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Post by Brownie on Jan 15, 2017 11:15:08 GMT -5
@mintedstardur ?? xD
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Post by Brownie on Jan 15, 2017 15:21:05 GMT -5
mk so I decided last night, when trying to come up with some speech patterns for characters, that the ONLY first person POV (so far) will be Tempest. Spark and any other POV changes will be in third person. There's a reason why too but that'll be for later and is kinda (okay really) a big spoiler so for now, that's all you really need to know, just so it isn't "BANG THIRD PERSON NOW" kinda thing.
so summary: Tempest is first person; alt POV's are third.
(and yes, this means part III is nearing completion. Or at least has 3+ pages and going strong)
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 15, 2017 15:35:47 GMT -5
Review delivered c;
So far, Star Rose is a very intriguing read. The thought that must have gone into the worldbuilding is incredible. The main character, Tempestpaw, is well-rounded and impossible not to feel for, with a distinctive 'voice' which adds a neat dimension of humour to the writing, and the large cast of minor characters all feel distinct. The inclusion of humour in a predominantly serious story is a rare gift and the author pulls it off well. The writing style is assured and very readable, particularly in action scenes. My main gripe is that the story feels quite rushed. We learn a lot about the world and magic in the first few parts, with little time to process it; it would be better to let the reader discover these details as the plot develops, rather than putting your cards on the table at the start, so to speak. As well, Tempestpaw's address of the reader is once or twice taken too far and could be trimmed. However, all in all Star Rose is a very well-written fic that has a lot of potential for future installments.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 15, 2017 15:49:21 GMT -5
thx <3 And congrats on being a leprechaun heh.
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Post by ~Sapphire~ on Jan 15, 2017 16:42:17 GMT -5
No problem! Kinda sorry to post this bc I lose the rank xp
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Post by Brownie on Jan 15, 2017 18:00:07 GMT -5
;D Did you at least get a screenshot? Also what a coincidence heh
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Post by ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ on Jan 15, 2017 19:05:06 GMT -5
Ooh, please post part III soon I can't wait!
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Post by Brownie on Jan 15, 2017 20:20:13 GMT -5
☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽It'll be soon. Pinky promise ;D just need to finish watching this anime first oooops
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Post by Brownie on Jan 16, 2017 12:42:07 GMT -5
when you realize you made two suffix errors in the allegiances Goals
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Post by Brownie on Jan 16, 2017 13:32:17 GMT -5
wrote another part. it's a bit too cliche and dramatic, but I've stopped caring about that sort of thing. Also sorry, Ghostflight is a bit out of character? But it didn't make sense to put anyone else in that role soooooooooooo
I'll probably put it up wednesday or something to give y'all some time and me a buffer. works better this way.
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Post by Tawnyfire on Jan 16, 2017 14:00:21 GMT -5
and here comes Sparkpaw's wrath on Tempestpaw; I feel bad for him now.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 16, 2017 14:25:55 GMT -5
Yeah the poor little child being attacked left and right </3
I actually feel worse for Sparkpaw here, honestly. I tried to drop hints. xDD
But actually getting work done cuz paladins is down rip. although I just got a ping on discord saying they're back up so I doubt more than part IV will be done today. It went better than I thought it would. Hopefully y'all will get a laugh out of it. ;D
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Post by Brownie on Jan 17, 2017 9:08:45 GMT -5
I have good news and bad news. Bad news: I moved the release date for the next part to saturday. Good news: I'm bad at keeping deadlines, so here it is now ;D Also good news, there's a deleted scene in this, so look forward to at least the writing, perhaps a comic-style page or short animatic ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ mintedstar/fur🦇 Owlmoon Tawnyfire
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Post by ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ on Jan 17, 2017 18:35:45 GMT -5
Ooh, I love all of this magic stuff! When you mix it with the relations among the apprentices it's really good.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 18, 2017 15:09:59 GMT -5
thx bro it's p fun
Also my eye is twitching and I can't get it to stop if it continues, I may have to audition to be a zombie in a horror film the only thing I'll put on my resume: "has creepy eye" I'll always win.
