so soon!
WON SECOND PLACE IN PIKA'S SHORT CONTEST! 18/20 Title 18/20 Grammar/Spelling 19/20 Plot 18/20 Characters 13/20 Layout
86/100
"The main thing that took your score down was the layout. While I hate this part of judging--mainly because I look mostly at the story itself--I feel it is still an important part of judging. While your layout is straight-forward, and you can find things just fine, I feel it was a bit lacking? I see layouts as sort of a fanfiction's book cover. Readers get their first impression upon clicking your story by how you have it set up. When a layout is pleasing to the eye, a lot of readers become more interested in scrolling through your set up. Honestly your fanfic was great, and the only issue was the layout."
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Mar 26, 2017 14:26:45 GMT -5
Voted.
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Post by Brownie on Mar 26, 2017 15:05:09 GMT -5
;D thx
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Post by Brownie on Mar 27, 2017 16:34:14 GMT -5
rawr
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Post by Brownie on Mar 30, 2017 20:10:36 GMT -5
story of my life:
- write two chapters all at once - post four times in one day - forget everything and come back a week later - repeat
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Post by Brownie on Apr 6, 2017 22:47:57 GMT -5
bonjour
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Post by Brownie on Apr 10, 2017 19:00:23 GMT -5
thx for polling guys and working on this I promise but I reallllly don't like the way this next scene is thrown together as it feels like it's there because plot convenience and less what-would-actually-happen which it really is a mix of both but I don't want it to sound written it's a story not a novel
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Post by Brownie on Apr 10, 2017 19:32:56 GMT -5
OKAYOKWAYOKFKAFSL I FINALLY HAVE A FINAL PLOT OUTLINE FOR THIS AND JESUS IT IS ONE OF MY FAVS IN A LONG WHILE just so excited omgggggg this plot took forever to come to me and now it's here and I only need to iron out little details (like backstory motives) and it will be completely a THING gahhhh hopefully it'll be a bit of a twist too because I for one never saw this one coming. Like, at all. But it is and it's so gooood okie done with the rant. but seriously excited to finish this out. As it stands, it's looking to be at least 25 parts, perhaps more if I can get a sideplot developed quick enough. Also as a curiosity thing, what do you guys think of the characters you met so far? Who's your favorite? Least favorite? Most likely to cuddle?most interested on opinions of the development of Tempest and Ghost, but any of the minor characters too.☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ mintedstar/fur🦇 Owlmoon Tawnyfire ~Sapphire~
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Post by ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ on Apr 10, 2017 19:43:56 GMT -5
I like Tenpestpaw a lot. He's so sassy and headstrong. It makes for a good main character, since he's so resistant to being a nightstalker and learning all about the fantasy/mystical aspects. It makes for a wild ride especially with the other apprentices jumping in. Willow paw is a good side character, kinda like a foil for Tempest's personality
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 10, 2017 19:45:00 GMT -5
Cool!
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Post by Brownie on Apr 10, 2017 20:03:41 GMT -5
I like Tenpestpaw a lot. He's so sassy and headstrong. It makes for a good main character, since he's so resistant to being a nightstalker and learning all about the fantasy/mystical aspects. It makes for a wild ride especially with the other apprentices jumping in. Willow paw is a good side character, kinda like a foil for Tempest's personality thanks for the feedback it's really appreciated cx I need to know if they're coming off right because plot thanks so much so helpful //throws cookies at
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Post by Brownie on Apr 11, 2017 13:58:14 GMT -5
I'm actually starting to fear this may grow a bit too complex? Like there are so many little plots going on (or that I want to go on) and I'm a little afraid it may get too complicated to make sense merp at least I'm having ideas which is better than the last two months
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Post by mintedstar/fur🦇 on Apr 11, 2017 14:37:31 GMT -5
We'll tell you if it gets to complex. I really like complex story lines. Where all the plots come together in the end. It's a beautiful thing.
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Post by Brownie on Apr 11, 2017 19:46:41 GMT -5
heh hopefully it works out that way cx
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Post by Brownie on Apr 13, 2017 21:31:13 GMT -5
rewriting p6.3
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Post by Brownie on Apr 19, 2017 14:30:00 GMT -5
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Apr 19, 2017 18:09:09 GMT -5
yO ;D this is really good so far !!!! i love it ;D
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Post by Brownie on Apr 19, 2017 20:03:58 GMT -5
heyyyyy it's been a while how's it going?
thankies
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Post by ✨ ιηνєяѕєяєαℓιту on Apr 19, 2017 22:10:30 GMT -5
a mix of good and bad lol on the downside the company i worked for went out of business so now i'm unemployed )': and my boyfriend was supposed to be moved to my state by now but things keep screwing that up >BU but on the good side ! i'm growing a garden on my dresser full of cacti, succulents, and air plants lol, and i'm doing well in my classes which is great cuz it's been awhile, and just generally aside from the aforementioned two things my life is actually really chill right now!! which has never happened before!! lol ;D how about you??? o:
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Post by Brownie on Apr 19, 2017 22:21:04 GMT -5
I'm in a similar boat with the work situation. But they just had cuts instead because they got a new supervisor or something up the chain. Hoping to get a job at the library tbh that would be fun. But sounds awesome I'm glad you're getting some time to chill <33
but yeah about the same. Have a lot of studying because finals in a few weeks but other than that I've been having a lot of time to do my own thing which usually means gaming and drawing. Little bit of writing, usually the 1-2k words in one sitting and then not writing for a week type deal
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Post by Brownie on Apr 23, 2017 11:49:35 GMT -5
thinking about thissssss so frustrated tho this 6.3 is going bad every single time I want to have it go a certain way but it feels fake and it's really bugging me at this point I'm going to try one last time and probably just put it up however it comes out because I'm sick of writing it over and over and not liking it. I just need to move past it and accept that there'll be an awkward 500 words crammed in the middle that I can fix later lol.
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Post by Brownie on Apr 23, 2017 18:34:42 GMT -5
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Post by Brownie on Apr 23, 2017 20:32:10 GMT -5
also the second longest part I didn't even realize heh the second three part part both of the firsts were 2 (obviously at 4.7k that monster)
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Post by Brownie on Apr 24, 2017 7:58:46 GMT -5
summary up too
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