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Post by ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ on Jan 18, 2017 17:32:56 GMT -5
lol I hope it stops soon haha.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 18, 2017 18:26:17 GMT -5
me too.
Although that would be a fun career hmm
also when you change your in-game language to french and call it studying.
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Post by ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ on Jan 18, 2017 18:30:27 GMT -5
Haha, yes, I could see that. *breaks through door with crash scaring poor family* *family dives for cover, "help us!"* *you stand there, eye twitching: "fear me!*
Ooh you take French? I just started learning.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 18, 2017 19:57:38 GMT -5
heh
for five years. Didn't learn much lol honestly, learn latin first it's more interesting and the roots are v similar (sometimes, maybe, actually not really but latin is still better. So is old norse I need to touch up on that it's been a while. Plz I should just study ancient language because I'm in love with them ooooops.) yeah but I'm trying to touch up on it b/c the possibility of me actually going to france is steadily increasing and I want to be prepared if the chance ever arrives. ;D
But yeah being multi-lingual is pretty cool and a unique experience. I'm glad most schools are making it a requirement nowadays, although it's usually just a year or two of credit needed for graduation? dunno. I just want to travel a bit, and language keeps my options past being just an ignorant tourist. It's also pretty much a necessity as a gamer nowadays too soooooooo. It helps that most of my friends are also bi- (or tri- or deca-) lingual. Funny thing is all our languages are different, so we like to joke around by saying things the others don't understand (even though we have a wide enough base that most of us can infer meanings of words by now, and I swear I can read german).
It's just so interesting to know that all languages have their own little nuances and things that don't translate between languages. Each word has a different connotation and denotation and how there are many words for a single thing.
Srsly though I need to finish learning norse. Gah
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Post by ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ on Jan 18, 2017 20:48:34 GMT -5
Yeah I've taken three years of Latin and figured out I don't actually like it. However, I've learned enough to figure out a lot of English definitions when I've never seen a word before. French is fun but I feel like I know a lot of it because of Latin already. And I'd love to take Spanish sometimes because that's so essential if you want to travel the world now. Who knows, maybe I'll try Chinese one day, as that's where I was born and China is becoming a huge economic power, so that may eventually become a big language throughout the world, even more so than it is now.
Other languages really are fascinating. And ooh, you know some Norse? That's really cool!
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Post by Brownie on Jan 18, 2017 22:07:42 GMT -5
awwww poor latin //hugs latin was my favorite even though I only took it for a summer. but yeah it will help you a lot in french, so be glad about that.
I would try learning chinese but honestly it's an intimidating language. Although I'm working on my japanese coughcoughanimecough so I guess that's not an excuse. But that would be awesome to learn the language, and yeah, it probably will end up spreading, at least in the economic areas. I could see that happening.
trying to at least. It's easier than a lot of languages because the grammar is very regular, but it's also sometimes just confusing because words are all jumbled up into endings and different parts of speech are just. . . weird. I guess it's just very different from any other language I've tried to learn, so I have very little to base it on. But it's a blast.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 19, 2017 16:59:53 GMT -5
when in doubt, pascel's triangle always is the answer.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 21, 2017 14:04:09 GMT -5
Well I'm done doing things for the day just beat sans first try yep done I'm content with my day
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Post by ☾ Cʀᴇsᴄᴇɴᴛ ☽ on Jan 21, 2017 18:27:42 GMT -5
Heyo, how's life? And also can't wait for more of this!
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Post by Brownie on Jan 22, 2017 7:22:26 GMT -5
existing. I have a headache from crying too much yesterday tho, which kinda sucks xD wbu?
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Post by Brownie on Jan 22, 2017 13:03:12 GMT -5
I want to put something motivational here but I can't seem to find the inspiration.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 24, 2017 19:42:00 GMT -5
I am King.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 25, 2017 14:57:49 GMT -5
I'm rereading a book I read a while ago and OMG I forgot how awesome it is it's in second person and it is so. good. it's perfect.
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Post by Brownie on Jan 25, 2017 18:46:43 GMT -5
it's cuter than I remembered oh god and has a more open ended end. It's adorable. Now I just want more.
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